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  1. Cut Her Some Slack

    By Dawn Robertson

    May/2017

     

    From a beautiful land 

    Way before time

    A vision was had

    That a woman was right

     

    For eternity following 

    Men would truly try

    To tear down that woman

    And make her cry

     

    Men always thinking

    A woman's easier to control

    Without self confidence 

    Without friends or her goals

     

    But the contrary realism

    Is far distant from that

    They just want their man

    To love them back

     

    Woman sacrifice and go without

    And not say a word

    They keep things inside

    And bury their hurt

     

    Until one day she just lets it out

    Often years in the making 

    She purges the pain

    Often crying and shaking

     

    Then she is good again

    And just carries on

    Creating a better life for others

    With her wings on

     

    So the next time you feel

    That your woman is crazy

    You must think again

    She is far from lazy

     

    Just take five minutes

    And cut her some slack

    Let her know you see her struggles

    And that you have her back

     

    You will become even closer

    And she will love you even more

    There's nothing better to have

    Then a woman you adore

     

    She will glow like the heavens

    And make you feel complete

    Because she is born to love

    And you are born to receive

    1. Peggy

      Peggy

      Almost missed this..being a status update.  Lovely.

    2. Dawn Robertson

      Dawn Robertson

      Awe thank you Peggy🦋 

       

  2. The music of that song would work well with this lyric ..(forgot to add that)
  3. I like this lyric a lot. It tells a story and makes you keep reading.....luv that. I keep hearing Leona Lewis song ....Footprints In The Sand song.....amazing ....thank you for the journey and keep writing.🦋
  4. Getting To Know You

    Listen just writing lyrics is a good way to make money in the music business. I know from experience. Give yourself a chance. It just means you have to think outside the box. You can do anything you want, there is always a way. I am doing a requested submission for Sony as we speak and I only write lyrics, not kidding. There is always a way. Don't give up if you love what you do. I believe in you.🦋
  5. Thank you so much for the in depth critique. You have given me a lot to think about. I will look into everything you said to improve the lyric, there is a lot to take in. I wish I had your knowledge. Ahhh one day lol.....until then I appreciate you all here. 🦋
  6. Thank you for the feedback....always looking to improve.
  7. It's amazing how just words on a page can make different people experience the same melody...words do have power. I love that. Ride the waves, life is good.🦋
  8. Thank you...that's what I was going for. I sung it all day yesterday, couldn't get it out of my head lol....🦋 I went down...into the water.....just does something so fun.
  9. Sing Your Song

     

    This angel has no cloudy bed

    No pillow on which to lay my head

    What did I do so wrong

     

    I'll pack my wings and try again

    Do it over and over again

    Until I can sing your song

     

    With the words you once wrote 

    Upon my heart it's true

    I'll carry the message home to you

     

    The melody will fly like you do

    In and out the words ring through

    I will get my wings to fly soon

     

    To again be by your side 

    But until then I wait 

    To see you at Heaven's gate

     

    I hope one day to make you proud

    And have a bed in the clouds

    To be where you now fly

     

    One day I will be by your side

    With my wings open wide

    You will say I did it right, I did it right

  10. Thank you Les. I wrote one for each element .....hope you approve. Have a great day!🦋
  11. Will You Shine Today?

     

    Do you ever listen to the voice inside

    It's telling you not to hide instead

    Shine your beauty upon me 

     

    You see I've been hurt before it's true

    But I see the beauty that is you

    Don't let them erase your essence 

     

    All the talent that you have inside

    Well if not used will surely die

    Stand up and show them your presence 

     

    Take a stand for what you believe 

    Every dream you can conceive 

    Dont be afraid of what they say

     

    Steadfast and true is the way

    They won't ever forget you name 

    Change your life today

     

    Listen to the voice inside

    Telling you not to hide

    They will try to say it's wrong

     

    But don't listen to a single word they say

    Haters be throwing swords all day

    Just walk away, shake it off

     

    Do you ever listen to the voice inside 

    Don't you ever run and hide

    Be who you are with pleasure and pride

     

    Open up to a better day

    No matter what may come your way

    You are a gift light to treasure 

     

    Take it from me I've seen somethings it's true

    But I still see the beauty in you

    Do you ever listen to the voice inside

    Telling you it's your time to shine...so shine

     

    Will you shine today?

     

     

     

  12. The Earth Is You And Me Although the earth is a vast place Every grain once had a face Ashes to ashes and dust to dust The earth is made up of us We come and go but leave a trace Forever changing this place The earth revolves and it grows As we roam it's winding roads Each and every grain of sand Once held in every hand The earth gives and takes away Life begins and ends this way The earth will open up and take us in From the dust we will rise again The earth gives and she receives Those who do believe The earth is just one place End to end she shows her face Mountain high and valley low Always somewhere on earth to go And if we're smart enough to see The earth is you and me She calls us from every shore Always wanting to show us more Take that chance to make a change The earth is calling out your name In kindness she welcomes each of you To experience her beauty too No one better then the rest Earth has only given us her best Each will have a moment to shine Will this moment be mine Roam this earth to every end Hand in hand again and again Earth's beauty is for all to see I believe in you, do you believe in me Earth is a beautiful place Filled with wonder and with grace And you will see it too The earth belongs to you
  13. In The Air I feel you in the air The breeze tells me that you're there A little whisper in the wind Goosebumps on my skin And when we first met The air was as pure as it could get Beauty within and flowing with life I swore I'd make you my wife To breathe the air that you breathe Made this man believe You could do anything Then one day the air stopped moving I tried to breathe in deep To keep you here with me The doctor pulled me away Said you've flown to another place No other can compare Oh how I loved your air Full of beauty, full of grace Now I feel you on my face I see you ruffle the trees As you blow air upon me I hear a whisper in the wind I swear I can hear you talkin' I go to our special spot To where the air blows a lot I close my eyes and dream away The air blows by and I hear you say I feel you in the air The breeze tells me that you're there A little whisper in the wind Goosebumps on my skin
  14. Burn Like Fire Baby you burn like fire Words cut like a knife A burning caldron of fire Stormed into my life You blow my mind baby Fire-walker of my life Burn me baby all night A lot of sizzle in a wife You make me crazy Too hot to handle Fire flowing over me Like hot wax from a candle Burn me sexy lady Fire on my skin You don't need a spark baby When you let me in Fire flowing From your finger tips Nothing hotter then my kiss Laying on your lips We light up the night sky Fire low and fire high Burn me up and melt me in Place your fire on my skin I'd never be a fire fighter I like when you burn hotter Steaming with ecstasy Baby lay your fire on me I'll burn you into my soul Fire breathing woman don't let go Melt into me Your fire is all I need You leave me wanting Baby cause you burn so hot Burn me up and melt me in I wanna be fire walking Over the coals of our life Fire keeps our love alive Burns hot enough to meld you to me Baby keep your fire burning I'll never look at another They could never burn hotter Fire let me in and don't let go Incinerator of my soul I am yours until the end of time Fire love all of my life Burns with the heat of lust The flames envelope us
  15. Thank you for the review and feedback. This song does get me going, too fun!
  16. Wishing everyone a beautiful and productive day! 🦋

  17. Hi

    Hello All, my name is Dawn Robertson and I have been in the music business most of my life. I live and breathe music and ride the lyrics to other people's songs with great pleasure. I am looking forward to getting to know you all and would love to have you critique my work. I am open to helping others build their careers as I have never wanted to be the star of the show. I generally write lyrics as I am not a musician but I often have the melody for a lyric that I have written and will use that to work with a collaborator to bring the songs to fruition. Although I have been on the inside of a music label I tried to learn my own way of doing things and followed my instincts to achieve the goals I set for myself. I tend to make my own path and with experience I have come to learn that there are several ways to make it in the industry if you so choose. I have worked with many people in the industry and have utilized what I have learned over the years into a better product and experience. I come to Songstuff with great respect for all of you who are willing to put yourself and your work out there. I have worked in film and radio industries as well as music so I have had a little taste of everything. I even turned down a singer/songwriter deal with a Nashville label as I wanted to perfect my craft before doing so. There is a time and place for everything and it was just not the right time for me. The owner of the label said he understood my decision as a singer/sonwriter of my caliber. His words still remain with me to this day and they have allowed me to grow and have a career that I completely control. I was never in it to be famous or rich. I just love what I do.
  18. Hi

    They are fun I enjoy pushing myself. I continue to learn as well. If you ever need a lyric message me.....
  19. Hi

    Lol you're fun.......I like that....Hear Ye! Hear Ye! you are officially invited to view any of my work I post here....lol.....read away Lisa! 🤗
  20. Hi

    Well thank you Lisa...I am enjoying it immensely. Hope to see you too! Have a good night.🙂
  21. A little southern baptist for us....I can feel the church just lit up with this song....
  22. Into The Water I went down Into the water To cleanse my soul For eternity Oh I went down Into the water Holy Spirit washed over me I am free now, yes I'm free Because the water Washed over me I am free Lord, I am free That holy water washed over me I live better, now that I'm clean That holy water, washed over me Straight to heaven when it's time My destiny, now that I'm free I went down, into the water Time to pray, time to pray Dear Lord they came in masses To wash, their sins away I went down into the water To cleanse my soul Dear Lord you know I am saved now by holy water The Lord does tell me so
  23. I think I need to change the title to, The Blowing Wind...
  24. Man I hope I did this right... The Wind Chorus: I see you standing there With your golden hair Blowing in the breeze The wind blowing in the trees A bright smile on your face Remember this place This moment in time When the wind was yours and mine May the wind blow for years to come Long after we've had little ones There will be just you and me May the good wind blow free And clear a path to the very best May the good wind come from the west To keep your hair blowing free May the wind always blow you to me Chorus: I'll drive my truck with the windows down And breathe in the wind that blows through town With my baby by my side The wind at my back and I'm doing fine I have everything I need I have you and you have me And with the good wind blowing Our love is always growing Bridge: At the end of the day, the kids are in bed Thoughts of the day running through my head The wind blows and clears them all away I pray the Lord, may the good wind stay Tags: Oh I pray, make it stay Lord I pray... May the good wind stay..... 🙄
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