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JH Michaels

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  1. The End Of The Skyline

    I'm a little disappointed after just arriving in Monterey.....you want to just pack up and go to Ashville......ok so I'm just kidding. Without getting into the weeds about the lyrics, I thought they conveyed the meaning pretty well.....and I like the song as a 1+1....it's simple but rich in texture. With that said....the falsetto just doesn't grab me as a matter of personal taste. I get what you are doing, but I feel like it just doesn't drive home the feeling. You are far more detailed in your production than I could ever hope to be, so to me the overall song sounds great. I always look forward to listening to your work. I guess I could describe it as ear candy. lol
  2. Something To Hold On To - updated vocals

    Ain't recording fun!? This caught my eye: "Another kiss or another miss" I would consider changing this to "Another kiss, just a little bliss" ..it flows a little better for me and when I sang it through. Besides, "another miss" doesn't seem to fit the "need" imho. What I noticed in your vocals is that you are singing with more confidence......good job! I like the change up from your verses and chorus singing to the bridge where you're talking with the fx added. It's a welcome break. I also agree it goes on a bit too long and another idea would be to sing the first stanza in a different melody and talk through the second stanza......lol that's what I love about writing songs,...... there are a ba-zillion ways to do it, but what really matters is the way you want it to be. Keep writing!
  3. Charon (new vocal and new mix) - 07/08/2017

    I heard a couple of pitch issues, but nothing that I felt was egregious. It's a very good mood piece and I think that you did a nice job with the production and music. The opening was a tad too long to me at a full minute before the vocals started....but that's just a matter of personal taste. good job!
  4. The Curse Of Shane MacGowan

    Nicely Done! that was a fun listen! the only crit from my point of view is that it makes me want to grab a Guinness at 10 am (not a good match with Wheaties)!
  5. Alone In This

    I think you've gotten the emotional aspect of your song down pretty well. Your voice has some good potential and I think some training will pay off big dividends. I feel like I'm getting a bit rushed through the song, even though you sound pretty competent on your guitar. I would suggest where you are really strumming at a fast pace....try using a more measured and powerful timing and see how that works for you. You may find it provides some room to really concentrate on the lyrics. If you listen to a good power ballad, you'll see what I mean. Listen to Trans-siberian Orchestra "Forget About the Blame" both moon and sun versions. They are extremely good power ballads. Ok....to the lyrics. I asked for help, it's overrated they're lies they sell, & I hate it (try: they sell lies, I hate it) just take this pill, & you'll sedate (take this pill, and sedate it) I'm using those lines as an example....try to make your lyrics dynamic...make a statement and try to edit extra words..(I'm soooo guilty of putting in extra words that aren't needed). Then use that premise to go through all the lyrics...you may find that it will give you more room to sing the words and convey a more powerful message. Going on to open mic......practice performing in front of friends and family first...they can be your harshest critics but chances are, they will do so in an earnest attempt to help you. At an open mic, the crowds can be unforgiving. There are exceptions of course, but by and large, I've found my family and friends (and the folks on this site) to be the best at getting me ready to perform my songs. Just do a little prep work before you go to an open mic. Good luck....and submit more of your stuff here.
  6. That's hilarious.....I do exactly the same thing....sort of autopilot on the "yes dear" while I'm working out a rhyme or verse. I get caught at it though....she's gotten so she'll say something like "I sold your guitar, or I crashed the car...." huh? wha?
  7. Girl Don't Do It by Patty Lakamp

    David's new badass avatar comes across as a blank to me......so I'm not sure what that means..... Ok, I think the song is performed well, however, I do think it should be written for whomever the vocalist is.....if it's male, then maybe done with an aspect of don't do this and ruin our relationship. if female, then maybe as sister-sister advice like David suggested. I did feel a same-ness throughout the whole song and I felt my attention beginning to wander a bit after a couple of minutes. Maybe a key change in the bridge to add a little for insistence or urgency to the sound? just a thought.
  8. 100 Days

    Hi Dave, As songwriters, I think it's our moral obligation to speak out on things we feel strongly about. That is what is so uniquely great about our country. No one will come and bash in your door because you are speaking out against the current administration policies (ie North Korea). So take heart, always exercise your right to vote because this country has endured and overcome far worse things than now. Musically, I like the song it is well put together. The drums (not those again!) didn't bother me at all. The bridge felt a tad monotonous to me, maybe a little more dynamics in the vocals? Also just a small lyric suggestion, She's still welcoming those From distant and faraway lands Nice work
  9. Ancestr - Into The Sun

    I like the rolling vibe of the song.....but I do find it a bit monotonous....the stanza starting with "collecting dowry for the daughters" would make a good spot for a bridge. just a thought. Writing a song because it's something you enjoy doing is fantastic and I hope you are able to keep it that way. there are quite few DAW's that will allow you to record on multiple tracks ranging from free to quite pricey. Try to find the best fit for you. and remember.....enjoy the process!
  10. "Appropriate" Demo (Updated 6/14)

    Hi Jenn, You've made some vast improvements from your earlier work and I like the melody as well as the basic chord progression...well done! Your vocals don't seem to lend themselves well to a more reserved approach....they started to shine at around 59 seconds in..where you started belting it out imho....I think that is where your strength lies. Your second verse seems to me, would function more as a bridge than a verse. I would like to hear what happened? what did you do? is this something that happens often? do your friends come back to you? is there an underlying drinking problem? This is a great subject and it creates a lot of room to tell a story....I'm really looking forward to see how it develops.
  11. A Taoist's Requiem

    Hi Kjell, these mood type pieces really create images for me in the form of film shorts with no dialogue. I see the beginning in a nuclear holocaust, several detonations leading to a panoramic of ultimate devastation, nothing alive, nothing visible but a skeleton of a city in the background and a human skull in the foreground. A time-lapse sequence begins as a daisy grows and flowers then it remains the same while the rest of the scene begins to time-lapse of the land beginning to heal and grow. the skull and city gradually decay into the earth as plants gradually colonize the area and various forms of animal life cameos throughout the time lapse....some familiar, some not. at the end....a close-up of a furred hand/paw picks the daisy, then a rat-like nose sniffs it. the frame expands to show a rat-oid in front of a small village, in tribal dress, holding a spear, with tattoos, beads and small animal bones and a shield. He/she is joined by others in what we would recognize as preparing for war. If your music can generate that sort of imagery for me...I would say "well done"
  12. Rite of the Undertaker

    Hi Altres, Your piece reminded me significantly of "The Death March" softened and stylized. The guitar work was well done, and I have to say the best part for me. My mind started to wander about half-way through though.....where it seemed to get repetitive. Maybe a change in key or some change in chord/finger picking somewhere to add interest?
  13. I give my life to You

    Your vocals are very nice.....and the style is great. But it was too slow of a start for me.....just a little more dynamic in the beginning would go a long way. I think Jenn is on to something in that the song just didn't feel "full" to me...some other instrumentation in the background I think would help....like a soft violin woven through the chorus and later verse....just a thought. over-all it's a good song.
  14. Second Instrumental Song

    I like this too, Chalter. Without lyrics and vocals (which would really be cool with this music), I could see this with a surf video of all things. The thing that really stuck out to me though was a sound in the background percussion....like a shaken tamborine? I sort of reminded me of a rattlesnake in a jar. Yes, I know what that sounds like, lol. Just an observation from a personal stand-point. Good work.
  15. My Dear Son

    Nicely done. The song clearly conveys the emotion you feel. what else can be said about a song that does that? A+
  16. Let Me Down Softly

    Hi Gang, Here's another recording I'm working on....I'm looking for overall flow, timing, mix, and production critiques. Thanks everyone! Let Me Down Softly Copyright 2016 –JH Michaels Verse 1: I see you walkin’ toward me With a look that says Something’s on your mind So I’m holding my breath Verse 2: You say we have to talk Well don’t it always start that way You came to say good-bye And now you just can’t stay Pre-Chorus: So like golden sunlight On an autumn day Like a leaf in the breeze So please…………………………… Chorus: Let me down softly Oh Let me down softly Verse 3: I’m quietly dying inside But I put on a brave show And wish you all the best While you sadly smile and go Verse 4: And with you goes a part of me That will forever be gone How do I stop loving you When you’re all that I want Pre-Chorus Chorus Bridge: It’s not really a surprise that you found someone new You said it started out small, then changed and grew You tried to warn me so many times, oh that’s true That you needed more than I could ever give to you Pre-chorus Chorus x 4 End
  17. Let Me Down Softly

    I've always thought I had a voice only a deaf mother could love.....so thanks for the encouragement on the vocal front. Maybe that squeak is from my dentures coming loose.....hmmmmm.....Ok I'm just kidding there....I'll listen more closely to see if I can find where it's coming from.....Thanks for listening!
  18. Let Me Down Softly

    Thanks for the listen and comments.....heck I've spoken english my whole life and still have problems understanding how it works...lol I've worked with the lyrics on this one a bit and for my style of singing (or lack thereof), it seems to fit me better this way. Every time I do it live though, I tweek it a little so, who knows? I might end up with exactly how you are suggesting. Cheers!
  19. Beating Hearts

    I kind of get a Tracy Chapman feel out of this......I think this is really good too and I had the "it's over already?" moment at the end....well done....the lyrics are nice and the melody is excellent. I'm also a big fan of the chord progression...simple and effective. I thought the ending was a bit abrupt and think the chord should have been held and faded, but that's simply a matter of preference. It could use some tidying in production, but I could definitely imagine hearing this on radio.
  20. For myself, the mix seems quite well done......vocals are lovely and it seems you two are a perfect match harmonizing. As a matter of taste, I would prefer the percussion and bass just a tad higher in the mix, but you know....this song is really, really good as is. The lyrics and melody paint a very vivid picture of the feelings you are putting forward. Nice work!
  21. Missing You

    Hey all.....life has been quite a turmoil lately, so I haven't been able to do much recording. Here is one I'm working on....I'm mostly looking for crits in the the lyrics, overall song flow and my biggest bugaboo...timing . Production....well....I'm learning some new things but it's still my weakest point. Consider this a work in progress. As always, any and all comments are welcome....(hint: 'you suck' is not helpful) Missing You copyright 2017 JH Michaels, all rights reserved Verse 1: I look around and I'm all alone How do I stop this empty ache in my soul Our life was bright as a sunny day Since you're gone it all fades to gray Refrain: Every day, and every way, oh.. I'm missing you Every day, and every way, oh.. I'm missing you Verse 2: I tried to find a way to make you stay But no matter what I did, you went anyway It's you I find I...I really need So that my heart won't continue to bleed Refrain Verse 3: What do we do when it's all gone bad And we're just a shadow of the dreams we had Somehow I wish it could be The way it started for you and me Refrain Bridge: Oh baby please won't you come home Oh baby please won't you come home Refrain Bridge2: Oh baby please won't you come home Why did you leave me all alone Refrain Bridge3: Oh baby please won't you come home I can't stand being all alone End
  22. Total Noob Question

    Hi folks.....I want to insert electric guitar tracks I play into some of my songs and I don't have a clue how to do it other than do an open recording through a mic.....is there some way to directly input into the DAW? My wife will thank you if there's a way to do it without having the amp cranked up. My DAW is Reaper 5.3 something. Any help would be appreciated!
  23. Total Noob Question

    Thanks Starise.....good stuff....and free is usually a good price.
  24. Missing You

    Hi Theresa and thanks for the listen and comments....I guess I went 'A Bridge Too Far'.....and yes I have edited the bridges and cut them down. I'm not sure whether I have the pipes to do the chorus the way you are suggesting...I have a tendency to get "pitchy" if I try getting too fancy....I'll give it a try though and see how it goes.
  25. Missing You

    Thanks for the listen David, I've cut one of the bridges out and I'm in the process of adding an instrumental section rather than repeating the bridge/chorus. I think I am going to change up the end with a little different line leading up to the hook like you suggested....then again I might work verse 3 into a bridge as well. Good ideas to work with.
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