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  1. "ashes In The Rain"

    Yes I agree thankyou for your advice I have changed them now
  2. "ashes In The Rain"

    Thanks for your time HoboSage... Some very good advice there... How about something like... "The sun no longer shines on the love that we made We've burned our bridges so that nothing else remains Except ashes in the rain" ??
  3. "ashes In The Rain"

    Thanks Tony it's a very deep song and I wasn't in my best of places whilst writing it ! Haha
  4. "ashes In The Rain"

    Hey guys, first time back for a very long time... I got back into songwriting when the girl I loved more than anyone left me... So in the most depressed state of my life, I wrote this... Any advice or criticism is much appreciated! “ASHES IN THE RAIN†Verse 1: I have walked through hell with bags of remorse Drenched in sorrow, Broken to the core, I have screamed out your name and heard no reply Stared at the Devil And seen my own eyes Verse 2: I have been battered and bruised by the words that you say Made many mistakes and many prices I’ve paid I have wandered alone through the darkest of nights Watched cupids arrow break in mid flight CHROUS: But now you’ve grown to hate me You were the only one who ever could save me Looking in your eyes will never be the same I've seen our bridges and they're just ashes In the rain Ashes in the rain Verse 3: I’m swimming against a tide that flows back to your heart You told me you loved me but lied from the start I have flown the nest before I could glide Hung in your noose and left there to die Verse 4: I'm holding my heart as it crumbles to sand Watching my soul in the palm of your hand I became so weak the day you stopped fighting When we let go I fell but you started flying CHORUS: But now you’ve grown to hate me You were the only one who ever could save me Looking in your eyes will never be the same I've seen our bridges and they're just ashes In the rain Ashes in the rain Verse 5: And it’s hard because I love you more than ever And it’s hard because I know you’ll find your way But how could it be our love keeps casting shadows This pain we feel will slowly fade away It will slowly fade away....
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