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Chicken picker

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  1. Lyrics Writing Challenge #7 - Protest Song

    Thank you for reading through my lyrics and taking the time for such an in-depth reply. As you can see, I'm not very experienced at either poetry or songwriting. There was no structure in mind for either the song itself or for the rhyme scheme. I just did my best to tell the story using imagery, rhythm, and rhyme, and this is the direction it took. I'm not sure if I can put it to music. That' the next challenge, which will likely result in another dozen or so rewrites. I appreciate your feedback and will likely polish up the structure and rhyme scheme when putting it to music next.
  2. Lyrics Writing Challenge #7 - Protest Song

    I think I remember something about that from college, but it was long forgotten. Still, it's true and it makes a wonderful visual in your lyrics.
  3. Lyrics Writing Challenge #7 - Protest Song

    Beautiful imagery. I love how you personify the earth by describing climate change as a fever and her lungs as the trees. Brilliant.
  4. Lyrics Writing Challenge #7 - Protest Song

    How interesting I found this post today. I've been working on revisions to one that I wrote from an object writing session. It's called Fallout, and this is today's version: Fallout v.1Fallout shelter underground.Survival gear scattered around.Drums of grains. Mildew stains.Cold War relics still remain.v.2Rural folks lived to tellof childhood days they knew too well.War fears stoked. Paranoia stroked.Armageddon had been provoked.v.3Another generation's passed.Fallout shelters holding fast.War fears stoked. Paranoia stroked.Armageddon's still blowing smoke.c.1The fallout is hereWe see it clearlyProfiteers and financiers (hell bent on)choking off our atmosphere.Armageddon's marching near.v.4Fallout shelter underground,survival gear hand-me-downs, Militia crackbrains. Bulging veins.Armageddon's drum still sounds.c.2The fallout is here.Our consequence appeared,a dying global biosphere.We look to space, the new frontier.Armageddon perseveres. © 2017 JKNebel
  5. Hi all, I've been sitting on this song for awhile and am in need of a collaboration to pair it with some music and create a professional demo. I've gotten good feedback from some pros in the industry and have adjusted to their recommendations. There's a pitch opportunity I'd like to take advantage of that ends June 16. The pitch is for a major country artist in the US, and I think these lyrics fit the bill for an upbeat summer song to present. The lyrics: Redneck Pension V1 Got a spot of land, Fishing lake More bass and crappies than I can take V2 Case of beer Fishing gear Honey, get this tick off of my ear C1 That's how I'm living On my redneck pension I got all I need here I don't fear no recessions My own apple pie dream Far off the mainstream Living high on wild hogs On my redneck pension V3 Hunting grounds, Ammo rounds, White tail, rabbits, with four coonhounds V4 Bought my land in cold hard cashDuring that economic crash Bridge Bankers turned my investments into trash And their foreclosures burned my stash I had to work under the table To keep my family stable Rich man loopholes aid the scam Hiding it from Uncle Sam Chorus 2 Now I'm living the dream on my redneck pension I had to beg, borrow and steal To own this possession I'm telling you now, This is my one true confession I'm living free and easy On my redneck pension Outro Redneck pension Lifelong obsession My last confession. Hey, I didn't do nothing those darned executives don't do I ain't bending to your conventions Hey there! Get off my property ya'll This here is my land and your trespassing on it You don't leave now and I'll shoot you in the can And then a fingerpicked descending bassline with an explosive strum at the end I do have a melody in mind, but I'd like to hear what someone else might have in that department, too.
  6. Is there a point to making an album?

    I realize I'm late to this conversation and likely inserting some serious thread drift by quoting from several pages back, but I wanted to respond to this comment. I recently picked up Miranda Lambert's new 2 disc release, and there are maybe 4 to 5 songs out of 23-26 (can't remember which, but it was a lot) that I wasn't immediately happy to hear. That handful of songs has also grown on me after a few plays, so I'd say this whole collection is a home run. In all honesty, I've never owned a single CD with so many good songs on it. Now onto the first topic, I almost never purchase physical music anymore. This is my first purchase in a very long time. Some of those reasons are because I don't have the equipment at home to enjoy playing them. I am slowly moving up in the world that way and now have a vehicle with a CD player, but at the same time have a smart phone that connects with the stereo system. Here's the real problem. I do have a Google Play subscription, so can download and play anything I want from their catalog. But, on my hour commutes to school, the car drops the connection to the phone, or the phone drops connection to Google, and then I find myself mid-song and mid-commute not being able to get back to it while driving. It frustrated me enough times that I said, "forget this nonsense," and went for the physical copy of something I'd heard enough times digitally that I knew was worth paying for the hard copy. On top of that, it's a far better quality sound. Double bonus. Just wanted to add in a perspective that hasn't yet been noted. Also, radio doesn't really take care of the commuter market that well. I'm in the Chicago area, and while we have some great radio stations, there is music here you never hear on the radio that gets played to death elsewhere in the country. I can think of a few rock bands that qualify. For one, I almost never hear anything from Yes. They stick to mostly top 40 rock or pop or country, and that's all you get. It's very limiting for everyone with musical tastes that span the many genres available today. This is why owning the CD is still most attractive for anyone who does drive long distance to work or school. A niche market to keep in mind, and potential way of targeting those customers.
  7. 'Reach out' by Leo Sherman

    I like it, too. And I like the word race used as the second "place." It gives an interesting contrast to the next line, where you say "slow down" to my time, and makes you think. Or even better, you could switch the two, making race first and place second, which would make more sense with the third line.
  8. single girls

    I like it. Would love to hear it put to music. I could easily hear this on the Top 40 charts with a dance beat.
  9. I Ain't Your Mama

    Hi. This is my first post, and I'd love to hear some feedback on my first song-writing attempt. It was inspired by how my husband says goodbye to me in the morning. I'm hearing it in the style of Miranda Lambert's "Gravity is a Bitch," with that old-timey saloon player piano. I Ain't Your Mama As the sun was coming up, he said goodbye To our son and to someone I didn't recognize It sounded like mama, but his mama is dead That left one women and she was still in bed. Now this girl here is the household prima donna That doesn't share her crown And is prone to psychodrama So I set off on a quest to fix this now Hearing something that just ain't allowed I flew out of bed as he walked out the door Cause this is something that can't be ignored And I grabbed his jacket as he got in his Honda Listen up bubba, I ain't your momma I ain't your mama You gotta get this straight Well, I might look like a feather weight But I'm gonna hafta beat you over the brow If you don't knock off this mama stuff Right now Having mama on your mind might help explain Why I've been feeling so mundane From planning all the dinners To trying to look slimmer It's no wonder why I've failed to deliver It's become such a drain It's driving me insane I’m your wife not your mother Your one and only lover While I don't mean to complain It's been a real pain Picking up all your messes And still having time for caresses At 4 am when I've barely slept An your pistol wants to stand erect If I had some help like a partner should I'd have more time to chop that wood So come and lend a hand Like you really are my man Let's tackle this together It's our shared endeavor I ain't your mama You gotta get this straight Well, I might look like a feather weight But I'm gonna hafta beat you over the brow If you don't knock off this mama stuff Right now Note: This works good in the key of A with A, E, D, G and there is one more that needs to go lower than E, but I'm not sure what it would be. All I can find that fits is the low E note.
  10. Getting To Know You

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