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KookieMonster

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About KookieMonster

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    Female
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    United States of America

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  • Musical / Songwriting / Music Biz Skills
    performer, lyricist, composer, audio editor

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  1. Never the Same

    Thank you guys so so so much for your help so far. Okay, update: I rewrote the verses and shortened them to only 2. [V1] You can see it plainly on my face I've been living in a dark, dark place The seas are rough, The water's black as night... But there's the whisper of a melody A song that calms my raging seas A song from you Saying hey- you'll be alright PC // CH [V2] I just wish that you could see The way that you have set me free It's because of you That I am here today But the thing that hurts the most is knowing I am nowhere close A world away And yet, not far at all PC // CH // BR // CH __________ Question: the two sections of V2... which order do you think they should go in...? Thank you so much. It really means a lot.
  2. Never the Same

    Gotcha. I already have a melody that I'm putting to it, so the first line of V3 should be fine. And I totally get that its really long, I'm going to trim it a bit, I just wanted to put everything down for critique so I can choose what to keep/cut.
  3. Never the Same

    Hello~ I'm writing this song for someone as a birthday gift. Thing is, he's a celebrity. In the K-pop industry. I know, I'm a bit of a fangirl (hear me out), but I wanted to do something special for his birthday to show him that he's had a hugely positive effect on my life, even if I live on the other side of the planet. (I know there's no guarantee he'll hear it, but I have to try.) A tiny bit of personal BG info: these past two years I've been working through some pretty tough depression, social anxiety, etc. and k-pop (specifically this Idol and the group he's a part of) have really helped me cope. I'm sure you all understand the profound effects music can have, even if you don't know the language it's written in. The emotions and message still transcend. Hopefully that'll give you a bit of perspective when it comes to the intimate and confessional nature of my lyrics. I just was trying to get all my feelings out onto the paper, so yeah. Also, this is my first song- so please, 'give me both barrels,' but just an fyi- I know the lyrics are a bit bland in places. Never the Same -for Jungkook- [V1] Foreign states, separate fates, That's what we are. I tell myself, keep listening and yet, you're so far. [PreCH] This fantasy, of you with me There's no escaping now. So many things that can never be But I refuse to back down. [CH] So i'll keep fighting, and trying won't let you go, I'll climb mountains, cross oceans Just to let you know that even though you've never seen my face, or heard my name- You've touched me in a way that I will never be the same. [V2] When I think of you, all I want to do is look deep into your eyes. I just want to hold you close, Let me be your blooming rose, because I promise you my love will never die. [PreCH] This fantasy, of you with me There's no escaping now. So many things that can never be But I refuse to back down. [CH] So i'll keep fighting, and trying won't let you go, I'll climb mountains, cross oceans Just to let you know that even though you've never seen my face, or heard my name- You've touched me in a way that I will never be the same. [V3] I know I must sound naive, for stirring up these foolish dreams. {I mean, c'mon.} you're on the other side of the world. I just wish that you could see the way that you have set me free-- It's unreal, the things I feel for you. [PreCH] This fantasy, of you with me There's no escaping now. So many things that can never be But I refuse to back down. [CH] So i'll keep fighting, and trying won't let you go, I'll climb mountains, cross oceans Just to let you know that even though you've never seen my face, or heard my name- You've touched me in a way that I will never be the same. [BR] Your smile, it gives me life {and your laugh's how I survive} when I fall down, you're there to help me up. So this is me, I'm thanking you for all the things you've helped me through I'm just one girl, across the world but I love you. [PreCH] This fantasy, of you with me There's no escaping now. So many things that can never be But I refuse to back down. [CH] So i'll keep fighting, and trying won't let you go, I'll climb mountains, cross oceans Just to let you know that even though you've never seen my face, or heard my name- You've touched me in a way that I will never be the same. ___________ words/lines in {brackets} I intend to change. Any suggestions? Thank you so much.
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