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louielouwhy

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louielouwhy last won the day on October 26 2015

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About louielouwhy

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    EVERYBODY'S LEAST FAVORITE
  • Birthday December 1

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    United States of America
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    Family, gardening, sleep, religion, politics, history

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    EVERYBODYS' LEAST FAVORITE AND THE NEGATIVE NOTES
  • Musical / Songwriting / Music Biz Skills
    Have materialized over a dozen songs. All have melodies, chords.
    Read a few things.
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    Fifties, Sixties, Seventies, Eighties, I like other contemporary later rock music also, Older Country, Some Newer Country, Blues, Gospel, Christian Rock, Spiritual.

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  1. Song makes sense and all, very coherent so long as the reader doesn't take it literally. And I didn't realize that about the 'funny feeling' lyric until Lewis mentioned it. And I had to admit to myself that he made a good point, though he didn't emphasize too much. Because a funny feeling could mean different things. And the term funny feeling when somebody says it in reality is always subject to the question; what do you mean? Because we all get a lot of 'funny feelings' and about different things. So the way the song is written in relation to real electricity makes me recall the feeling I got on my tongue after putting it on an Ever Ready Battery, which of course was a different funny feeling that I'd get compared to kissing a girl. So comparatively speaking, I could be lead to believe that the girl you love hooks her lips up to an electrical current somehow so she could give you a thrill.
  2. Here's a restructure. And Skin I think you're right about what should be the chorus. I don't know if combining the pre chorus into the chorus and repeating the chorus again can be the chorus. But that is what I did. And Tom, hopefully you'll change your mind when you hear it. And. I can totally understand where your coming from when we put our own melody's to other peoples songs. I do he same thing and other peoples words don't sound right with my melodic idea for the song. But somehow, as I'm sure you know, melodies have a way of making words fit while others don't No matter you guys, thanks for the constructive critique. HEARTACHES IS WHAT I GOT TO KNOW Vs 1I'm pacing with contemplationWith indecisive determinationsSomethings are binding meIn my logic abilities pre chorusThose heartaches that won't retireFrom heartaches I don't desire Vs 2Some turn up the heatBut they all disturb the peaceThey'll realign and readjustTheir oppositions, they rally to much pre chorusWith those heartaches I don't desireAnd that heartaches that won't retire chorusHeartache is what I got to knowFrom family, friends, and foeThey'll realign and readjustTheir oppositions they'll tally too muchWith heartaches that won't retireFrom those heartaches I don't desireHeartache is what I got to knowFrom family, friends, and foeThey'll realign and readjustTheir oppositions, they rally too muchWith heartaches I don't desireAnd those heartaches that won't retire(music) V3I'm pacing with contemplationWith indecisive determinationsSomethings are binding meIn my logic abilities (pre chorus)With those heartaches that won't retireAnd heartaches, I don't desire.(Bridge)They'll realign and readjustTheir oppositions, they rally to much (pre chorus) With those heartaches, they won't retireFrom heartaches, I don't desire
  3. I don't know yet if I like ti this way or the other way, in the singular tense. I can see how you guys came to the conclusions you did in one respect. But I think when the song is played it emphasizes the point a lot more than when you are reading it. I think that you might see that when you hear it if you choose to listen to it. THOSE HEARTACHES WE DON'T DESIRE We’re always pacing with contemplation with indecisive determinations Some things are binding what’s free, and our logic abilities With those heartaches that won’t retire and heartaches we don’t desire Some turn up the heat, and they all disturb the peace We realign and readjust to those oppositions that rally too much With those heartaches that wont retire't, and heartaches we don't desire Regret is what we get to know. From family, friends and foe They’ll realign and readjust with their oppositions, they tally too much Causing heartaches we don’t desire, with heartaches that won’t retire Regret is what we get to know. From family, friends, and foe They’ll realign and readjust, their oppositions they rally too much Causing heartaches we don't desire and heartaches that won't retire (Music and Bridge) We’re always pacing with contemplation with indecisive determinations Somethings are binding what's free in our logic abilities With those heartaches that won’t retire, and heartaches we don’t desire Some turn up the heat and they all disturb the peace They’ll realign and readjust. With oppositions they rally too much With heartaches they won’t retire
  4. HEARTACHES IS WHAT I GOT TO KNOW I'm pacing with contemplation With indecisive determinations Somethings are binding me In my logic abilities Those heartaches that won't retire From heartaches I don't desire Some turn up the heat But they all disturb the peace They'll realign and readjust Their oppositions, they rally to much With those heartaches I don't desire And that heartaches that won't retire Heartache is what I got to know From family, friends, and foe They'll realign and readjust Their oppositions they'll tally too much With heartaches that won't retire From those heartaches I don't desire Heartache is what I got to know From family, friends, and foe They'll realign and readjust Their oppositions, they rally too much With heartaches I don't desire And those heartaches that won't retire (music) I'm pacing with contemplation With indecisive determinations Somethings are binding me In my logic abilities With those heartaches that won't retire And heartaches, I don't desire. (Bridge) They'll realign and readjust Their oppositions, they rally to much With those heartaches, they won't retire From heartaches, I don't desire
  5. Johnny, I bought a new iMac. It's loaded with Garageband Software. I find doing the music is the simplest thing. If you got a problem, you can call Apple to guide you through. Apple team has a great support network that will help you over the phone. And. You can attend an Apple tutorial course in your area for nothing as well. I'm just assuming that you might be at the technical level that I'm at, which is kindergarten. Since I needed a new computer anyway and songwriting is a big part of me, I thought investing in this IMacI already with the Software programed into it was the least expensive way to go as well as the simplest. Of course you have to purchase an Interface to hook up to your computer. I bought what I thought was the least expensive one, which had the best quality for the money. It only has two inputs, but since I'm a lone musician here it works. What is killing me is getting around on the computer. For example like earning how to import data, registering for things etc.. like on Youtube. Filing Mp3s and stuff. I can't organize it and store it to know where to go to access it when I want it. It took me a few days to get the sound I wanted for my song. But it has been over a week trying to coordinate my work what I've materialized. And I still don't know what I'm freaking doing. There are just so many instructions! It's like my brain is jug that full and it don't have the capacity to fit anymore info so i can get to the next step. Anyhow. This video is what i've done with an acoustic guitar, and electric guitar, and the rhythms I had to select to download and adjust to my liking. Oh yeah, some instruments from my keyboard in the intro, and near the end. I didn't include my voice because it ruins the song. At the end of the first song, you can listen too me singing which says it all about my critique on my vocals lol, I'm sure you will agree.
  6. I love this too! Great sound! Your voice and style are very much like the singer for the James Gang, Joe Walch. He is one of my favorites. What I've accomplished as a songwriter is a lot since I've been one. I'd say I was the size of the earth compared to be being he size of, let's say Venus now in comparison. I think that I might have been at least half the size of that before I've been participating in Songstuff. So percentage wise I might have developed equally over the past few year compared to the previous past forty years. Compared to your musical talent though, Tunesmith. You are the size our sun compared to me, little old Venus. I haven't listened to all of your works yet. Only five. The Don't Lie To Yourself Song, I thought was one of the best songs I've ever heard within that genre. The STORY BEHIND the song and the production of this song is as follows. First off I want to say that it is not easy to put something that is less quality under what Tunesmith does. But I believe that if you believe in what you want to do, may develop if you put that little extra effort in the persistence of something. For instance, I couldn't quite find exactly how I sort of imagined how this song for me would sound, nevertheless, I had an idea. And. I've learned that I had to keep on keeping on, and by accident, and being a little careless, but still keeping at it sometimes works along with being focused. For example the little solo riffs were invented on the first try, when i wasn't trying, but just playing around waiting for the intro of the tracks that I had already laid down. The origin of this song had different lyrics, but the same melody and chords to this song manifested over twenty five years ago. I decided to change the lyrics in order to specify exactly what the experience was that influenced me to see things in a different light than compared to the way I traditionally did. To clarify, one of the lyrics was "He saw life from a different frame" in the old song. And that was the original key verse that lead me to the change of this song. So actually, one good song developed into another. Of course I'm sure there are people that may have a different opinion. Actually there are a lot of the same words from the old song still in this new version. And for the most part, the structure of this song is still the same. Now in relation to the production of this video and he audio. I couldn't have been possible without Garageband Software. I tell ya. You have to give a whole lot of credit to musicians of yesteryear, like Tunesmith here. Because you really have to be incredibly talented to do what he did with out the software products that are out on the market today. So if you aren't that seasoned of an all around musician. To do what I did, was to figure out exactly what the rhythm of your song needs to be. Keep selecting it until it is how you want the song to feel. Then you got to get sound you want. Then you got to replay and replay until you can listen to the song without it making you sick. Then mix it, and remix it. During most of the video, I'm not singing at all. Only the lyrics appear. At the end of the SAWNG, I'm singing in it. My reason for this is to demonstrate that I can't sing. If there is something in a good produced song that isn't right, the finished product is destroyed. And the bit of the second recording of Louie singing demonstrates just that. It could be anything that is out of whack that will do just that. I call it a SAWNG because you can read the lyrics as the song is playing. Besides rendering this information above. The initial reason why I produced this video is explained in the beginning. I produced this video in search for the right voice for this song. I'm going to post it in the collaborative section, as well.
  7. Dodgey. I like this song. The song decisively points out the authors view. I definitely read this as a political song for good will. I think of Crosby, Stills and Nash type song when I read this. I think this song could be a bit improved however, if you displayed some pronouns in there and changed a preposition or two, and maybe add an adverb here in there. Basically. What the song is about is clear as can be. But based on the way it is written should present a clearer address pertaining to who to call to take action, against that, which you are protesting against, which you have already clearly stated. You are almost there at making this song perfect in that respect in my opinion. Louie
  8. Dodgey. Pretend that you are having a real conversation with who you got in mind in relation to those terms that you are trying to express whatever it is that is semi subconsciously inspiring the idea in relation to focusing on the situation about it at hand. For some unknown reason. As I'm making up my own melody about this song. I hear an old Beatles version type of song. Based on the words. To me, it is as though you are wondering, and asking, or presenting an alternative situation to whom it is you are referring to in order to present some other option to the subject so you and who you got in mind could work something out, if. Based on the arrangement of the whole context of the song, that is the closest that I could make out of what it is you are trying to relay to the reader. Louie
  9. I t's haunting It's taunting That love has found its coffin It's still ailing me A pain that won't let me be Burning like a fire
  10. I'll be hoping that as you endeavor to progress it becomes easier and natural for you so it becomes easy, fun, and lucrative all in one package. Good luck! Louie
  11. MY LOVELY CENERIOUS V1 It's haunting, it's taunting Our love has found its coffin It's still ailing me Pain that won't let me be (chorus) Burning like a fire Ignited by a liar v2 Your trust wielded like a flame Consequences dire Now I'm in the mud Grappling with the mier v3 It caused a smoke'n heart What was, is now something I don't want The deal is piercing through All for wanting to.... (chorus) Conspire with a liar Now I'm burning in a fire (music) v4 Your trust wielded like a flame Consequences dire So much for our love Now a cinder of the pyre (bridge) For conspiring with a liar (music) v5 The conspiracy won't let me go Heartache is all I know Self control wants to combust For believing in your trust (chorus) Ignited by a liar Wielded like a fire (music) (pre chorus) This conspiracy won't let me go Heartache is all I know Self control wants to combust For believing in your trust (outro & chorus) Ignited by a liar. Ignited by a liar (music)i ignited by a liar.
  12. ALONESDALEVILLE (intro music) I Remember, Remember, Remember, Re mem mem mem ber Lonsdale! I Remember, Remember, Remember, Re mem mem mem ber La ah ons Dale My home, Alone Alonesdaleville vs 1 Aah, when I meet those old home boys, it's I they'll all avoid They'll crack no jokes about old circumstances That spites all the hard feelings I employ vs 2 Woe, their detest been years non stop, For hearing some things they don't want And when they set their sights that way, It goes on and on, and on and on Just like the way things used to be (chorus) In Lonsdale In La ah ons dale Alonesdale for me (pre chorus) Oh, those relationships corrupted That a picnic table, it busted And the woods we tracked in Now they are all gone (bridge) They're All Gone! (Group chorus) All Gone! All Gone! (They're still living, but they're still living) (chorus) Living in Lonsdale Living in a La Ah Ons Dale (They're still living, yes they're still a living) Alonesdale for me vs 3 Under the trees side of the stream (Yes, they're still living, yes, they're still living) Across the playground around the pond Then seemed the more that they reflected On those memories I dissected The more we could not let them bye gones (They're still living, oh yes, they're still living) Be bye gones (chorus) In Lonsdale In La ah ons dale, yea---h! Alonesdale for me (chorus) Cause they're still living in Lonsdale They're still living in La ah ons dale (They're still living, oh yes they're still living) Alonesdale for me (Those years, still here, still near) (pre chorus) They're still living They're still living (chorus) Living in Lonsdale Living in La ah ons dale Alonesdale for me (bridge) Those years Still near Still here (They're still living, they're still living) (chorus) They're living in Lonsdale They're living in La ah ons Dale Alonesdale for me (outro) Those years Still here Still near (They're still living) (outro fading) Those years Still here Still near (They're still living) In Alonesdaleville They're still living!
  13. Well, another revision of this. Hopefully a new word for the dictionary. ALONESDALEVILLE (intro) I Remember, Remember, Remember, Re mem mem mem ber Lonsdale! I Remember, Remember, Remember, Re mem mem mem ber La ah ons Dale My home, Alonesdaleville vs 1 Aah, when I meet those old home boys, it's I they'll all avoid They'll crack no jokes about old circumstances That spites all the hard feelings I employ vs 2 Woe, their detest been years non stop, For hearing some things they don't want And when they set their sights that way, It goes on and on, and on and on Just like the way things used to be (chorus) In Lonsdale In La ah ons dale Alonesdale for me (pre chorus) Oh, those relationships corrupted That a picnic table it busted And the woods we tracked in Now they are all gone (bridge) They're All Gone! (Group chorus) All Gone! All Gone! (They're still living, but they're still living) (chorus) Living in Lonsdale Living in a La Ah Ons Dale (They're still living, yes they're still a living) Alonesdale for me vs 3 Under the trees side of the stream (Yes, they're still living, yes, they're still living) Across the playground around the pond Then seemed the more that they reflected On those memories I dissected The more we could not let them bye gones (They're still living, oh yes, they're still living) Be bye gones (chorus) In Lonsdale In La ah ons dale, yea---h! Alonesdale for me (chorus) Cause they're still living in Lonsdale They're still living in La ah ons dale (They're still living, oh yes they're still living) Alonesdale for me (Those years, still here, still near) (pre chorus) They're still living They're still living (chorus) Living in Lonsdale Living in La ah ons dale Alonesdale for me (bridge) Those years Still near Still here (They're still living, they're still living) (chorus) They're living in Lonsdale They're living in La ah ons Dale Alonesdale for me (outro) Those years Still here Still near (They're still living) (outro fading) Those years Still here Still near (They're still living) In Alonesdaleville They're still living!
  14. Maybe my songs and melodies are suitable for your style of music if you are into Old Rock, some Christian Rock and need a couple of songs to add to your performances.