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Leo

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About Leo

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    Experienced Player
  • Birthday 10/31/1982

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    https://leoandthedude.bandcamp.com

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  • Gender
    Male
  • Location
    Australia

Music Background

  • Band / Artist Name
    Leo Sherman
  • Musical / Songwriting / Music Biz Skills
    Singer/Songwriter
  • Musical Influences
    the Smiths, Beck, Blind Faith, Cat Stevens, Johnny Cash, INXS, Elton John, Talking heads, Arlo Guthrie and The Band

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  • Songwriting Collaboration
    Interested

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  1. Pick and Lift

    A new edition. All critique is welcomed. Pick and Lift Unseen tonight, There’s no light, Dark inside and out, A sound just might, Wake up a fright, In those who sleep so tight, Then unaware, Myself I scare, As I break the inside, A breath I take, Of stolen air, To fuel my long lost pride, I pick and lift, And break a chunk, Of someone else's life, To build a whole, Fulfil my roll, To band my leaking soul, Ashamed to claim, What I must bare, It’s me behind the mask I wear,
  2. Pick and Lift

    Thanks John, I agree, Iv'e changed that part. What do you think? Pick and Lift Unseen tonight, Where there’s no light, Dark inside and out, A sound that might, Wake up a fright, In those who sleep tight, Then unaware, Myself I scare, As I break the inside, A breath I take, Of stolen air, To fuel my long lost pride, I pick and lift, And break a piece, Of someone else's life, To build a whole, To fill a hole, To band my leaking heart, Ashamed to say, No easy way, It’s me behind the mask I wear,
  3. Pick and Lift

    Hey folks, First time post to poet's corner. What do you think? Pick and Lift Unseen tonight, There is no light, Dark inside and out, A sound that might, Wake up a fright, In those who sleep so tight, Unaware, Myself I scare, As I break the inside, A breath I take, Of stolen air, To fuel my long lost pride, I pick and lift, All that I can, Tonight I dine myself, amen, A king of kings, A self made man, A pirate on dry land, But unaware, I stop and stare, A photo of my wife?, Could It, It seems, It couldn’t be, I think I just had might, Ashamed to say, No easy way, I’m robbing my own house,
  4. A bit of a diversion for me...

    Hey Dazz, Cool sound, sort of Joy division with Josh Homme in a lo-fi production. I really like the bass line. I would bring it more to the front. To me, the chorus could use more power. I would suggest the lead guitar to play something different than the vocal melody. And maybe add more to the drums. Maybe adding another instrument in the chorus... Can you post the lyrics please, Thanks
  5. Hey Sreyashi, Thanks again 1. The line you suggested doesn't sit well for me on the melody, Perhaps i'm not singing it the way you hear it. 2. To me, it is the chance that is 'avoiding my request'. 3. The song is about performing. Or more so, about missing out by not performing. So 'bright lights' refers to stage lights. Also my pronunciation is a bit dodgy on the 'H's, so it's easier for me to sing 'bright'. 4. I really like @Jenn's proposal: As she explained: 5.Iv'e changed the line a little. what do you think of it now? Thanks again, Leo
  6. Hey Timbre, Thanks for your comments. To me the chorus doesn't spill over like the verse, could you give an example on what you mean/would change. I agree the "it is" wasn't working very well, I'm trying on for size replacing it with I know as @Jenn suggested. So it reads as follow: Losing out on you Try, it’s better when the sun turns off and, Hides, the imperfections tells me that it's fine, To spit-out all those li-ttle lies, Sound, of heartbeat thumping through my veins that, Drowns, the intentions that I had for what a clown, What have you done now, I think I see a chance, Avoiding my request, To join me in a dance for two, So bright it hurts the eyes, Feel sick cause I know why, I know I’m losing out on you, Lines, that play out in my deeply worried, Mind, to never miss a beat as you step out, To those vultures circling, above, Part, of everything I write there is a, doubt, if any of it’s real right from the start, Of ever being here, I think I see a chance, Avoiding my request, To join me in a dance for two, So bright it hurts the eyes, Feel sick cause I know why, I know I’m losing out on you, https://soundcloud.com/leosherman/losing-out-on-you
  7. So Long

    Thanks so much Sreyashi, I value your opinion very much. It really means allot to me that you like the song. You helped me think more about the stories in the lyrics I'm writing. Thanks.
  8. So Long

    Thanks Tom, Would love to get your feedback. It's inspired by the finger picking in Phil Ochs's 'One more parade'. Maybe that's where the familiarity is from.
  9. So Long

    I like it very much, will use it. Thanks a bunch.
  10. It's Just A Song

    Hey Cassie, Cool demo, I like the story and your voice sounds great. Iv'e got a couple of suggestions with the lyrics: It's Just A Song Maybe to you it's just a song, Maybe to you, But i'm a long way from home and mighty blue, When I'm feeling lost and lonely I let the music take me home, but maybe to you, Maybe to you it's just a song, Iv'e been on the move so much I'm not sure where I'm going, Often I will stop to think of places where Iv'e been, I wrap myself in melody and memory so strong, But maybe to you, Maybe to you it's just a song, I can hear the images of fields awaiting harvest, I can see the river just before it bends, With every verse and chorus I'm closer, To the place that makes me stronger, But maybe to you, Maybe to you it's just a song, Best of luck.
  11. So Long

    You mean a something like this??
  12. So Long

    Yamaha classical guitar with mid price, mid tension strings. Recorded on a 4track app on a Samsung s3.
  13. So Long

    Don't keep us in suspense,
  14. So Long

    Here's the demo, rough as promised Mainly to show how the lyrics work with the melody. Thanks for listening. https://soundcloud.com/leosherman/so-long/s-BRk57
  15. So Long

    Thanks Peggy. I would love to read your ideas.
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