Well, this will be my first post on this website. Hello everyone :D

I generally make music for use in the games I make, this one in particular is for someone else's however. The game involves a potato that drives a tank (just to give you an idea of what kind of game it's for.)

http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fusea...endid=451771111

So tell me what you think and listen to the other songs as well if you want to. Also, this site asks you to estimate you're skill level on a scale from 1-10, I was wondering what score members with more experience would give me, personally I have no idea.

Here are some more of my lyrics that could use some feedback. Thanks.


MONKEY CAGE

A Mystery Man with
An Emergency Plan
Message relayed
Confessions delayed

The monkey got out of the cage
The monkey got out of the cage

Monkey Cage
Monkey Cage

Compromised transmission
University tradition

The monkey got out of the cage
The monkey got out of the cage

Monkey Cage
Monkey Cage

Tuesday night calamity
Students and the faculty
Thoroughly investigated
Authority triangulated

The monkey got out of the cage
The monkey got out of the cage
Look out now
The monkey got out of the cage

Monkey Cage
Monkey Cage

© Copyright 2009 RKG, all rights reserved

So I felt really inspired last night and I came up with this, I personally believe it is pretty good, but im open for critics \m/
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BURNING
..............
Saturated steel
from claws of insanity
ripping at the mind
of the broke humanity
corruption at nightfall
come on up you f*cker
let out your voice!

Ramming the poor bastards mind!
Raping his dreams and his life!
Fullfilling the wish of the dark!
I burn! You Burn! We all Burn!
Burning!

Burning!

All Burning!

Reality is here
devouring infamously
feasting on your heart
Hiding notoriously
Depression at downfall
let it be heard my people
join together now!

Shooting the deaf without a sound!
Obliterate the eyes of the blind!
Cares not for the living or dead!
Man Burns! Truth Burns! The World Burns!
Burning!

Yearning!

Mourning!

The Liars choke
The seekers sleep
A star awoke
And mankind keeps
Pollution of misbelief
You see
It burns...
IT ALL BURNS!!!

Flesh Burns! Woods Burns! The Death Earns!
Immortality!

Nothing stand before Insanity!
No one ever interrupt my flee
from pure...
Misery!

for tonight is the night of the fight
the piece of banality in reaching hands
before the graveyard opens the gates
i will go
i will Burn!
Burning!
Forever Burning!

We are all...
BURNING!!!!

Hi there, I'm Roo.

I'm kind of new to recording, and I wonder why everyone seems to be using headphones? In-ear would be better when it comes to sound isolation, right? I'm mostly wondering because I only have in-ear, and I don't want to buy new ones unless it's really necessary. I mainly record vocals.

Hey guys, I posted my first song here, and got some constructive feedback. I decided to take that and try to reform my lyrics. Hopefully everyone likes this, give me all feedback, positive or negative. I really appreciate it. *Genre = Acoustic*

Title: Untitled --> (Help with title?)

[Verse 1]
I admire your walk
Amazed when you talk
Everything you say
Takes my breath away
All the things you do
When you don't mean to
Makes me fall for you more
Than I ever did before.

[Verse 2]
I know you've caught me
Stealing glances trying to see
What about you is so mesmerizing
I just can't help but idolizing
You're smile defines perfection
Fills me with a sweet affection
Just like every little thing about you.
Cause no one sees you like I do.

[Chorus]
Just thinking about you (thinking about you) --> Echo
You're the one who (You're the one who) --> Echo
Brings the sun on my darkest days
Makes me smile in so many ways
You don't even have to try
To lift me up into the sky
Everything now seems more than fine
But in the end, I know you can't be mine.

[Verse 3]
Every attempt I make is in vain
So I'm left with nothing but pain
You've got me down on my knees
Oh baby, why can't you just see
My heart, you did shatter
Like it didn't even matter
But with all the little pieces still here
My love for you is still clear

[Chorus]

I know you can't be mine... x2

so this is a song i wrote for my band and i just wanna see what you guys think.
you can check out the music it goes it if you want. Its the first song on our myspace page

www.myspace.com/mycityundersiege

thanks


You Would Die Before Your Sword Fell

verse 1

It's too late now, you've lost all hope.
There is nothing left for you to believe in...
You've lost the fight, can't defend yourself.
You were left empty handed, left empty handed...
Your changing now, your growing up,
but somehow you feel helpless inside...
Life is relentless and your not fearless
May the Lord help you get out alive...

Chorus

You've lost control of what little you had.
The rules you set up are breaking yourself down.
You've been betrayed, one too many times.
A head full of doubt, it's starting to weigh you down.

Verse 2

You left this place thinking you wouldn't see it again.
But how could you know, how could you know?...
You created a mess one so meaningless.
What have you done, what have you done?..
Spent the last year asking yourself all these questions.
They were all lies, they were all just lies...
You been here before, down this lonely path.
This is all that you know, all you know...

Interluade

You can't be happy with all that guilt inside.
So Break the chains that hold you back.
Breaking free is the key to happiness.
But it's the fear of the truth that makes you victim..

Chorus

You've lost control of what little you had.
The rules you set up are breaking yourself down.
You've been betrayed, one too many times.
A head full of doubt, it's starting to weigh you down.

Hey

Ok I dug out two Bibi M tracks that haven't been online anywhere since mp3.com first folded in 2002 or so...

Feel It

Absolute

Singer and co-writer is Barbara Matheson on both tracks.

Hope you enjoy them!

Cheers

John

Hi guys

Just posted what i hope will be the final mix of I Am One

I Am One


Verse

Deep in the dark
I hide in my cell
My vision of hell
I won't make a sound
You'll never see me
Until I break free

Chorus

Then i am brilliant
The life, the blood the soul
A spark so resilient
That's set against it all
I am one

Verse

Numb to it all
Weeks tick by
My comatose eyes
I'm So far away
My own inner space
Until I escape


Chorus

Then i am brilliant
The life, the blood the soul
A spark so resilient
That's set against it all
I am one

Bridge

For a moment I see
How it all should be

Chorus

Then i am brilliant
The life, the blood the soul
A spark so resilient
That's set against it all

© John Moxey 2008
All rights reserved

Any and all comments welcome.

Cheers

John

I was just sitting on chatting online when they said 'brb'. I got notepad up and this just typed out, I dont know what I really mean by it.... can you shed any light?


Stone in my head
hand over my face
where im going
is all in a haze
Super they come
I got it in normal
might upgrade later
but not for now

Chorus

Belittling myself
with all this shame
after it all
im never the same
Just reach out ur hand
empty your shoes
its always up to you


Verse 2

Just got the phone
reelings of past tension
not going to care
about what it is
electric feelings
taking me higher
but what goes up
must come down


Chorus

Belittling myself
with all this shame
after it all
im never the same
Just reach out ur hand
empty your shoes
its always up to you

Verse 3

Proud of the situations
after the regrets
just kicking on
with nothing to fret
Mind blank issues
all in the past
take a spin
on my round about