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Fernando

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Fernando last won the day on February 23 2016

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  1. All In Vain

    Hello Nelson, I'm really sorry for my harsh comment on your song, I overreacted to it and I wasn't constructive at all; that's not the point of this forum, my bad. Now that I have listened to it a few more times and more carefully, I've come to these conclusions/comments: * Your voice is very interesting, it is powerful, I like it a lot; specially at the ending, where you go higher in the last chorus. * The melody is the element I didn't like in my first listen, but I guess it's a style you were looking for. ¿What is(are) the scale(s) you are using to build the melody? I ask you this because, for me, it seems that tension never resolves; even in the chorus we, the listeners, don't find resolution or rest. * I think the lyrics are good, I really like the first verse, but not so much the second one, I think there's and opportunity to make it better. "And I found out that there was / No light but only fire... and lies". But fire emits light, so, if you're trying to say that you just found the burning of fire but no light, that's not clear. And the "... and lies." element doesn't help either to nail a clear image, it is just another element, up your sleeve, to rhyme, maybe; ¿What lies are you talking about? ¿What happened? * I think there's an opportunity to round out a story to tell, even if you keep it open-ended as it is now.
  2. All In Vain

    Boring and awful... all these sounds and singing, like in a bad broadway play... I don't like it at all, super-boring.... please stop doing this... sorry, but it kind of hurts my ears, it's very annoying all the way long... it might have some parts to rescue, but they are not enough...
  3. I'll be with you - Mix ok?

    It's nice, I really enjoyed it. But I really needed you to go higher in your singing, mixed or head voice; something exciting was missing. I think that this song needs something to surprise our ears, it sounds kind of monotonous all along. What if you added some higher female voices in some parts of it, the chorus for example?; I think it could benefit from that. Thanks.
  4. This Weird Love - colab with Lynn Wilson

    A very interesting song! I really like this weird love. I think it is very cool! Risky, though, if you are thinking mainstream. I love the melody in the two first lines of the chorus!
  5. Cell Phone Junkies!

    Hi! I loved it! If I had to criticize something, it'd be that there are too many transitions between rhythms and melodies, it is very fragmented. Nevertheless, I think it is kind of your trademark, and it works! I think this piece is designed to be a scene in a broadway musical, lol.
  6. Why can’t I love my way? <-- NEW VERSION

    Hey Chase, thank you very much!, I think that musically it needs a lot of work; but I really like the lyrics, they are surreal as you say; because they are based on Juan Gelman's poem "Preguntas", please look for it, it is very cool. Thank you again!
  7. Broken - (UPDATED 10/02/2017)

    Hello Richard! I liked both versions. I think the second one is better, though. I think this is, lyrically, super good! I thought of guys and girls who are socially trapped into an already set life-path. Like "you have to marry this man/woman and have kids". But, what if we don't want that? What if we married the wrong person and she/he is repressing ourselves? What if a gay woman or man got married to the opposite sex just because social pressure dictates that? That's broken! I think this song is very elegant and poetic on saying so. Very nice! Kudos! Fernando.
  8. The Next World

    Very nice epic work! I enjoyed it! At first, I needed it to run faster and be percussive sooner, the initial rhythm kept holding me back; but that's just a nice way to create expectation, then at 1:20 we, the listeners, get free; very cool. Fernando.
  9. GRANITE WALLS (harmony in chorus? - vote!)

    I almost can't tell the difference between verses and chorus, they are very similar melodically... So, it becomes boring; the guitar solos kind of sparkle a new wave to it, but they are not enough, I think.
  10. GRANITE WALLS (harmony in chorus? - vote!)

    Too much time between the first and second verse, I think...
  11. GRANITE WALLS (harmony in chorus? - vote!)

    I like it, but it lacks something to really engage me. "Outside" and "Goodbye" should be higher and more powerful. I love the guitar solo; it's great, it's impressive! I think it needs more melody variation to catch the ear and make us sing along. Just a thought, thank you for sharing. Fernando.
  12. You really know what your'e doing with that guitar... How is that concussion going? I hope you feel better. We need you writing more songs like this.
  13. Hey Chase, I really appreciate that you listened to my song. Your comment is so generous and energizing; I know my song is very far from being a little bit good, it is just the best I could do for now. I really love blues, R&B, gospel, country and rock songs with the B flavor; that's why I like your songs, and that's why I wanted your opinion; your songs are so natural; they have that deep soul sound and thrill that I love, beyond production. Thank you! Fernando.
  14. Critique please - She's A Killer

    Hello Glen, I enjoyed it and it was an interesting piece to hear. I think the concept is good, she's really a killer! you're right. About the lyrics: at first, I thought that listing all those lethal things was too much, naming half of those would get us to the point: "she's a killer, but she doesn't hate you". But, in a second thought, I think that by exaggerating the listing, as you did, you really get to the point: "Listen to me, there are really, I mean REALLY many things out there killing us", and it gives it a slightly funny twist, at least for me. So, bye Glen, now I need to get a can of Raid before I go to sleep. You missed the japanese giant hornet in your list! lol
  15. Turn Around - new mix 12/14/16

    Hey TC, very nice work! I love the guitars, they sound great. Very nice and interesting voice inflection at 2:18! It really surprised me. I enjoyed it. Fernando.
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