Timbre

Private Dancer - Tina Turner

I'm embracing the idea that it's never too late respond to a challenge. I got stuck pretty soon after starting this challenge many months ago. The progression of choruses and the first verse came to me in that first week but then I couldn't get any further, so I sat with it for quite a while. The other submissions that trickled in over the months really helped me to return to it again and again. I always learn something from the challenges, either by joining or observing. Grateful for that. My submission is based on the biblical story of Noah and the flood. I used the story as a metaphor for falling into addiction, and calling on a higher power for help and the desire to start over. The Storm Copyright © 2019 by Lisa C. Campbell V1 It started out as rain Enough to wash away the pain But you can’t control the clouds And it keeps on pouring down Now the land has turned to sea And this storm is chasing me Ch I want to do what Noah did Put my faith in All there is Let this vessel carry me Across the angry sea Please carry me V2 At the mercy of the wind Where I’m going, where I’ve been Could be a thousand miles away It’s hard for me to say I’ve got to look beyond the score If I want to reach shore Ch2 I want to feel what Noah found When he put his feet on solid ground Is there still a seed Of this life inside of me If I dig down deep Bridge The sun can’t pierce these clouds That I'm carrying around I’ve got to put them down Ch3 I want to learn what Noah knew From starting over two by two I’ll start with two days in a row Then pray for two days more ‘Til I can face the storm ‘Til I embrace the storm

In reading the Wile-E Coyote lyrics I didn't get a strong sense of a storyline, but rather cautionary examples of what not to do. I think it can still work as John noted, but more narrative and less direct instruction would strengthen the lyrics overall. Where I'm getting stuck is in trying to develop a full story arc with a beginning, middle, and end. As of today I now have a hook "The Storm" which I am using as a metaphor for addiction. The story of Noah and the Ark is what I am referencing for starting over, finding firm ground, and moving on with all that you really need. Plan to come back to it this evening and will be thinking about emotive language. Always a good reminder. ~T

I'm trying! A little stuck on the progression of my story line, but inching closer. Any comments you have about Pachisme's submissions (2 is impressive!) might help me move forward. ~T

Telling a story using a well known story is a great challenge, I’m trying to write a story song about starting over using Noah and the flood as my reference. It’s going veeery slowly. ~T

Funny--no circuitous logic going on! I was responding to what I thought was the post immediately before mine, but my post was published after something that was unconnected and then the next post just picked up where I left off. I've seen that happen a few times where there doesn't appear to be a connection between posts and it ends up that thread was broken because of some glitch or delay in posting. Now there is a connection that comes to mind, but this isn't the explicit posting section :) ~T

Natural Woman -- Queen of Soul

Goodbye In Her Eyes - Zac Brown Band

Ooh! Nice nuance there. Ain't That a Kick in the Head - Dean Martin

Aye Calypso - John Denver

Great idea to feature lyric writers. I think Patty is the first one. Excellent place to start!

Sorry, Tom. Don Henley title was supposed to be Last Worthless Evening, not lonely. But loser still works with worthless.

Last Lonely Evening - Don Henley

Pour Some Sugar on Me - Def Leppard

No worries! It could just as easily have been a set of lyrics that Les and I collaborated on where both our names appear in the by lines. We've done a couple of fun collaborations for the challenges and some critiques get directed at him and some at me. It's all good. -Lisa