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kenapayne

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About kenapayne

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  1. Shooting Star in Your Hand (demo) for feedback

    Agree. A few questions for anyone ...any recommendations for finding a decent variety of loops for a reasonable price? Any advice on drum arrangements for demos (when you're not a drummer) in general? Also, any alternatives to (free) SoundCloud where I can upload a new version of a song without deleting it first? (Apologies if these questions belong in another forum, it's kinda relevant though)
  2. I Beg Your Pardon

    I do like the guitar rhythm pattern and chords, I also like the chorus - Beatles-like. I also like the verse but repeating the same pattern the 3rd time makes the verse too repetitive and I think a little variation would keep it from droning a bit...unless that's your intention, of course. Just my simple opinion. The guitar rhythm is really catchy, I like it.
  3. Love the possibilities. Maybe a Cage the Elephant influenced vocal melody to give it a modern feel, if you're into that. Props on the EZ Drummer work, I'm no drummer either but to me, the drums sound really, really good.
  4. Hey SongStuffers, this is probably the most fleshed out demo I've done so far so any feedback (performance, production, but especially songwriting). I'd like to know if you like the song of course , also what you don't like. I tried to reference a Foo Fighter's track for the mix...I don't pretend it's anywhere near the quality but I'd appreciate any feedback on the attempt to recreate that sound. Lyrics: When there's a light on You just can't rely on That someone's home The bed is warm waiting for you You try to lie to yourself Believing anything That makes you scream That makes you feel like you can't sleep Until you find Another light in your night Stars on fire burning brighter than the sun And then you'll find That you realize that you had A shooting star in your hand the whole time Under the covers You thought there were others But you’re the one Who didn't want to know the truth There comes a time when You open your mind to That someone who Believed in you all this time And then you find Another light in your night Stars on fire burning brighter than the sun and you'll find That you realize that you had A shooting star in your hand the whole time ** bridge ** A shooting star in your hand Ain't it grand? Aint' it grand? And then you find Another light in your night Star on fire burning brighter than the sun and you will find That you realize that you had A shooting star in your hand the whole time A shooting star A shooting star in your hand (c) ken payne, 2017
  5. Enjoy The Silence (new mix 05/07/2017)

    Nice work with the synths and arrangement. I like the intro and the gradual drama-building layers and the more "lighter-sounding?" section that relieves some of the tension. FWIW, I think dropping the brass line at 1:30 and every time that section repeats would highlight the underlying melody, which I think should be at the forefront (sort of reminds me of YMO) ...It's a deliberate line so I don't suggest you alter your song, just something I'd consider. I'm glad you're keeping the 80s spirit alive!
  6. Say it

    First impression is kinda like a soulful-Eagles feel, the melody and vocal phrasing and subtle changes go together really well. I love the voice - smooth and sincere.
  7. Hidden Nightmares (Wrong Reasons) Full Demo

    I'm weak with theory so it's hard for me to explain what I meant about the prechorus. I like the chords and feel they can be a bit more prominent or augmented for a "jazzy" sound (understanding you're not after a "jazzy" song). As for the chorus, it doesn't sound melodic for my personal taste...which is not to say it should be. Just my $0.02.
  8. Deus Ex Machina

    Thanks for the feedback. Although I have no desire to be a recording artist, I'm realizing the importance of production even when knocking out demos from the home studio. I will definitely take your suggestion to heart and only hope I get better.
  9. Deus Ex Machina

    Thanks Damon! Your suggestion about the chorus vocal is interesting because I originally had it that way. I wasn't sure if keeping all or some of the megaphone effect would get too monotonous. I think I'll give it a try though.
  10. Deus Ex Machina

    Hey Will, I appreciate the great advice and especially the time you took to give detailed feedback. I'll experiment with your suggestions, thanks!
  11. Deus Ex Machina

    Thanks @Jenn, i made a few tweaks and replaced the file. Good call out on the panning of the guitars, hopefully they're more balanced now.
  12. Trust Party (Live) - Feedback desired

    Nice. I wish my band can sound that good live, mistakes and all. I think the song really rocks, the video does help bring it to life. Looking forward to seeing more.
  13. Hidden Nightmares (Wrong Reasons) Full Demo

    I, too, am digging the verse, musically. I guess I respectfully disagree with the other Ken...I do prefer the 2nd verse's arrangement and the counter-melody in the 1st didn't hook me. I hear a lot of potential in the pre-chorus, I hope you experiment a bit with slightly "different" chord structures. I was not a fan of the chorus at first listen but hear it differently each time I listen. I'd like to hear the next iteration...as you've mentioned, possibly a different arrangement and/or phrasing in the chorus would make a world of difference.
  14. Deus Ex Machina

    Thanks in advance for any critique... Smashing Pumpkins were a big influence, given the not so subtle reference in the lyrics...so, if you like the genre then I'd really appreciate your feedback. I think there's too much muddiness going in the middle, so any advice for cleaning that up is also appreciated. This was recorded using Reaper and stock plug-ins (incl drums). If you have a similar setup I'd love to hear your production tweaks and hacks (if appropriate for this forum). Thanks for listening. deus ex machina my mind won't concede although feeling defeated I think therefore I can believe my brain is still beating my heart is still bleeding my toes are all tingly, you see she's smiling, she's a god machine i'm 3 sheets I can barely see how easily I can be free the beat that's beneath my feet is the beast that will feed on my siamese dream she's smiling, she's a god machine she steals every scene, she's a god machine scene after scene i feel I've gone to hell in between saved, suddenly a god machine, she's a god machine i've seen this scene last week i'll fall into a sea of deceit saved, suddenly a god machine, she's a god machine excuse me please, did I have too much to drink, I don't think I'm ready to leave her beat that I'm feeling is it real or am I teasing tragedy she's smiling, she's a god machine she steals every scene, she's a god machine scene after scene i feel I've gone to hell in between saved, suddenly a god machine, she's a god machine i've seen this scene last week i'll fall into a sea of deceit saved, suddenly a god machine, she's a god machine
  15. Daily- Critique wanted

    I really love the voice and although the melody is really great and interesting (I really liked the "it's in you..." part) the guitar is too repetitive. The song turns into a showcase for the vocal. Maybe a chorus with a change in rhythm? The eq'ing of the vocals in the chorus(?) took away the warmth without really making much of an impact...and I love the warmth of the voice. It's also interesting reading the replies and how different interpretations are and what people hear and call out...demonstrates the value of a forum like this.
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