AJ Green

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AJ Green last won the day on February 16 2015

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  • Birthday 04/12/1997

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  1. [V1] Tears i've cried Had suddenly made me realise you're not coming back to me I should have known that from the start And not trouble myself with someone who pierced my heart [V2] Tears washed away Every lingering feeling i have ever had for you Now it's over at last I will never turn my head again to glimpse at our past [PreC] Still it was painful to see How it all fell apart [C1] Tears you left behind have dried I don't even know why i cried It seemed like the only right thing to do But now i am not crying over you [C2] Tears you left behind have dried And i didn't even really tried To forget you darling and everything that we were And i can see clearly now that your blur is gone [V3] Tears are gone now Suns been shining like it shines after rainy april's day How have you been? I don't care I guess the loneliness is the burden that you now must bare [PreC] I will never come to take you Out of the hell you have made [C1] Tears you left behind have dried I don't even know why i cried It seemed like the only right thing to do But now i am not crying over you [C2] Tears you left behind have dried And i didn't even really tried To forget you darling and everything that we were And i can see clearly now that your blur is gone [Bridge] Is gone Is gone Everything is gone [C1] Tears you left behind have dried I don't even know why i cried It seemed like the only right thing to do But now i am not crying over you [C2] Tears you left behind have dried And i didn't even really tried To forget you darling and everything that we were And i can see clearly now that your blur is gone
  2. Hi I'm entering the challenge with this song please feel free to share your thoughts V1] I find myself sleeping in your arms You hold me tight but it's alright And if life has brought us close We should let the story go it's course Cause in warm embrace of your love There is nothing i should be afraid of Afraid of [C] You're the reason i can't say goodbye You have something i have never seen You have it all and give it all to me You give all the love, all the love i need [V2] I hardly believe that this is real Cause i have never felt what i feel But sometimes i just have to trust myself That you are the one and no one else And you must know my heart belongs to you No matter what we have to go through Have to go through [C] You're the reason i can't say goodbye You have something i have never seen You have it all and give it all to me You give all the love, all the love i need [bridge] Oh some people never find what they're looking for So think how lucky we are Cause there are times when love must close its door But not when i have your heart [Chorus 2x]
  3. You have something here that could be a very good song but i think you change the whole attitude of the song in the chorus. The first verse seems like it has been inspired from new beyonce's lemonade style if you know what i mean but the chorus gives off a more cheerful vibe and than the second verse is once again darker. It's bit short, it feels like the song has more to say. Hope it helps it's only my opinion though. Have fun with it AJ
  4. I imagine this to be an up-beat song. If you have a melody for it the five lines in verses could work but if you haven't it would be probably easier if the verses had 4 or 6 lines beacuse to me it feels that the fifth line is unnecessary. Four work just as good maybe even better. Anyway this is just my point of view otherwise it is a really nice effort. AJ
  5. I think this is an outstanding poem. It really is. It could also work as a song providing it's put in theater. I think it could do well in a musical where telling a deeper story in a single song is a normal thing. You have to have great ideas to pull of such an elaborate work and i would encourage you to explore writing musical plays. Just have fun with it maybe you'll like it AJ
  6. It's a beautiful song. Very strong messege. I agree with what's been said before. You just have to get more power out of the chorus and also from the bridge, this is of course just my opinion, but the fist two lines sound a bit cliche. Apart form that this is a wonderful song AJ
  7. Thank you John... I will look into the verses and probably shorten the chorus.. AJ
  8. Thank you Timbre i will definitely check that out AJ
  9. Timbre i appreciate your way of thinking. I thought by repeating the phrase "broken heart" i would evoke feelings. As singer says in the first verse "I didn't want to write a song about it", I imagined he had no words to say other than to emphasise that his heart was broken. As far as the story goes i thought like this: They know the relationship isn't working. They agree on breaking up, they think it's the only way to their happines but soon they realise their hearts are broken nonetheless. So he wants her back and she is now also not sure about leaving. I see now that my vision wasn't fully represented in the song but this is what i was going for. This is of course just a first draft so it makes me so much more grateful for your observations. AJ
  10. Hi I've been away for some time just finding my inspiration. This song is a last cry for a lover to stay though the singer is also not sure about this romace. They know their time is up but they're still trying to save what's left of their relationship. Hope you enjoy it and please share your opinions and thoughts. Broken heart [V1] I wanted to be the one you wake up to in the morning But i wasn't right to play that part I didn't want to write a song about it But all the greatest songs are written with a broken heart [C] Broken heart, broken heart Broken heart, broken heart Broken heart, broken heart Greatest melodies are written with a broken heart [V2] I remember every night i was your lover But now i only look back in pain Now you're gone in searching for another We'll never again be kissing in the rain [C] Broken heart, broken heart Broken heart, broken heart Broken heart, broken heart All the greatest words are written with a broken heart It's been wrong and so long, too long for us to make it Out of this hell that we call love, ive had enough You are leaving but can't seem to walk out Why won't you stay and heal one broken heart Broken heart, broken heart Broken heart, broken heart Broken heart, broken heart All the greatest songs, songs are written with a broken heart
  11. Thank you Peggy. I'll think about your suggestion AJ
  12. Thank you Les You're right it's more like another bridge or pre-chorus.
  13. Thank you jim
  14. To my mother who is always there. And for every mother on this planet who loves, holds and protects with all she has. [V1] There's nothing quite like her on this earth She loves me unconditionally since birth She gives me all she has just to make sure That i would have more [V2] Because of her i don't have a broken home Because of her i could never feel alone In this world where every step could be my last She is my present my future and my past [pre-chorus] She is my mother there could never be another Because she is unique from her head to her feet And all i need is mother's love [C] Mother's love is always enough for me Mother's touch is never too much for me All the tears in her eyes when i say goodbye Need no words there's nothing like mother's love from her [V4] When dark clouds are upon my sky She is always there to hear me cry And then she wipes the tears off my face She comforts me with her embrace [V5] She makes me smile when times are rough So sweet and sometimes a bit tough When i don't listen and stray from the road But i know she will always guide me back home [C] Mother's love is always enough for me Mother's touch is never too much for me All the tears in her eyes when i say goodbye Need no words there's nothing like mother's love from her [bridge] I know that one day she would have to leave But 'till then her love is the only love that's guaranteed No matter where i can always count on - mother's love [C] Mother's love is always enough for me Mother's touch is never too much for me All the tears in her eyes when i say goodbye Need no words there's nothing like mother's love from her
  15. I love it so much. Peggy as always you produced something amazing. I just explained how i'm feeling sometimes. Very good AJ