Peggy

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  1. Good stuff going here. I'll check your changes coming up. Glad you joined the challenge with us Peggy
  2. Hi T, Trying to figure where better clarity can occur. PP gave me some good places where "a" story gets lost. So your good idea with chorus is probably the place. Going to run with that. This is what I was trying to project in chorus: If she is without contraint/restraint then there's no constraint/restraint because "singer" has no constraint/restraint either. Thanks so much for read and comments! Peggy
  3. Hi again! Sorry I didn't get back sooner. Fixed the "staring" . "She" finds her flaws in Mirrors framed in gold... plural because it reflects group think. Driven by collective manufactured guilt and assertions ... without regard. The colors were to help support. Thanks again for your thoughts. I Like the "panther waiting to strike". Still looking at this one. Peggy
  4. Hi Pahchisme Plaid, Thanks for the read and the comments! Hard to admit this one, and thought alot about it, thinking "well maybe that still works" but it just didn't. Sooo, "starring" is suppose to be "staring" yikes!! I have company right now but want to get back to this soon. Peggy
  5. I feel lucky and that I have a very large sphere of people in my life...and I stay "in front" of news... But or So or And...I internalize emotion (based on my own reaction) which ends up in my lyric writing. I often write in first person to project the feelings I've had to what moved me in some way. But the emotion, that came about, may be written in whole and raw or in contrast or disbelief, scarcistic, or masked. But how i present the feeling happens as my thoughts go down. Almost always deeply personal......happy-sad-pissed,lost- found, lonely or over-whelmed., initimate or distance, opened or veiled. I try it. And it's real. I might add...sometimes it works sometimes..not so much And I'm a happy peep Peggy
  6. Understand how the lyrics touched me and for reasons that are alot closer than thought. Again beautiful! Peggy
  7. Thoughts and prayers with those in Manchester.:heartpump:

  8. Hi Pahchisme Plaid, Very nice. And reads as such a gentle expression. Thought the first line was setting up for a tongue twister but it all came together beautifully. Peggy
  9. She Provokes Me Copyright 05/21/2017 Peggy L. Smart-Barnes ---------- V 1 ------------- Far from a final provocation She finds her flaws Staring in the mirrors Framed in gold ---------- V 2 ------------- Restrings to a tighter tension She takes her time Renders with a brush Touched in black --------- C 1 ---------- Expect to excite Without constraint There's no constraint And she provokes me Impulse to incite Without restraint There's no restraint And she provokes me ---------- V 3 ------------- Deliberate by brand of distinction She doesn't blink Blowing all a kiss Drawn in red --------- C 2 ---------- Expect to excite Without constraint There's no constraint And she provokes me Impulse to incite Without restraint There's no restraint And she provokes me -------- O 1 ----------- Without restraint There's no restraint And she provokes me She provokes me
  10. Hi Bielka, Welcome! Great place to share your works and check out what others are doing too! Have fun!! Peggy
  11. Hi Plants, Welcome to the boards!! Jump in and have fun! PL
  12. Hi John, Like the change. Not thinking that this was a heart-wrenching spill out. But instead, just a look back, that triggers side emotions. Kinda think most everyone does the replay thing now and again, and thought you nailed that. Nice going. Just my after thoughts. Peggy
  13. Catching A Wave Copyright 04/21/2017 Peggy L. Smart-Barnes --------- V 1 ------- We feel the motion, it's flowing all through Floating up from the deepest of blue Starting ripples, rising to crest We haven't even seen our best ---------- C 1 -------- But you know, it's fluid And it's time to move Coming to the surface, we're catching a wave We don't need a purpose, just catching a wave Ride it on in, ride it on out ---------- V 2 ----------- Stayed underwater but holding our breath Can love emerge out of the depth Forces rushing, power intense It doesn't really make any sense ---------- C 2 --------- But you know, it's fluid And it's time to move Coming to the surface, we're catching a wave We don't need a purpose, just catching a wave Ride it on in, ride it on out -------- B 1 ------- Calm me then push me Love me don't break me Then I won't, no I won't, no I won't drift away from here again --------- C 3 --------- But you know, it's fluid And it's time to move Coming to the surface, we're catching a waveWe don't need a purpose, just catching a waveRide it on in, ride it on out--------- V 3 -------We feel the motion, it's flowing all throughFloating past the deepest of blueGuided ripples, rising to crestWe haven't even seen our best---------- C 4 --------- But you know, it's fluid And it's time to move Coming to the surface, we're catching a waveWe don't need a purpose, just catching a waveRide it on in, ride it on out
  14. You Spin Me, Baby Copyright 04/16/2017 Peggy L. Smart-Barnes------- V 1 -----------Before you get startedI'm steady on my heelsTurning at speedsStaying in controlThen you spin me, baby------- V 2 ----------No more than your whisperI'm standings on my toesTurning at speedsLosing the controlOh, you spin me, baby------- C 1 -----------You spin me, babyAs you wind me upI'm dizzy, babyStill it's not enoughYou spin me, baby------- V 3 -----------Ignore the advancesI can't stay in balanceSlowing the speedAnd now in controlBut you spin me, baby------- C 2 -----------You spin me, babyAs you wind me upI'm dizzy, babyI can't get enoughYou spin me, baby------- O 1 ------------Oh, you spin me, babyI can't get enoughI'm dizzy, babyAs you wind me upOh, you spin me, babyOh, you spin me, baby
  15. Hi Mahesh, Beautiful sentiment! If John could only know his impact thanks for expressing what others feel too! Me for one! Peggy