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  1. I'm Back

    I'm afraid there are a lot of copycats out there, my friend
  2. I'm Back

    I was going to bring a note. My dog wrote me one, but my mom ate it.
  3. I'm Back

    Yes, I want to be Carnival. I feel like I am impersonating myself.
  4. I'm Back

    Hi all. My life changed. Some say it fell apart; some say it fell together. I've been gone from here a long time. My user name was Carnival, but I have been unable to log back on with that account, so I created the new one. Maybe John can work with me to merge my previous posts into my new account, or whatever, if it's even important. Hi to Laz, McNaughton Park, and anyone else here who remembers me. And of couse, to John. Laz, I got your CD last year, listened a couple of times, lost it in the move. I still have it somewhere, and I appreciate your sharing your music with me more than you know. I'll be up in BC soon, and I'll look you up. For you who don't know me, I write lyrics. I am posting a new one today, and I will appreciate your constructive feedback, as always. It's good to be back... Norm
  5. Happy Birthday! Have a great day. :)

  6. Cigarette

    What follows is a vingette blending poetry and prose. It is a style experiment for a book I am considering. I would like any feedback on the style, readability, story, etc. Anything that strikes you about it that you can share is appreciated. CIGARETTE I only smoke cigarettes when I'm with Mali. She throws a pack, I'm in. Then we talk. Words and cigarettes - it's part of what makes us a couple. Get it? Our conversation is spare. But every word is important, every second precious, until it's time to part. Alone, we share separate emptiness. Together, it's always the first time. The first time for everything. In her striding toward, first recognition between strangers who are already more. First conversations that must be rectified. She withdraws, dazed by named and nameless fears. I see her loss; my mistake. Silence of days, then the 'Dear John', honest as hell. I repent, plead foolish. All true so why not? She reads my words, sees my soul, changes her mind. And sillion shine. The first time. Is that what a woman remembers, or a man? I am transfixed, drawing her to me. She is driven, still at play. By fate? Destiny? Folly? Possibly. In my story… …sun-bleached serapes, netted candles, rose petals. Latin on the audio, hers. No one but us. No one knows, will ever know. She drinks good merlot splashed with peach soda. I humor her but prefer the four-twenty. "What is it?" I test, showing crystal buds. "Rabbit turds?" Haughty smirk a dare, passed on. She doesn't partake, she tells. Not her style. "Something about the smoke . . . and the scene." She doesn't like it. A shadow, cast by old memories. She is afraid. Still, when offered she takes first toke, makes a face, snake-bit release. Unfazed, hands over the spliff in one fluid, interpretive gesture that includes herself. Understood. I pull it long and deep. Then we kiss, and she slowly breathes me in. A step away, her back against the wall. Lidded eyes watch mine. Languid, slips straps from bare shoulders. Waits. The first time. In the zoo car-park after dark, like teenagers. "I'm not going to do anything in the car." But we know. "I want a cigarette." Two corners to the convenience, my dime. Smoking Slims against the loading dock, the words come. Norman Maser © 2008
  7. Hey! Where have you disapeared to? We miss your inputand your presence!

  8. Empty Spaces

    Frankly Steve, I couldn't understand why everyone was raving about your little lyric. Then I read it Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful. How's that for a refrain!
  9. The Cure

    Hey, this is really good. Nice to meet you Timmy. I don't have anyting to critique. This seems pretty complete and well executed to me. Nice work
  10. Favourite Lyricist

    I just re-read every single post. I am the only one who mentioned Neil Young. Makes me wonder what others think. I won't put him ABOVE some of the great ones listed, because they each have their style and merits. Just wanted to know if anyome else here would rate him with the greats.
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  12. Songwriting Collaboration For Lyricists

    Hey Steve, I want to write commercially viable songs, but I don't want to restrict my writing to that. I need to be free to get the creative juices flowing with non-commercial lyrics and free form poetry. I even use poetry to let ideas flow which will later become the seeds for my song lyrics. If you've got something you want me to pen a lyric for, let me know. It would be fun to collaborate with a Stuffer. Norm
  13. Songwriting Collaboration For Lyricists

    An incredible first experience for you. I heard the song, and it worked well for you. It was a pretty straighforward song as I call, simply sung with a guitar (was there more instrumentation?). The singer did a pretty nice job with it, too. Was the result similar to what you imagined it sounding like? Tell us a little bit about that, and how much you communicated to him your vision of the song.
  14. Songwriting Collaboration For Lyricists

    I am currently participating in my first collaborations. Here is what I have learned I am working with my first two collaboration partners. I was very unsure of how to find a partner, and I still have to see how there work out. We have several songs in process, but none is complete yet. I am enthusiastic and hopeful, but I am also amazed at how much I am learning about the process that I never even thought of before. I found it was one thing to write poems and lyrics and to work diligently to improve. But for all that hard work, and even with some gratifying results, I still had no songs, . I am not really involved in the local music scene and didin't know any songwriters. I began to tell people of my interest and my desire to collaborate with a songwriter, and ask if they knew any. I also posted some online ads for collaboration on music sites. I got several inquiries from my ad. In discussing possible collaborations, I asked to hear work that the songwriters had completed. I also made it clear that my intention was to write songs for publication and recording, that I wanted to share the copyrights equally, and also discussed what recording facilities and abilities each songwriter had, as my own is extremely limited. A songwriter from Vegas sent me some music that he wanted lyrics written for. I liked the music, and we began to work on it. He also liked one of my lyrics, and started writing music. So far only the first of these projects has survived, but we have developed a good online relationship and provided that he completes his end of the projects, as I expect, this may prove to be a productive collaboration. I also met one of my wife's co-workers, who is a local amateur songwriter. I went to listen to him play at a coffee house and liked his style. We talked and agreed to meet. We are working on four songs together, and two or three should be ready to post here within a couple of weeks. Here is what I have learned. Nothing will teach you to write lyrics like music will. . . in the same way that nothing will teach you to swim faster than jumping into the ocean. Don't worry about being anxious or nervous if it's new to you. There are a lot of talented, original musicians out there who need you and would love to meet you, They need lyrics but don't like to write them, or aren't good at it. They are in the exact same position you are - they have been working hard to learn their craft, but still have few or no songs to show for it, and have no hope, desire or inclincation to write lyrics. They are a stuck in the process as you are, and they need you and WANT TO MEET YOU as much as you need and want to meet them. Remember too, that you aren't going to write a hit song your first time, so just treat it as a learning experience for both of you and have fun - take the pressure off. Don't worry about if you are 'good enough' for your partner. There is no standard to measure against, just personal taste and musical compatibiilty. You go into it thinking it's all about the quality of your lyrics and his/her music, but more than anything, it's about the relationship and musical chemistry you develop that will determine the success of the collaboration. It's when you come out of your own musical/lyrical space and begin to mingle together in the space that is the song you are writing, that the learning begins. It's very, very stimulating and exciting. The most surprising thing I have found is how much I enjoy writing lyrics to existing music. I thought it would be hard, but the music brings you ideas, and as you write, you know exactly how it will fit the music and have a good idea how it will sound. To me that is much easier than starting from scratch. It's following, rather than leading. But the opportunity for creativity is just as great. If you try this with your collaborator, make sure you fully understand the structure of the music before you start. I make a chart showing the points (in seconds) where each structural element starts and stops, and how many bars in each. This is critical, and will keep you from getting 'lost' in the music. I hope some of this is useful. I'm eager to learn from some of you who are more experienced at this than I am. Norm