David Ritchie

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About David Ritchie

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Profile Information

  • Gender
    Male
  • Location
    United States of America
  • Interests
    Music, writing, reading.

Music Background

  • Band / Artist Name
    Summit of Two
  • Musical / Songwriting / Music Biz Skills
    50 years performing. I play rhythm guitar and am lead vocalist for 2 bands.Primarily a lyricist.
  • Musical Influences
    Too many to list. Roy Orbison, Neal Young, etc.

Collaboration

  • Songwriting Collaboration
    Interested

Critique Preferences

  • Getting Critique
    Any and All
  1. I would appreciate your comments/suggestions, please. David Wonder If I’ll Ever Get Home David Ritchie When I step out on that highway I wonder if I’ll ever get home Two thousand miles away I wonder if I’ll ever get home It’s hot early in the morning Daytime’s hotter still I hope someone’ll find me walkin’ And let me rest a little while It’s way too early in the morning To be on my torn down way An’ I ain’t got no place to stay So I’ll just get on goin’ Chorus: (more intense) Walk on, walk on, boy, walk on I lived my life too fast Gotta’ slow down ain’t got no choice ‘cause there’s a ball o’ fire ahead! C’mon man, pick up that shoe Put it out as far as it will go Cain’t you move it on, cain’t you move it on Cain’t you move it, my man I wonder if I’ll ever get home Before the sun go down for good I wonder if I’ll ever get home It’ll be a dark and dangerous day Chorus: (more intense) Walk on, walk on, boy, walk on I lived my life too fast Gotta’ slow down ain’t got no choice ‘cause there’s a ball o’ fire ahead! Well, I ain’t got no time to lose Don’t wanna be late, my life’s at stake I’m going home, man, I’m goin’ home I’m goin’ home, my man, I’m goin home.
  2. Thanks for your suggestion. I hope you will take a look at other lyrics I have posted, and give me your thoughts.
  3. Appreciate your critique. Under a Well-Lit Moon David Ritchie what was I feelin' when i jumped up on that train goin' down south gonna do some healin' It's a hard way to get there but i'm goin' on that way legs hangin' outta this boxcar towns flyin' by Chorus: so i'll wish you goodbye an' hope we'll meet again but it won't be the same on that you can rely I'm fightin' some unholy war knowin' that I can't win sittin' out on a cold, cold morning an' watch the sunrise burn the sky when the well-lit moon comes into view it's just an eye movin' by passin' judgment, makin' me cry Every now and then we'd pass thru another darkened universe i'd lay back like this greasy boxcar was just a dirty hearse Chorus: so i'll wish you goodbye an' hope we'll meet again but it won't be the same on that you can rely There ain't no new way of dying aint' no new way to be lonely it's always seems to be the same But I just keep on tryin' Chorus: so i'll wish you goodbye an' hope we'll meet again but it won't be the same on that you can rely Under a Well-Lit Moon.docx
  4. Thank you both for the suggestions. I'm working on them. Hey, know anyone who would like to collaborate? Me lyrics, them melodies.....
  5. Leaving Eden David Ritchie We were born under cover of darkness But when you came to light there were lovely changes And watching you emerge just left me speechless You were a little shy with happy eyes and a touch of hot flirtation! Well, Adam was no lover, until he fell for Eve And Eden was no garden before that magic day That we both felt our bodies come to believe That Eden’s not the place where we learn to betray! Chorus: We’ve all been given promises by smiling sellers Smoking panatelas and speaking in tongues They sell tender hearts to the highest bidders But once they get their hands on you the trap is sprung! A little shy with teasing eyes you turned to me ‘c’mon, let’s go”! You said “let’s get away”. Eden is a place to love and be loved in return My head was full of questions of what our life could be I’m what you want and why you came ‘cause I’m your destiny! And my love came undone began to wake and shine, in that moment you danced across my path and told me life is sweet depends upon the one you meet so let’s leave our lonely hearts behind make this journey complete. Close and fade out: My head was full of questions of what our life could be I’m what you want and why you came ‘cause I’m your destiny! My head was full of questions of what our life could be I’m what you want and why you came ‘cause I’m your destiny!
  6. Written with The Doors in mind: Solitary Mind David Ritchie Walking this road talking to the sun Between the lines secrets on the run I’m better off if words don’t slide Thru the cracks of a solitary mind. This road I’ve taken many times I need to see if I can find That busy door that’ll let me through Not be left behind...a solitary mind CHORUS: Born in shadow I fed on light Descendant of darkness I move to the light Dance of wildness, dance divine The dance I dance, of a solitary mind. Now let us go and do this thing This thing that life, to us shall bring Dance of heaven, dance of farewell The dance that mortals dance so well Now the sun rises new I return to shadows to wait for you To return to the world without light For darkness to come at the edge of night CHORUS: Born in shadow I fed on light Descendant of darkness I move to the light Dance of wildness, dance divine The dance I dance, of a solitary mind. repeat fade out
  7. PP, I can't find the original of Rendevous that you requested. Sorry to be so long in getting back to you. Can you work on the latest iteration I sent you?

    david

    1. Pahchisme Plaid

      Pahchisme Plaid

      I did shoot you a couple of emails.  Did you get them?

       

    2. Pahchisme Plaid

      Pahchisme Plaid

      Hey, David

       

      I couldn't figure out how to get back the window were were chatting in and my short-term memory is awful.  I forgot what your profile pic was and ended up messaging another David Ritchie.  Could you tell me again what to look for?

       

    3. David Ritchie

      David Ritchie

      Hi, PP. i have cousins all over Scotland, Ireland and some in Wales with my same name. It's a pic of me holding my guitar at a recent performance.  My timeline pic is a fallen angel. See if this gets you there. https://www.facebook.com/CelticGuitar

       

      Can you give me yours again?

      David

  8. Hi David, I was just checking out the lyrics you mentioned you wanted suggestions on from Nov. 16.  There didn't seem to be any place to reply to them on that forum, so that's why I'm here.  I was wondering what your envisioned tempo and genre were for this song.  What I might suggest (because you asked, not because I see issues at all with what you have), is this:  I think it would be pretty cool to use "Rendezvous" as the name of a place, a town or city.  You might have to tweek one of your verses a bit to get the idea of it, but your chorus set-up works for both "ideas" if you wanted to jump from the idea of a meeting in one verse to a city/town/place in another.  Just an idea.  

    1. Pahchisme Plaid

      Pahchisme Plaid

      Ooops, now I know why I couldn't reply.  It was the archive and the year 2016.  Guess I should pay closer attention to where I am.  

    2. David Ritchie

      David Ritchie

      Glad to hear from you again. Indeed, I feel the need for help with this set of lyrics. Why, well, right now it's ineffable. 

      I love the idea of making it the name of a town/place. I have it out and I'm reading it. Do you have some specific suggestions to help? And if it would be easier for you as it would for me, may we work on this via regular email? Mine is islandwriter1948@gmail.com. Maybe this song could be a collaboration.

      d

       

    3. Pahchisme Plaid

      Pahchisme Plaid

      I'll shoot you an email, David Ritchie.  

  9. Well said. I quite understand. Having been a poet for nearly half a century, I am comfortable with words and feel them deeply. However; I struggle with expressing myself with my guitar. While I love to play, and perform in my band, it's just not my paradigm.
  10. yep.
  11. Thank you, Gary. Keep that pen (or keyboard) busy..... David
  12. You paint pictures well. Let me say that I am brand spankin' new at critique, and often to0 blunt. No harm intended. I go by how you make me feel. Your lyrics are dense ,ala Gordon Lightfoot. That's a good thing. For me, hence my preference, I like to paint in smaller, briefer strokes and let the listener mix the music and the lyric into a single 'thing', ala Roy Orbison. I"m just learning to comment, so my regrets if not yet helpful. David
  13. Interesting comments. it seems to me that many of you hear the music in your head, and live in that milieu. I live in words in my head. I don't need the music to be the impetus, but it does finish the 'sculpture' for me. I must be a rank amateur, Gravity, as inspiration is a beautiful, colorful, rewarding, encouraging, revelatory, arousing, and illuminating thing for me. But not everyone can have your genius. Tom, thank you for your thoughts. I do mean LYRICS, not SONGS. I learn from your thoughts and comments, thank you all.
  14. What is it that makes you actually sit down to write lyrics? For me, I've learned there are a few things which seem to change my brain waves. Or at least cause me to feel different, an altered state. First is music. I've come across songs that simply induce a need to express myself. This Doors are one. Listening to The End does it. Similar psychedelic music seems to have that same power. But not just that genre. Also, art can do this. As simple as this may sound, I do a google image search of strange art, or something equally odd, and bring up pieces that stir my brain. The effect is amazing. Do you have something like this? David
  15. Excellent, Gary. Many thanks. David