JH Michaels

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  1. Hey all.....life has been quite a turmoil lately, so I haven't been able to do much recording. Here is one I'm working on....I'm mostly looking for crits in the the lyrics, overall song flow and my biggest bugaboo...timing . Production....well....I'm learning some new things but it's still my weakest point. Consider this a work in progress. As always, any and all comments are welcome....(hint: 'you suck' is not helpful) Missing You copyright 2017 JH Michaels, all rights reserved Verse 1: I look around and I'm all alone How do I stop this empty ache in my soul Our life was bright as a sunny day Since you're gone it all fades to gray Refrain: Every day, and every way, oh.. I'm missing you Every day, and every way, oh.. I'm missing you Verse 2: I tried to find a way to make you stay But no matter what I did, you went anyway It's you I find I...I really need So that my heart won't continue to bleed Refrain Verse 3: What do we do when it's all gone bad And we're just a shadow of the dreams we had Somehow I wish it could be The way it started for you and me Refrain Bridge: Oh baby please won't you come home Oh baby please won't you come home Refrain Bridge2: Oh baby please won't you come home Why did you leave me all alone Refrain Bridge3: Oh baby please won't you come home I can't stand being all alone End
  2. Thanks Starise.....good stuff....and free is usually a good price.
  3. Hi folks.....I want to insert electric guitar tracks I play into some of my songs and I don't have a clue how to do it other than do an open recording through a mic.....is there some way to directly input into the DAW? My wife will thank you if there's a way to do it without having the amp cranked up. My DAW is Reaper 5.3 something. Any help would be appreciated!
  4. Hi Theresa and thanks for the listen and comments....I guess I went 'A Bridge Too Far'.....and yes I have edited the bridges and cut them down. I'm not sure whether I have the pipes to do the chorus the way you are suggesting...I have a tendency to get "pitchy" if I try getting too fancy....I'll give it a try though and see how it goes.
  5. Thanks for the listen David, I've cut one of the bridges out and I'm in the process of adding an instrumental section rather than repeating the bridge/chorus. I think I am going to change up the end with a little different line leading up to the hook like you suggested....then again I might work verse 3 into a bridge as well. Good ideas to work with.
  6. Good job and congrats in doing your first song! I can't think of much that can be as frustrating or rewarding at the same time...Like everyone else said some vocals and a little change-up would really fit the music well....and don't worry so much about your voice, Bob Dylan never had a great voice and look how it worked for him. I like the vibe in this...I felt the drum entry was spot-on and powerful....I think you've got some good instincts! I hope you keep working with it, I'd love to hear what you do with it.
  7. there's nothing wrong with the idea you've got going in the song. I'm thinking that one of the things that might improve the melody of the song is to not think about anyone else listening and just belt it out loud and proud. It almost sounds like you don't want someone else to hear what you're singing, so the song suffers. the lyrics are a good base to the song but need to be tightened and focused. I quoted the above as an example....IMHO, it could go: 'Cuz I'm tired of being alive....but not living a good life....that's just a suggestion, so do with it what you will. the music....well...not my cup of tea...but there was some improvement from your last effort. Keep working at it....believe me, it's well worth it.
  8. I like the acoustic guitar, that's a nice sound....it's a good base for the song. The distortion made it un-listenable....that needs to be cleaned up if you re-record. Personally, I'd like to see the lyrics as well. It's a start...I'd like to hear what you do with it after some refining.
  9. Lol you and TC both picked up on that.....it's a bad habit I really need to work on in my lyrics. Thanks for the listen and comments!
  10. Thanks Chalter I appreciate it. I shortened the bridge/refrain sequence, so hopefully that will help alleviate the repetitiveness. I might put some other things in for color...but we'll see.
  11. Thanks for the kind words, Ken and thank you for the listen!
  12. You have a good start on this tune. Nice vibe and simple but elegant changes. The vocal meter and the lyrics need a bit more honing. I have given you some ideas to chew on above. Hey TC...thanks for the input. I see you found that I have a very bad habit of adding words that don't need to be there. There is an exception of course....the 'oh' in the refrain is something I'm going to stick with....it serves two purposes for me....I use it to try to add some feeling to the refrain and it helps me do the transition vocally. At least that's how it goes in my head. The last line in verse two has always felt a touch odd...but I think that if I cut 'that' and 'continue to' out it will feel more natural. I like the snippet for the last line in verse three...it may not end up as 'fantasy' but its a great thought for me to noodle over. Cheers.
  13. Thank you for the listen Sreyashi.....I agree with you about the bridge/refrain section being too long and repetitive...so I took one set out to shorten it. I was hoping the bridge would provide some contrast so when you say it sounds too similar, I definitely will study it more closely. As for pitch.....the only thing that helps me with that is singing it more....ahem....tough job..but someone has to do it.
  14. lol .....good to know Rudi....I'll keep an eye out for those two from here on out! and I'll tell her that the new travel guitar I bought was really a new set of diamond earrings when I left the store.....don't know what happened between there and home
  15. Wow...good topic. I've always been interested in music, in singing, playing guitar and drums...(I sang "Country Roads" in my Vacation Bible School class to inconclusive reviews) and broke dozens of drum sticks by beating them against anything I could find. Unfortunately, to say that my mom and step-dad were unsupportive would be like saying the ocean is a small pond. Eventually, after a few years I gave in to "what was expected" and pursued a more conventional track and "rewarding" (pardon me while I yawn) career. Fast forward 45 years, then something truly magical happened. Out of nowhere I got a call from a private eye who was commissioned by my biological father to find me. He and my mom divorced when I was three and he had been trying to find me as I moved around the country over the years. I was skeptical of course, but he did provide convincing evidence. When we met, it freaked my wife completely out because we were virtually carbon copies of each other. Same build, mannerisms, hair (he had much less than me...yikes!) I found out that he had played in a band called Southern Comfort for many, many years as a drummer, and also my brother D (who I met for the first time then as well) is an accomplished bass and guitar player. So I picked up a guitar again. I really had my doubts when I started playing again, and had no confidence that I could even write a song but he kept telling me "goddam boy, it's in your genes, don't let no one tell you no different. Do what's inside and t'hell with 'em." and that's where I started writing my own songs. I looked around for some time trying to find somewhere to get more feedback on what I was writing and then I stumbled into Songstuff and the great group here. And I've never regretted it. Thanks John for putting together this site, and all you folks who write, perform, and produce music that take the time to critique and help. ~ JH
  16. First off, let me say good for you to post what you've done...With that being said, there is really nothing in this song I can get into. The lyrics are ok, but they really deserve some melody and would make more impact that way. The song is basically monochromatic and I think that's one of the biggest things that turn me off. I feel you're expecting me to find color on a blank, white sheet of paper. The music in the background is cheap sounding, repetitive and superficial. I know this is overwhelmingly negative, but don't let it discourage you. Work with this, try again, put some melody in it and come up with something better. Try to paint a picture with sound. Music is what emotion sounds like....try to tap into your feelings with it. I think I speak for everyone on this site, that we want you to succeed, and wish you the best. Good Luck!
  17. I got the Nirvana type vibe out of it too.....liked the feel of it.....It did get a bit repetitious toward the end.....To me, the dancing on the table verse would be a good place for a bridge to throw a change at us. Just my opinion, though, I think this could be a solid rocker with some more work.
  18. Shoot....that would vary from day to day....but for today, and the mood I'm in.....I would say "Soldiers of America" by Madison Rising. 'nuff said.
  19. Chumpy and Dave.....Thanks for the help! You guys made my wife a happy woman! It's the first time I didn't have have to 'convince' her I needed a music accessory.
  20. Wow Suzie....that was a long, strange trip. I agree with Dek that you've created the whole new genre "space country" The song was interesting, different (normal for you), but I felt too long. All the change-ups helped with that, but by the end I was thinking your character should have done him in at about verse three....lol. IMHO, I would cut out the intro verse....it seems superfluous to me and switches immediately from 3rd person to 1st. Your three line verse 5....cracked me up and I almost spewed coffee all over my computer. Great lines! So I have to know in verse 9....if her bra was in his pocket....and her panties in his jeans....he must have been wearing them? Not too subtle on his part.....again I almost lost my coffee. The vocals were so varied and surreal in most places, I really don't know if you could say that they were pitch issues. It just 'worked' with the song. Overall, I think a nice job.
  21. I think this should be posted in the lyrics critique...no music included here.
  22. Could you post lyrics? It would be very helpful to all to offer any opinions.
  23. Nice Kevin....yeah I have to say it really does have an '80's vibe....everything in it seems spot on. there is a brief empty spot in percussion at approximately 2:33 where it seems the change-up on the beat has a hiccup. My ear's not the best for that so it may be nothing. Lyrics are great and it's another solid performance on your part. Well done my friend.
  24. My first thought is that your vocals don't need to fight with the train sound effects or the harp. I think that your vocals and lyrics of the song are the stars and are really strong. The harp is a nice addition, but perhaps a bit softer so it doesn't over-ride the vocals. Just my 2 cents. Nice song!
  25. I think if you push the kick/base beat into more prominence...you'd end up with a relentless non-stop dance/disco tune. not a bad thing...I could see people out on a dance floor grooving to this. It's got a nice, positive feel to it.