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About ptw2uk

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    United States of America

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Music Background

  • Musical Influences
    Lennon/McCartney, Jagger/Richards, Dylan, Townshend, Springsteen, Simon, Vedder, Cobain, Reznor, Cornell...

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  1. "lost On Me"

    What I mean by that is- if someone is bitten by temptation their eyes never open, they tend to close (and their eyes were open before they were bitten by temptation and then they closed them and are now ignorant)... obviously the ability to opens ones eyes in the physical sense is still possible and in the song if you're not bitten by temptation then your eyes/mind are more capable of being open to different ways of doing things...
  2. Insanity For Clarity

    I really like the line about not feeling the difference between standing up or sitting down... Great lyrics.
  3. Grasping For The Wind

    Nice.. I really like the part about asking why we long for what others have because we can all relate to that at one point or another
  4. "lost On Me"

    That line "eyes never open, they tend to close" is about people choosing to be ignorant and give into temptation easily instead of taking the harder path in life they take the easy way out so I feel it fits in that respect. Its not a literal thing but more metaphorical... I could work on it some... most of the lyrics I write are quick bursts of inspiration that can use editing, thus the reason I am here.. appreciate the feedback!
  5. Blood On Your Hands

    I really enjoyed this one Neil good work
  6. Psycho

    Very interesting. I can't help but think of the Talking Heads a little bit.
  7. Intercoursing The Light

    "Intercoursing The Light" A million smiles will fade tonight Turn off the tv and find some light Because we're running low on energy My baby she has a symphony An open mind that see's right between What's in my head and reality... I love the way she talks I love the way she sings I love the way she wants nothing to do with me I love her mother's clothes I think her daddy knows I love her... The boy I used to be resigned at quarter to three Only to be replaced by men off fallen grace They tell me to obey or I'll be cast away to a state of pain She's knocked up with delight, intercoursing the light That floats against the sky I tell her to obey or she'll be cast away To a state of pain... I love the way she talks I love the way she sings I love the way she wants nothing to do with me I love her mother's clothes I think her daddy knows I love her... A million smiles will fade tonight Turn off the tv and find some light Because we're running low on energy My baby she has a symphony An open mind that see's right between What's in my head and reality...
  8. "lost On Me"

    24 views and no comments... Either it sucks or it's so good people are speechless haha... Any comments are welcome. Just want honest opinions... I was going for a Soundgarden type vibe with this tune...
  9. Hello

    I am looking forward to posting, critiquing, and getting inspired from the work I see here. I have been writing lyrics for a long time and I can't wait to see what other songwriters think of my words.
  10. Heads Or Tales

    Makes me think of Two Face from Batman
  11. So Far No Good

    Its really cool... I also have a song with the same title. Its always interesting to see how different songs with the same title can be.
  12. "lost On Me"

    “Lost On Me†It’s not lost on me That you’re trapped Inside a nightmare of your own creation… I’d offer my hand If only you’d take it…. I’d kill the pain and then forsake it… But we both know the story and how it goes When the snake of temptation bites Eyes never open, they tend to close... Blissful ignorance meets peaceful decadence On the road to insignificance… If you can’t help yourself I can’t take the time to sympathize… I’d offer my hand If only you’d take it I’d kill the pain and then forsake it But we both know the story and how it goes When the serpent shines Eyes never open, they just go blind... I’d take the blame If only you’d place it I’d give life to death and come back to face it… But we all know the story never ends… The words that we speak become syndicated Its not lost on me… That eyes never open...
  13. Welcome to the forums ptw2uk :)

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