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    Emily Anderson
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  1. I like the melody of the chorus a lot...It kind of reminds me of something I've heard before ...Tears for Fears maybe? I'd say, make the lyrics in the chorus stand out more, like Will mentioned about a "hook." I think the reason it doesn't stand out is because the lyrics don't seem to have any sort of rhyming scheme. I'd say it's just a bit too wordy, or that the words seem forced into the pattern. Focus on making the lyrics more concise but with a good flow that matches the 'melodic rhythm' (with maybe more rhyming at the ends of phrases to help connect them?) to make them stand out and memorable. The bridge seems a bit long and difficult to differentiate from the rest of the song. In my opinion bridges should be short, (though I have broken this rule) and really quite a contrast from the rest of the song, almost like a little break that pulls you back into the chorus from a different perspective. I'd work on shortening that bridge and changing up the chords a bit to add a little lift. Or even, take it down to almost no instrumentation for a second, and just sing a couple of those main lines to really emphasize it, reducing some of the lyrical busy-ness, to state the main point of the song which is "it wasn't a silly fling, (it was) adulturation." More on the chorus to give more detail on what direction I might have taken with this -- The line: "Tenderness haunts me after dark, ohNow that we are over, Now that we are overSomehow" That part, with the "oh" and the repetition of "now that we are over" might be what you'd turn into the hook for the chorus. I'd go with that phrasing for the other part of the chorus, so that the 1st half of the chorus has the same phrasing in the words...maybe something like this: What you have is: "I'll pore over the memoriesshore up misgivings, blame my deficiencies" Maybe to make it match the 2nd part of the chorus it could be adjusted to something like this to connect with the first part (these lyrics are not great, obviously, you would write something else, but it demonstrates my idea as far as rhyming and phrasing): "I"ll pore over the memories, oh, go through emotions, left undiscovered, Somehow" Now, to me, the chorus is more singable and memorable because the phrases compliment each other with more lyrically similar inflections and vowel sounds. Altogether: "Tenderness haunts me after dark, ohNow that we're over, Now that we're over I'll pore over the memories, oh, Go through emotions left undiscovered, Somehow" Then, with the chorus being so full of the "oh" vowel, and with more of a rhyming scheme going, it can be better differentiated from the verses, which could go with a different sort of pattern of phrasing and vowel scheme. Anyway, that's my opinion -- Hope that helps. Thanks for sharing your song!
  2. Definitely, you gotta start somewhere. I consider you lucky to be able to do it, and often wish I could do that myself! Good luck to you!
  3. Way to go! Can I have your job? Ha ha. I suppose as an intern it's not much money, but still, pretty cool. now I really need to pay attention when you give me recording tips. (Not that I didn't already!)
  4. @M57 Thank you for your nice comments and thoughts. I haven't attempted any percussion because they always tend to sound bad when I try, but sometime in the future I might revisit that option. @MonoStone and @Will Sketches and @Jenn thank you also for your input. I've made a near-final version, and I'm posting it here. I think any further edits will be minor touch-ups. I think I have completely gotten rid off SNES synths. But I still would love feedback, should any exist. I don't plan to post any more versions for now, but will just let it sink in. @HoboSage it's now called "Sonnet." Oh, and @MikeRobinson I also edited the lyrics in the verses a bit. the new lyrics have slightly less adjectives. New lyrics follow: Love Is without you and within you, all around you Captivates you, and destroys you, then at once evades you If I had wings I still would never leave Got my feet down on the concrete floor After all that time away, The earth keeps me secure I’ve decided I have said goodbye too many times before I’ve said goodbye, too many times Love Disproportionate, insubordinate, intangible As it slowly reveals you, against your wishes If I had wings I still would never leave Got my feet down on the concrete floor After all that time away, The earth keeps me secure I’ve decided I have said goodbye too many times before I’ve said goodbye, too many times (bridge) Before… Don’t need another reason to fall into another hazy dream, be it mine or someone else’s Love Hypersensitive, explosive, devastating inflicting deep cuts that need healing If I had wings I still would never leave Got my feet down on the concrete floor After all that time away, The earth keeps me secure I’ve decided I have said goodbye too many times before I’ve said goodbye, too many times Love Words descriptive fit rightly within a sonnet
  5. I have added an updated version. I feel that this is warmer and that the instrument choice compliments the piano better. Thoughts?
  6. @Will Sketches, thanks for the compliment an your feedback. What you are saying makes sense-- I've been working on making the synth parts match more for this one. I'll send an updated version soon. I think it's starting to vibe better. @MonoStone Thanks for the suggestions, I'll study up on Knife and old Japan to see if it sparks any ideas. @HoboSage The title came because the piano part reminds me of the Promenade portion of Pictures at an Exhibition...but yes, not appropriate anymore with all the synth. It's a working title. I didn't want to just call it Love. @MikeRobinson Interesting that you think that. I actually wrote the melody first, and filled it in with the lyrics. I don't personally consider it fatal that it's not conversational because to me it seems like it's more of a poem. The lyrics kind of remind me of something Bjork would write maybe. But...I was hesitant to just write a bunch of rhyming descriptive words, and I see the wisdom in writing actual phrases instead. Thanks for your suggestion. I'll post an updated version soon.
  7. I like that bass descending down at the end of the chorus as it transitions into the flute solo, and again a few times in the"as we circle" part. I really enjoy the chorus, more so than the verses. In fact, I think the verse melody is a bit dry and somewhat uninteresting -- like I'm waiting to get to the chorus. But the production is so wonderful, that it forgives and enhances what would be a lack-luster verse for me. I love this song from the first chorus on. Absolutely love it. You are very skilled!
  8. Hi Jenn! This is cute and quirky! (I'm familiar with quirky!) And the sounds you used in the "clock in the closet" work so well and appropriately, I really like that. I agree that the first time is a little surprising and confusing...but like Sreyashi said it makes more sense the second time. I think for me it's the sudden high vocals both in the countermelody in the first verse which are such a contrast from the low parts. Once you add a lot of harmonies to help ground the high vocals and also set them back a bit in the mix, I think it would center everything better so it won't sound so abrupt. Another point I want to mention is that I may need to spend more time analyzing the lyrics, because they don't all make sense to me. Like the makeshift shadows in the ground part, and how the night and the light stay inside us. I'm not exactly sure what this is saying, but I understand that the clock is stopping when things aren't going well (the wrong reasons) but why is it in the closet? Just takes a bit to comprehend this one, but I think it's got a lot of potential which will be realized when it reaches it's final manifestation. I look forward to hearing more of this in the future!
  9. Thanks so much for your honest feedback. I thought the bass and swirly pulse sound sounded so cool! Therefore, I am disappointed that it didn't come off very well. My instincts for instrumentation are odd, apparently. Though, it could just be a matter of tweaking the sounds. Perhaps if I took out some of that buzz sound in that initial bass synth and then edited the swirly pulse so that it's more in the background...anyway, I'll experiment some more with that. I'm not sure I can do a cello sound very well with my synth...but I play oboe. I might pull out my oboe to add some authentic woodwind accompaniment instead.
  10. Hello Songstuff Friends! (See updated track below, titled "Sonnet") This is a work in progress, but I thought I'd take this point in time to share this one for voluntary feedback to help me complete it. These are my concerns: Are the lyrics effective? (They are below: I may completely change them - I'm not going to express my opinion about them just in case it influences anybody else's opinion) What do you think of the production and instrumentation? Any suggestions to improve it? These are scratch vocals, and I definitely plan to re-record them to be more solid. What do you think of the flow of the song form? Love Is without you and within you, all around you Captivates you, then destroys you, then at once evades you If I had wings I still would never leave Got my feet down on the concrete floor After all that time away, The earth keeps me secure I’ve decided I have said goodbye too many times before I’ve said goodbye, too many times Love Disproportionate, insubordinate, intangible As it slowly reveals you, against your wishes If I had wings I still would never leave Got my feet down on the concrete floor After all that time away, The earth keeps me secure I’ve decided I have said goodbye too many times before I’ve said goodbye, too many times (bridge) Before… I don’t need another reason to *fall* into a field of dreams, be it mine or someone else’s Love Metaphoric, aleatoric, always changing Hypersensitive, catatonic, devastating If I had wings I still would never leave Got my feet down on the concrete floor After all that time away, The earth keeps me secure I’ve decided I have said goodbye too many times before I’ve said goodbye, too many times agitating, un requiting, devastating Updated TRACK:
  11. Thanks for the comments everyone! @HoboSage, At one point in the making of this recording I tried adding percussion, in a fashion similar to what you described, with a simple timpani-like downbeat, and a few other things, but they failed terribly. I couldn't get it to sound like how I imagined it and I finally gave up! I have another version of this with a tuba/french horn beat at the end that had a similar effect with a "rest, eight-eight-quarter" rhythm that sounded pretty nice. I might put that back into this version at least. Thanks, @Steve Mueske for the suggestion. I'll look into that! @brycebad I'm glad that you can hear more emotion in this track than in my previous ones. It's difficult to get the same emotion that is felt in live performance into the recordings, so I'm glad to know that in this one I had a bit of success in that regard!
  12. Sure! Here they are: LYRICS: I stood in the shower with my face up And I heard the mountain waterfall And as it flowed, I remembered the bonfire From the day I lost my hold on you Now I’m boarding a plane that will take me Far away from here. When last we spoke, your eyes darted downward; An end to a brief consultation I won’t let it get me down This time I won’t be around I’m walking away When the stars show I won’t be found That flame only lasted a second But left the embers down my throat The bridge is down but the fire is lifted And now I don’t need your kisses I won’t let it get me down This time I won’t be around I’m walking away When the stars show I won’t be found Bridge: Our love was just like an ember that fizzled up in September, and now it’s burned out of me, finally, everything’s out. I won’t be around and I Won’t let it get me down This time I won’t be around I’m walking away, When the stars show I won’t be found
  13. Thanks @Richard Tracey. I used a full-sized, weighted key Roland keyboard that has a very realistic piano feel and sound. I did not record this through midi, but through a quarter-inch cable. Today I plan to brighten the piano a bit and do exactly what you said with the spreading out of the synth and the slight delay. @BielkaThank you! @MonoStone thanks for the input! I'll work on that piano sound tonight. @Jenn, I just listened to Laura Marling. She reminds me of Joni Mitchell a lot! I have been told I sound like Joni Mitchell before. Thanks for the suggestion! @Imken, yes I'll spend a bit of time tweaking the synth. Ah, yes that's Lana del Ray. I've heard that song before. A nice simple production, but works so well. Definitely a good example to go by. Thanks for the input!
  14. This song gave me goosebumps. It really feels sweet and lighthearted, but has a deep layer of emotional meaning that just brings out the chills. The major/minor contrast in the verses and chorus sounds perfectly complimentary, and presents the underlying sense of melancholy amidst the cheerful overtones. It puts me in the place you are describing, and I imagine the car ride and the sky; the sand, faded childhood memories. What a peaceful bridge/outro. Just beautiful. The production is great too -- your choice of instrumentation and such. My only suggestion is to strengthen and tighten the vocals. Thanks for sharing this lovely piece of music.
  15. Thanks for your comments Will and Sreyashi. I think you are both right and I will work on spreading out the instrumentation a bit (Though I don't think I'm going to replace that synth sound. I kinda like it...maybe if I just tweak it a bit it'll do the trick) adding some highs to the sound of the piano and smearing the harmonies with some reverb and blending. Will, I had thought about having some sort of percussive effect toward the end too, but had some trouble getting it to sound right. I'm going to experiment a bit more with it to see if I can't come up with something that works, especially now that I know I'm not the only one who felt that instinct.