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Jh, Lets colaborate on it, it could be fun. Amy Hi John, Thanks for picking my song, I was not expecting that.I was not sure how to fill out an about me page? How do I do that? Hi John, Thanks for picking my song, I was not expecting that. I am not sure How to fill out the about me page? Can you help me with that? Thanks again. Amy

Hi Jean, That is all I do too. I was replying to your comment about playing around with it in a blues rhythem, I thought that implied that you were playing,I always enjoy collaborating with others.I saw your reply and thought it meant musicaly. Amy

Hi jean, lets co write on it, I only do lyrics. I was thinking country, but a bluesy feel would sound cool too. I would love to hear what you come up with. All my finished songs are country, so it would be cool to have a bluesy one. Amy

Hi Teek, I like that too. Although I would have to change my rhyme scheme on the others lines, butt hat is a great line.

Hi peggy, good to see you! That was a good suggestion, but it felt a little log, so I went a different direction.Thanks for the insight though. Amy

I grew upcountry as a blue tick hound. A Myrle Haggard was my kind of sound. B taught southern values since I was three. .A Then you walked in Rebellion Bound. B And you rocked the country out of me. A Yeah you rocked my country when you came to town. A Wearing ripped jeans riding on your bike. A. Jimmy Hendrix blasting all night. B Your a City boy , so different from me. A always been a sucker for the bad boy type. B But you rocked the country out of me. A yeah you rocked the country out of my life. Bridge Your the kind mama warned me about, But it's a little late for the warning now. Your a Christian girls worst dream. But you came on strong like james Dean. And you rocked the country out of me. Yeah you rocked the country out of me. My sister said I was acting different. needed to be baptized by the holy spirit. Because I've become a rock N roll queen. The Baptist are whispering I can hear it. Because you rocked the country out of me. You rocked my country, yes you did it... Outro Yeah you rocked the country, yeah you rocked the country, you rocked the country out of me.

A I grew upcountry as a blue tick hound. A Myrle Haggard was my kind of sound. B taught southern values since I was three. .A Then you walked in Rebellion Bound. B And you rocked the country out of me. A Yeah you rocked my country when you came to town. A Wearing ripped jeans riding on your bike. A. Jimmy Hendrix blasting from the mic. B Your a City boy your so different from me. A I'm a big sucker for the bad boy type. B But you rocked the country out of me. A yeah you rocked the country out of my life. Bridge Your the kind mama warned me about, But it's a little late for the warning now. Your a Christian girls worst dream. But you came on strong like james Dean. And you rocked the country out of me. Yeah you rocked the country out of me. My sister said I was very different. needed to be baptized by the holy spirit. Because I've become a rock N roll queen. The Baptist are whispering I can hear it. Because you rocked the country out of me. You rocked my country through all of this. I will tweak it later, there is my last verse.

Hi les, Thanks for the sugestions and kind words. Glad to see you are still at it. Amy

Lol, Jh I have never heard that expression before, lol. Thank you. I thought of just repeating verse one and two, does it need another verse if you repeat it? I was trying to think where to go from there. I will work on some more to get it a little more blanaced and try to come up with one more verse. Thanks for the compliments. amy

Hi JH, You have a great idea here and you have used the innocent eyes very well through out the song. I would like to know a little why the singer felt we went astray and where it went wrong. To me that would complete the idea a little more. I loved the idea. Amy

Hi Karanis, You do have a lot of dark imagery here and that can make for interesting songs at times. I feel that the rhymes are not conversational and very forced in places. It reads more like a poem. Also there is so refrain line that is consistant through out the song, so it makes it seem clunky. On a song with no chorus there needs to be repetition in every verse to make it flow and have a structure that moves rather than creep along. On the first verse you have: Silent shouts in oblivion Echoes off of obsidian, if you changed verse two to Echoes of guilt from within it makes it a little more personal and conversational.I think you need to think of one line to put in every verse and you will have a good solid song and work on it being a little more conversational rather than matchy matchy. Good work.

Les I like where you are going with this. You set up a nice imagery and it is painting a great picture so far. I love the tag line and the story of someone going off path in the name of rock N roll. I would come up with a bridge that explained how and when he got off track, what was he like before and it will tie in real nice with what you have so far. This start is really good. look forward to seeing where it goes. Amy

I like the idea of this and you have some really good images in the song but it needs a few tweaks.When you have this style of song without a chorus, you have to have one line in every verse which is exactly the same to tie it all in and give it the flow it needs. You do not have a consistant tag line in every verse, One thing I would look at also is the 1st line of your bridge being the same as line two of the verse. The bridge is the place to say something different that has not been used before in the song, unless it is the tag line. it can be done, but it takes away fro the impact of that line in the verse. If you were to reuse that line I would use it in the verses instead of the bridge. You have some cool images going on in the song but you need a tag line that is exactly the same in each verse. Good job with the creative imagery. Amy

Hey John, I have not been on in a while, but glad you started the challenges back. They always push me when I get in a rut.I wrote one real quick last night, I think I got all the critea, but it eeds some tweaking. A I grew upcountry as a blue tick hound. A Myrle Haggard was my kind of sound. B taught southern values since I was three. .A Then you walked in Rebellion Bound. B And you rocked the country out of me. A Yeah you rocked my country when you came to town. A Wearing ripped jeans riding on your bike. A. Jimmy Hendrix blasting from the mic. B Your a City boy your so different from me. A I'm a big sucker for the bad boy type. B But you rocked the country out of me. A yeah you rocked the country out of my life. Bridge Your the kind mama warned me about, But it's a little late for the warning now. Your a Christian girls worst dream. But you came on strong like james Dean. And you rocked the country out of me. Yeah you rocked the country out of me. Repeat.