Pahchisme Plaid

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    Eva Cassidy, Kathy Troccoli, Susan Tedeschi, Simon and Garfunkle, Eagles, Sarah McLaughlin, Tricia Yearwood, Fleetwood Mac.

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  1. I get that, Gary. Sometimes my head hurts and my processor stops working and my pen taps out a poor attempt at morse code
  2. Hey Lisa, I think the vocals and music were so perfect for the feel of the lyrics. The tempo and timing fit nicely as well as the intonation and she has a bit of a smokey feel in her voice which lends well to the song. There is an air of foreboding, even mournful apprehension maybe The well timed echos near end are interesting, particularly at that stage of the song. The only part that might be tweeked just a little, in my opinion, is the bridge. Maybe just a slight variation in melody between "taken too young" and "left unsung". It kinda stays the same just a hare too long. Other than that. Really great composition. My listening was on an iPod without the use of earbuds--so just the iPod internal speakers. I'm sure it would sound even better on my computer speakers or with earbuds.
  3. I found myself backing up to the first verse. I wanted more detail on that journalist journeyman. I wanted his story--how it was, how it phases out and how it is now. That's a manner of reporting I wish our reporters would go back to--less opinion, more facts (confirmed facts before reporting) and chasing newsworthy news instead of the latest play by play of a well-beaten topic. I wanted more on that dying art of fact gathering and chasing the latest big lead. It could be more about how that kind of reporting isn't valued today and how the emphatic opinions and character painting has become the popular chase snuffing out the "old" way. You could use terms like round up or round file the ribbon (implying a typewriter), pack up the pen and pads, let go the leads, hang up the herringbone on the hat rack--just giving it that old fashioned feel. I think the coal mine idea could be interesting too, and I understand how you were tying them together with your refrain giving a new representation with each verse, but for me, my appetite was whet with that first verse and I was left hanging. I would rather hear the lament of the journalist of then until now commenting how he might as well let the curtain down. Just my preference. I think you could get two songs from this.
  4. This is all great information, Mahesh! Thank you for the extra insight of what goes on inside the body when singing from the diaphragm--getting that mental picture helps! I look forward to whatever video you find to share. What amount of daily time does it take to properly get your vocals conditioned over time? (whatever it is vocalists do to prepare to sing and/or strengthen what they have.) Is this conditioning something you can multi-task with or does it need to be special time set aside for it? I'm talking after watching the videos and learning the techniques. Personally, I would have to start from square 1 (using the videos as one would an exercise video until learning the form and routine), as I've not had the instruction aside from this here and a few tips on the fly from others who sing.
  5. You have an absolutely beautiful voice, Rachel! I am trying to get through a crazy busy phase in my schedule right now, but if by June you still haven't connected with someone to help you with this, message me and I might be able to help you out. Your Chinese version is gorgeous!
  6. Thank you for this insight and for the article, Rob Ash. I'm thinking that the few weeks that seemed to be of particular struggle, there were a number of songs I was learning for the first time. Perhaps my "map" wasn't shaped yet, and I DID notice, it was difficult to know when would be best to take a breath because I was not yet familiar with how the song went. I can often anticipate the direction of songs either by watching the other singers or from the accompanying music or just because it makes sense, even when I haven't heard or sung them before. Occasionally, however, there will be a song that doesn't make that kind of sense to me in the direction it takes--those ones are the ones I struggle with in knowing where I should be taking breaths. This information is helpful. I know that I often sing from the gut, but probably not all the time. I definitely need the breathing information--even for when I'm not singing. Thanks!
  7. Hey Timbre, thanks for the feedback! I didn't quite know if I liked that third line in there, I may go with your suggestion or something similar. I still need to test out some sort of melody with this. That sometimes determines for me whether or not I pull, modify or use a line or swap things around--sometimes. Lyrically, I completely agree with you. Likely I will nix that line--more likely than not. Good eye!
  8. I hope I did this right. You said no "end of line rhymes" and my endings don't rhyme (except 2, one being the last line of the verse), but there are some rhymes within lines. Hope that's okay. HE HOLDS ON lyrics by Kc Chad ©2017 Early early ember enters September a flame that strives to burn on the west wind blows to catch the coal but the bite of frost hurts, oh it stings his soul He holds on. He holds on trying to pull back whatever's gone He holds her hand, she holds his heart She's there with him, but he's alone Still.. he holds on. Summer folds in the cold of October The birds songs are fading fast The green goes gold, amber and red flakes flutter down, down, down blanket on the bed He holds on. He holds on trying to pull back whatever's gone He holds her hand, she holds his heart She's there with him, but he's alone Still.. he holds on The kodachrome captured one November a trip to a Niagra escape in photos curled on the edges where they eloped, forever tethered He catches a glimpse of warmth in her smile her eyes light up Oh! Its been awhile Her cheeks twinge blush He rises up to to greet her and then she's gone He holds on. He holds on trying to pull back whatever's gone He holds her hand, she holds his heart She's there with him, but he's alone Still.. he holds on
  9. Gorgeous voice! I love when you picked up the rhythm of the guitar. As a matter of fact, I personally think that though you've got a story song here (which has some interesting imagery by the way), audibly, I'm pulled in where the guitar music picks up. I'd like to hear it come in sooner and be more frequent.
  10. I won't give it up, Tim. I enjoy it too much. However, I also can feel exhausted at times from singing, depending on various factors. I'm on the ups now, so hopefully not so much an issue as a bit back. Energy is a factor in that.
  11. I'm almost positive I don't breathe properly, especially under stress and possibly lousy lung capacity. I'm not one to be able to hold a note for too long and I probably would benefit from some jogging or something of that sort to help that lung capacity. I thought it was recommended to breathe so your tummy would rise and fall and not necessarily through the chest cavity?
  12. I wonder if my age has anything to do with it. When I was in my 20's and 30's I sang all the time, in the car, while doing housework, while gardening, etc and had not issues with endurance or dryness in my throat or hoarseness or rawness. Also, it just occurred to me that I started a new medication about a month or so ago. I suppose that might be a contributor? I had way more energy then, too, so "felt" like singing constantly.
  13. Thank you for this, John! I haven't yet checked out the above videos, but I'm looking forward to what I find in them. Very helpful, indeed! I'm not much of a talker, except for read-aloud to my son, so got that mostly covered. I have to raise my voice sometimes, (not really yelling though) cause my daughter isn't able to hear me when I use my normal voice (argh!), and I'm not a wine drinker (pee-u, that stuff stinks!), and maybe have a drink 2-3 x/ year MAYBE, so that's covered too! I could do better hydrating--Always. I'll be checking out those videos for sure!
  14. I've got lots to learn. I am not a performer, but I do sing in a worship team at my church and record my songs into a recorder. I used to belong to a a small church of older folks and led familiar hymns, often a capella because the pianist passed away and the organist had some major health issues. Last fall, my life got crazy and I had to make some changes in my life. One of them was moving to a church closer to home. At this church, I joined the worship team--much more fun than singing alone and lots of musicians/vocalists. I'm not the leader (which I like) and I'm not singing EVERY Sunday, I like singing with others because its fun, I like the harmonizing and I get a little bit of a vocal break when singing with others and its just much easier than singing (leading) alone every weekend. Anyway, prior to the service, we practice once through as a team. What I noticed after practicing is that partway through the service, my throat starts to get dry and feels a little raw. It doesn't happen all the time, but seems to happen a lot more lately (also in my mid 40s if that affects things). That made me wonder, How do performers sing night after night for hours sometimes? Perhaps I'm not singing right. I've never had the cha-ching $$$ to take any lessons (remember, I'm a writer who sings, not a performer), so seeing someone sing for hours blows me away at how its possible. The other thing....Did anyone see the Macy Day parade where Taylor Swift sang live? How did she not kill her vocals doing that? It was freezing cold! How can you "warm" vocals under those circumstances? I've also noticed everything flows better in warm weather or after having a warm drink, but everything constricts in the cold! At least for me!
  15. No worries. When I read through the lyrics, I didn't really feel the need to know any specific reason why the angel had to leave. I assumed he feared her influence on him and/or his influence on her and that fear was strong enough for him to choose to detach, but that's just me. Some like more details, some like to be able to fill in the blanks. Personally, I think you're fine lyrically with what you have for content. I would include a bridge only if the pace of the song is slow or seems long and needs a melodic change-up once the music and melody are put with it. Lyrically it keeps my interest and offers "just enough".