meli3586

But like I said I did like it though

It's a good start for a newbie but I don't see al that much rhyming to be honest although It does flow and have some rhythym. You should use rhymezone.com or something like that to rhyme better. Trust me it helps me a lot and most lyricists use dictionaries or a thesaurus or etc to help them along. keep trying and you will get better!

Is this better? http://youtube.com/watch?v=QgD3b1-OQXc

Do I sing it well? http://youtube.com/watch?v=Qf0xghS5mgc

1st video Mobile version http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=fKE_cmSqyVM desktop version http://youtube.com/watch?v=fKE_cmSqyVM and 2nd video desktop version http://youtube.com/watch?v=WPvmT_EoOUc mobile version http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=WPvmT_EoOUc any help would be appreciated and I wrote the song the 1st video is 38 seconds and the 2nd is 50 seconds.