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Hard Core last won the day on January 8 2016

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  1. Hi guys, this afternoon I came up with this ... I recorded only one verse and chorus I was wondering if it would make sense to continue this project What do you think about ? many thanks
  2. Thank you very much ... I would like to have as much critique as possible, so if you want be as specific as you like !! thank you
  3. Hello thanks for the answer I haven't started to record it yet because I want to be sure that lyrics are ok first I don't understand what you mean by saying that bleeding out feels like it's not used to its fullest capabilities thank you very much for your feedback
  4. hello this is my new song I am going to record very soon but I wanted first some opinions about lyrics ... about grammar and how the sound. Thank you for your time I really appreciate it. Have a great day Verse 1 I could look at you forever, until you count the stars in the sky And I'm sure that it will never end because you love to bear with me Please let's talk about it But you think we've already said enough you got a treasure and you're throwin' it all away, you won't get it back now Chorus Why didn't you take my heart with you when you walked out that door cause I don't need it anymore I am doing well if you ask me now I am doing well while bleeding out Verse 2 Every story about my self that I go and try to tell are full of you I could I ever forget the girl who went so deep to be pulled out So I killed my pride And you know I cannot live without But my love was stronger So it actually was a quite easy fight Chorus Why didn't you take my heart with you when you walked out that door cause I don't need it anymore I am doing well if you ask me now I am doing well while bleeding out Ending (fading) x4 Take me back to that cursed day Cause I can't stand you are not in my life Hope time will heal what you could do right now instead I am bleeding out ..
  5. of course Goodbye to all your dreams you said goodbye to all your drunken smiles and crazy nights and great times and to everytime when you smiling “never mind”, you said: “all of the things that I try, some day will be mine” Run away and fight against your mind to save your smile from all the things you have to say goodbye to if you look at your eyes tell me can you see someone that can believe in his own steps Ch: Intoxicated with your beer you’re singing “la la la la ” intoxicated with your past you’re singing “la la la” and nobody’s gonna sing with you but you’re singing “la la la” one more step and I know you can fall I know you can let your mind leave this world and I know you don’t want this Tonight for the last time you’re saying goodbye to all your strong, old excuses and you’re just as empty now as is your whisky jar watching your dreams as they pass by and fade away yeah, they fade away. Why are you walking into this bar with your whisky and with your broken guitar, what are you doing away from you your wife (x2) CH.
  6. hope you like it Goodbye to all your dreams you said goodbye to all your drunken smiles and crazy nights and great times and to everytime when you smiling “never mind”, you said: “all of the things that I try, some day will be mine” Run away and fight against your mind to save your smile from all the things you have to say goodbye to if you look at your eyes tell me can you see someone that can believe in his own steps Ch: Intoxicated with your beer you’re singing “la la la la ” intoxicated with your past you’re singing “la la la” and nobody’s gonna sing with you but you’re singing “la la la” one more step and I know you can fall I know you can let your mind leave this world and I know you don’t want this Tonight for the last time you’re saying goodbye to all your strong, old excuses and you’re just as empty now as is your whisky jar watching your dreams as they pass by and fade away yeah, they fade away. Why are you walking into this bar with your whisky and with your broken guitar, what are you doing away from you your wife (x2) CH.
  7. She

    that's what I thought Actually I lower the voice on purpose because I thought it was too high .. I think It depends on the device one uses to listen to it. Anyway thanks for the comment I will work on the mix.
  8. sorry .. fixed it
  9. hey guys ... I just finished a first recording of this one .. if you want listen you're welcome
  10. She

    Hello guys ... I haven't been posting in a while .. So many problems, new city, new job new song Hope yo enjoy it verse 1 When everything around falls apart And I believe the words when I say That she can't be born yet on this earth The odds and me have never been friends but late night texting becomes the place where she tells me about this girl who fights a war inside between her quite and her wild side chorus She's not scared to go, to go on her way she don't She don't want to be caught by the wind when the play hide and seek and she rides her horse too far away from here where the air is so thin you can't breath, when the night comes she talks to the stars verse 2 And I don't care If I get hurt she feels I am too close and her dress has thorns just like rose A rose that hides behind a shield made to warn off letdowns This life put her through now she's out of the games (for a while) I'm sitting here writing lines so that my voice can be her lullaby chorus She's not scared to go, to go on her way she don't She don't want to be caught by the wind when the play hide and seek and she rides her horse too far away from here where the air is so thin you can't breath, when the night comes she talks to the stars chorus 2 (x3) So far to reach I know She's looking for the one thing she needs the most She says she's fine by herself, her heart contests it doesn't agree with that chorus (x2) She's not scared to go, to go on her way she don't She don't want to be caught by the wind when the play hide and seek and she rides her horse too far away from here where the air is so thin you can't breath, when the night comes she talks to the stars forgot to say that I am open to all kind of suggestions and critiques that could help me improve the song !! thanks
  11. I love the suggestion, unfortunately I am not able to change don't with doesn't because it doesn't fit the music ... In fact I decided to use don't because it hase one syllable less thank you very much for your answer .. If it wer not for you guys I couldn't go that far
  12. I could but that is not my intention .. I would like to hide the meaning .. I want people to think about it and wander what I mean When I read the lyrics they make sense to me .. and I think that once I explained it to you they make sense to you too now? am I wrong? If I am not, and you can see the point in my lyric once I explained the meaning it is fine to me
  13. Agreed!! thanks Exactly !!!that is exactly what I mean.. I mean she hasn't been born yet on this earth .. elsewhere maybe ... who knows ok so let me clarify ... 1. I come to think that the right girl for me was not born yet (she can't be born yet .. ) 2. then I met a girl ... we text and she tells me about herself .. here I say that a "she tells me about this girl", but the girl she tells me bout is just herself ... 3. and in the end it turns out that this girl was born and is her why do you think the first line is a problem? thank you very much for the answer
  14. I really thank you for your feedback I appreciate it very much ... I just want to say that I don't like my songs to be explicit .. I like when people think about the meaning of my words my primary concern is that it is grammatically correct .. Then I am really happy to talk about the meaning, in order to see if my lines make sense. The song doesn't need to have only one meaning. The important thing to me is that it can be interpreted also the way I want
  15. hello guys ... this is my new song .. I will record ad soon as I check that words are ok. would you please help me to make that ok? thank you (not native speaker) I accept every kind of critique.. please don't hold on verse 1 When everything around falls apart And I believe my words when I say That she can't be born yet on this earth The odds and me have never been friends but late night texting becomes the place where she tells me about this girl who fights a war inside between her quite and her wild side chorus She's not scared to go, to go on her way she don'd She don't want to be caught by the wind when the play hide and seek and she rides her horse just too far away from here where the air is so thin you can't breath, when the nights come she talks to the stars verse 2 And I don't care If I get hurt she feels I am too close and her dress has thorns just like rose A rose that hides behind a shield made to warn off letdowns This life put her through now she can't forget I'm sitting here writing lines and ho they'll get to her soul and mind chorus She's not scared to go, to go on her way she don'd She don't want to be caught by the wind when the play hide and seek and she rides her horse just too far away from here where the air is so thin you can't breath, when the nights come she talks to the stars chorus 2 (x3) So far to reach I know She's looking for the one thing she needs the most She says she's fine by herself, her heart contests it doesn't agree with that chorus (x2) She's not scared to go, to go on her way she don'd She don't want to be caught by the wind when the play hide and seek and she rides her horse just too far away from here where the air is so thin you can't breath, when the nights come she talks to the stars