moptop

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About moptop

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    Sticky Member
  • Birthday 02/28/1958

Profile Information

  • Gender
    Male
  • Location
    United States of America
  • Interests
    Music/song writing, shooting and reloading, electronics, woodworking.

Music Background

  • Band / Artist Name
    The Father John Band
  • Musical / Songwriting / Music Biz Skills
    amatuer for sure in song writing, self taught but proficient musician with fourty years experience
  • Musical Influences
    Beatles, Byrds, Frampton, Clapton, Matthew Sweet, Martin Newell, Benny Goodman, Artie Shaw, and the like.

Collaboration

  • Songwriting Collaboration
    Interested

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  1. Great overall but I do have to agree with previous posters about the drums. They seemed to take away more than they give to song. Good work. Take care, moptop
  2. Very well done! Excellent balance and mix. Wish I could do that well. Good Work! take care, moptop
  3. Chumpy, I really like your song. Very light-hearted. Excellent musicianship and great mix. Good work. Thanks for sharing. Take care, Moptop
  4. Miss Jenn, Thanks very much. You are correct, it is a closed hi-hat and yes, after I added it it didn't seem like it fit very well with the mood of the song. IIRC, I used it for timing rather than and accent feature. I think I still have the original multi-track file for that, if so, I'm sure it could be easily removed. Any suggestions as to what I could or should put in its place or just not add anything at all? Take care.
  5. Ken, thank you! You hit the nail on the head. I sang it to my grandson and he fell right asleep. I should re-cut the vocal, It's been 4+ years and my voice has gotten stronger since then. Thanks again, Take care.
  6. Here is one of my finished projects. This is the first track I recorded after throat surgery so the vocal is a little wobbly. Please let me know what you think. take care.
  7. Ms. Patty, I really like your original draft although all of the suggestions are good too. I hope you don't object, I picked up my guitar and playing around with some simple chord patterns and melodies just to see what I could come up with. Now, I'm not a professional musician of song writer. ( can tell that by just listening to some of my stuff) but from what I see, you can put this song in several different styles and all of them would be good. I love the lines .... Not only is it telling the person seeking advise not to just look at the "here and now" so to speak, It also reaches out to the listener and urges them to do the same thing, possibly making them reflect on a similar instance in there own life. I'm a big fan of "KISS"... no, not the band....... keep it simple stupid! I think you have done that here it works very well. Good work!!
  8. Yes, Great chorus! I think starting the song with it is a good idea. I hope I'm not offending anyone if I say that this has a "country music" flavor to it, or maybe folk. Very laid back feeling....at least to me anyway. Good work
  9. lyrics critique

    "T" This is some deep stuff here. I envision this as a metal band ballad. Good work.
  10. Hi all, Here's something I've been hammering out the last few weeks. Now before anyone says anything, Yes I did lift a couple of lines from that well known song from that well known band but I tried to use them in a reversal sort of way. As always, all critiques are welcomed, not just the ones that say good things. I wanna hear the bad stuff too. Gotta alotta learnin to do here. Thanks Verse 1 5/8/2017 DBG There’s no good reason For taking the easy way out There’s no good reason For taking the easy way out Pre Chorus 1 But what do I tell my mom What do I tell my dad Should I lie or tell the truth That she’s the best damn woman I ever had Chorus She’s the night stripper working at the club downtown She’s a night stripper Driving the old men wild (driving the young boys wild) Verse 2 She’s no teaser She takes me all the way there Yeah, she’s no teaser She takes me all the way there PreChorus 1: But what do I tell my mom What do I tell my dad Should I lie or tell the truth She’s the best damn woman I ever had Chorus She’s the night stripper working at the club downtown She’s a night stripper Driving the old men wild Bridge And ooh, when she touches me Her fingers burn like fire Ooh, when she’s loving me Her eyes burn with loving desire Lead break PreChorus 2 But what do I tell my mom I hope this doesn’t turn out bad Should I lie or tell the truth I just hope she hasn’t seen my dad! Chorus She’s the night stripper working at the club downtown She’s a night stripper Driving the old men wild (driving the young boys wild) Repeat chorus That she’s the night stripper working at the club downtown She’s a night stripper Driving the old men wild (driving the young boys wild)
  11. I like it. I think you've accomplished your goal with this. You have a wonderful voice. Clean, CLEAN mixing. You should be on America's got Talent or The Voice. This is an excellent composition.
  12. I really like your mix on this one. Very good separation on the strings, They just kind of envelope you. Very Warm feeling! The electronic bass drum was a excellent choice. It gives the track a "modern" feel within the realm of the "traditional" sounding strings. I don't think you should add too much more as far as instruments. I know when I try to add too many things into a track I just end up with sonic mush which turns into a mixing nightmare. And your voice with the wonderful accent, ( and that's coming from a Yank's perspective mind you) I wish I could sound so well. Excellent composition!
  13. Wonderfully done. Excellent musicianship. It has a very open and airy feel to it. It evokes emotion...an thoughts of good memories in the listener....well it did in this listener at least. As one poster said the it made him think of his camping days. No words needed, Sometimes we just need to say "enough, it's finished" and in this case I believe that holds true. I wouldn't touch it!
  14. I like it! What a great bed (foundation).Could be used as a cool intro as well. I think you could work it into any style of music, the sky's the limit on this one! Hip Hop, Pop, Alt or Hard Rock. Very Cool.