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John Craig

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  1. Highs and Lows

    Highs and lows, fast and slow. ?
  2. That Night You Danced With Me

    Not much to criticise here is there? A nicely emotive piece of work; what we all strive for.
  3. Dancing After The Music Stops  

    Hello Peggy, a smart piece of work here which I wish had a V4 to put it all "to bed" so to speak. As for the "oh", how about ...." Your grin reminds me of "THAT", THIS is a matter of fact. Another little opposite. Regards, the other John ( John Craig).
  4. She Moves Me. By John Craig

    Many thanks for the input and time taken to look folks. Been away for a couple of weeks and just dipping my toes in the water again. Couple of quick notes on this effort is that title could well be "Night Moves". Good enough for Bob Seager, good enough for me. This OK with you Patty ? Timbre I'm seeing the bridge as slowed right down in tempo, more or less spoken. Agree the V2 chess analogy could be bettered. The chorus's "slipping and taking up the slack" suggest what I think most folk 'tied together' any worthwhile relationship resort to.
  5. She Moves Me. By John Craig

    Now you're triggering my imagination again. John.
  6. The Cheese Song

    This is great. Reminds me of the masters of the genre, Donald Swan and Michael Flanders; they would be delighted with it. Needs to be out there now. John.
  7. Barely Blue

    Look at this a lot as it was one of the first I looked at on joining and I still come back to it. I still find the " old, well used, faded" description a little clumsy. Drop 'old' ? Regards, John.
  8. She Moves Me. By John Craig

    Thanks for the input Patty. Nit No.1 He's getting through the day on the 'memories' of her. They are not together. The way she walks and moves are embedded in his mind. Nit No.2 I'm quite happy with. Nit NO.3 I agree, more than a stumbling block. STUCK. Song Title is weak, needs some thought.
  9. She Moves Me. By John Craig

    Once again my thanks for looking. Leo, I have to admit to plagiarism. A Bob Seger number uses the 'night moves' phrase IIRC. but hey! don't think Bob would be too pissed off at me. Ray, It's just a little pop/rock number, if it's a bit cheesey I can live with it. thanks for your adjudication.
  10. She Moves Me. By John Craig

    Many thanks for the input guys, all of it pertinent. Firstly, "casual EGO knocks" probably would look better ( I've been fighting this bloody keyboard for quite some time) No.2 'and my world she rocks' agree this looks pretty vapid and I'm sure it's been done before, so looking to modify. No.3 Is the guy too 'passive' ? He's 'giving up his rough old ways' balances with her 'she holds me tight in case I don't come back' , so she's not too sure of her place in their relationship. He may in fact have the upper hand, but is happy to trade it in.
  11. She Moves Me. By John Craig

    Apologies, I couldn't expand the page, but knowledgeable neighbour has sorted.
  12. She Moves Me. By John Craig

    V1 She moves me in so many different ways, always towards her, never pushes me away. And her loving is constant as the ticking of the clock and though she never speaks of love she lets her body talk. Ch. And her night moves keep me dancing through the days, moving to the rhythm that her tender body sways to. And she holds me tight in case I won't come back, But if she lets me slip a little I take up the slack. V2 Because she moves me like a piece upon the board, but guides me surely, with her every word. She seems to know what's good for me , seems to know what's right, a Queen who doesn't need a King because she's got her Knight. Ch. And her night moves keep me dancing through the days, dancing to the rhythm that her tender body sways to. And she holds me tight unless I don't come back, But if she lets me slip a little I take up the slack. Br, And giving up my rough old ways has come so easily, I'm happy now to be the man that she wants me to be. V3 Because she moves me, lifts me up above the crowd, her loving of me, makes me feel so proud. And she never gives me put downs or casual ego knocks, she's my world, my everything and my world she rocks. Ch. And her night moves keep me dancing through the days, Dancing to the rhythm that her tender body sways to. And she holds me tight in case I don't come back, but if she lets me slip a little I take up the slack.
  13. Barely Blue

    I have to agree, if it's in there let it out. If it's not working folk will skip it . I'm an "occasional", tying lines together that appear on a weekly basis and stand in awe of folk with prolific output ; sort of Jazz Lyricists.
  14. The way you are

    Nice piece Ray, the three I's, why not ? Fooling around with words and ideas is pretty well what it's all about. Hope you're up to speed soonest. Regards, John.
  15. Wonder If I"ll Ever Get Home (Blues)

    My attempt at 1st verse first David. My attempt at 2nd verse V3 a simple line swap When I step out on the highway It's hot this early mornin, It's way too early mornin' will I ever make it home. an' noontime hotter still. to be on my torn down way. Two thousand miles a long way, Hopin' someone will pull over So I'll just get goin' why did I ever roam ? get that air conditioned chill. ain't got nowhere I can stay. Probably as much as you need ATM David, but I also like Philjo's idea above. regards, John. PS. Blues frequently sung in a "talking" / conversational style with immediate line repeats repeats; anything goes.
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