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  1. This Is Who We Are/Now: Table for Two

    That's nice. Any suggestion i make feel free to do with it as you please. sweep or keep
  2. Trail Blazer

    Hi Myrddin, Nice sentiment! To me it reads as a lovely poem. There's some great articles here on the site on song format and structure http://www.songstuff.com/song-writing/article/ Peggy
  3. I'm not perfect but my love is

    Okay, i give...but... never nind😁
  4. I'm not perfect but my love is

    Hi Tom, I so respect everyone's take. But...i think with the edits you have made, in blue complete the lyric 99.9999999%. I read so much "realness" feelings emotions. My fav line But so many others. I'm thinking too much tweaking is going it affect the impact and rawness of emotion presented. Had to say it. Peggy
  5. Amateur writer from Texas saying hello

    Hi Myrddin, Welcome to the site! Another Texan!!! The best on your inspirations Peggy
  6. Hello I'm dazzlingmusicgirl

    Hi! Welcome to Songstuff. Have fun learn lots!! Peggy
  7. I'm not perfect but my love is

    Hi Tom, I really liked the edits (in blue). Thought they put the emotions right in place with the lyrics. Suggedtion was that at the end seal it. I like these lines.the Otherwise i thought ready for killer melody. Peggy
  8. I'm not perfect but my love is

    Hi Tom, This is very nice! Glad you're revisting it. Not sure of your melody but one easily came to me. Good words, but i had alittle trouble each read rolling that line out smoothly. Just me. Reference of some type of choice Maybe at end something like "I know I'm not perfect girl but my love is Know I'm not perfect But...my love is" "Perfect for us" Or something that pins it down abit at the end. Peggy
  9. You Don't Have To 

    Hi Les, Thanks for the feedback.!! Appreciate all your thoughts on content with this one. Keeps me thinking. It was such a quick write, you say deep. It is a packed bunch of words and thoughts, for sure. It always comes up for me in writing. Depending on the feel of the idea sometimes too much or too little. I try to intentionally give room for the reader/listener. Often leaving multiple ways to get some place, where ever that place is. I probably do lean to the vague side. That could just be bad writing, too.😁 With lyrics we have just a few words to get there and "there" is different for folks. You're lucky. How boring when there are never surprises ... i agree it's always more fun for writer and hopefully for the reader/listener to go away thinking a bit. Unless, of course, it's just a full blown party lyric. Haha!! Peggy
  10. You Don't Have To 

    Hi there, Any comments/critque/suggestions welcome and much appreciated. Pop tune and feel. Marked Areas and the bridge? are almost spoken the way i'm thinking. Peggy Copyright 08/11/2017 Peggy L. Smart-Barnes You Don't Have To ---------- V 1 -------------- It's not a matter But something inside Put it in place I learned to decide --------- V 2 ------------- So far from perfect Still wonder why Eyes full of specs Makes it easy to cry -------- C 1 ------------ So so for sure Something good to know You don't have to use anger with me Trust me (spoken) Thought about it Hides what's to see You see. (spoken) You don't have to use it with me Not me (spoken) You don't have to You don't have to use it with me -------- C 2 (m1) ------------ So so for sure Something good to know You don't have to use anger with me Trust me (spoken) -------- B 1 ------------ (Spoken or bring it up) Really? Really! Explosions burn Too much aftermath I hate that So much It's easy to walk away Easier to talk With me Okay -------- C 2 (m2) ------------ So so for sure Something good to know You don't have to use anger with me Trust me (spoken) -------- V 3 ------------ Life's never perfect We love and we try It's never in steps We hardly know why ---------- V 4 -------------- It's not a matter I wouldn't lie Put it in place We learn to decide -------- C 3 ------------ So so for sure Something good to know You don't have to use anger with me Trust me (spoken) Thought about it Hides what's to see You see (spoken) You don't have to use it with me Not me (spoken) You don't have to You don't have to use it with me You don't have to You don't have to use anger with me Trust me (spoken) Trust me (spoken)
  11. This Is Who We Are/Now: Table for Two

    Hi Patti, sweet write, a couple of suggestions in italics Loving who we are Doing what we do Keeps you wanting me Like i'm wanting you Maybe Time begins our story Living with/in our vision. Something besides out. Trying to suggest alittle less "sterile"? Nice going Peggy
  12. You Don't Have To 

    Hi Dazzyt66, Thanks for the read and the suggestions. I was trying to reflect on the bible wisdom "..... when you have a log in your own" Is like equal to a log. But "retrospect" is good. Peggy
  13. Ferrick vs. Spotify class action

    I got 1. I was thinking CdBaby .. kinda remember giving permission. I'll check my agreement. Peggy https://members.cdbaby.com/digital-distribution-partners.aspx
  14. addicted to you

    Hi John, Me too, seems much more in the feeling with the rest..than ".....love another...." I kinda liked the original idea here better This line..not so much.. "you took me so high or you blew my mind ( is that to sexual ) ?" Not too sexual just isn't as good as rest, cliche too. Just opinions of mine
  15. Hi Jenn, Having fun listening to your 2 songs here at home with some friends. We like both Mr. Fox and Something To Hold On To but Something To hold On To is the fav Peggy
  16. You Found Me (formerly in lyrics critique forum)

    Hi Tony, Really enjoyed your song. My first music of the day today and what a wonderful beginning. Peggy
  17. YouTube has a better idea?

    Youth might think that's awesome
  18. Changing profile pic. New one too big, old one I lost and now I'm just aqua P.

  19. Lyrics Writing Challenge #6 - Opposites

    Hey Les, Fun lyric you have going here. Like your thoughts on the changes. Pretty tight already, and great opposites. Nice to see you writing. Peggy
  20. Lyrics Writing Challenge #6 - Opposites

    Hi Alo, Reads like opposites to me Unique lines looking forward to your finishing the write. Interesting and would like to see the rest. "ignorance in my cubical" Peggy
  21. Mama

    . So it's Russian to English. Nice conversion/translation. I have a neice that lived and studied in Russia and speaks Russian. But me, not so much Peggy
  22. Online Perfection

    Hi Patty, I really like this. Snappy, funny.. lines and imagery that are hilariously great. Good going. Peggy
  23. Life without her

    Hi Les, Read your lyric a few times. Pretty dang sweet and emotion filled....but it does kinda have an "guess it's all over" feel to it. maybe just needs a tweak or two to counter. Bolded some suggestions /thoughts. Really love the chorus. These 2 lines are awesome. "Life without her is not easy With so many hours in a day" Nice going with where you are on this one. If you can post the melody, that would be cool to hear. Peggy
  24. Mama

    Hi Igor, Good to see you joined in posting. Lovely sentiment about your mom. Peggy
  25. addicted to you

    Hi John, Made a couple of suggestions in bold. Bridge seems to need a bit more but i like your using " recover " . Goes great with addicted. Peggy
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