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LooknGlass

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  1. Achilles Heel

    I listened to this tune by Kjell Karlsson, and this was a quick raw vocal idea that I wettened some, to get the idea across. Thoughts on changes it needs, if it works, and ideas to spice it up would be appreciated. We see the writing on the wall the coming future of us all It's not something that we want but we all know, it is what we get The present, is where we set our camp The future doesn't have a lamp In the now, keeps our fear away, fear of light we'll never see some day Sometimes we don't get what we want but always get what we deserve Mortality; the achilles heel We don't want it to be real The achilles heel Mortality; the achilles heel Mortality; the achilles heel The achilles heel
  2. How'd you come up with your name?

    Yes, they were come upon in my Google search, and I always wondered who sang that song till I found it
  3. Hidden Nightmares (Wrong Reasons) Full Demo

    Good stuff I like, and I agree some polishing may be in order, yet I really like the melody you have, it fits well. Got a good one going, nice!
  4. A Table for Two

    Well done! I like the groove myself, it's different, and not the same ole same ole, and the change up's work well. Good tune Cap!
  5. Talking To Spiders (NEW UPDATE 26/06/2017)

    I like it (I heard the second version), the thing I thought as I listened, a tad more of a change up musically in the "and will the spider's listen" part. But that's probably a preference thing. Good tune going for sure
  6. ReaTune

    I was wondering if anybody else uses ReaTune in Reaper?...As I have begun doing vocals (verses, just lyrics) within the past year or so, I have been using this feature in Reaper. I have got to where I can tune my vocals without it being noticed in the last couple months (after a lot of practice) without sounding like Cher in her song "Believe". This is the tutorial I started with to learn it, yet, I just use a single track of my vocal, unlike what he does in the vid. Anybody else use this?
  7. How'd you come up with your name?

    I came up with my name when I was about 27 or so years old. I was thinking I wanted my online name to reflect I was a poetry writer (I kept my lyrics to myself for many years), but as quick as the word "reflect" came into my mind, I remembered my mam'ma (grandma for the northerners) who's now 97, always called her mirror a looking glass, and I liked it. So, being it would be used on the net, I dropped the "i" and "g" in "Looking" and LooknGlass was created.
  8. love is blind

    I like this a lot John. I like what Gary said, I would add "I'm losing you" at the end of every chorus myself. Good write!
  9. What Am I To You

    I sat down one night with the intention of writing something different and experimenting a little. Whether it works or not, well, I don’t really know. Some who have read the lyric say yes, some say no. The concept being what the singer wants you to figure out. My collaborator, Ramiro Montes De Oca picked up the lyric and added the music and vocal. Thoughts and suggestions very welcome. What Am I To You I have saved good people I have killed them too I have fed the hungry and took food from a few What am I to you, What am I, what am I to you? Sometimes give assistance and sometimes I subdue Sometimes I’m a bluffer, other times; follow through What am I to you, What am I, what am I to you? (Bridge) To one I’m good to one I’m evil To some; bring peace To some; upheaval It all depends on your point of view What am I to you, What am I, what am I to you? To some I’m accepted To some I am taboo Backed, or a target like the one I point to What am I to you, What am I, what am I to you? 2017© L. James Tanner
  10. What Am I To You

    Thanks man, I really appreciate the listen and feedback, as well as the compliment. I got a message from Ramiro (the musician) today. I guess we got another collab coming soon. I like him a lot, he's got loads of talent.
  11. What Am I To You

    Ok, now I know I know them. I have heard both those songs, and I like them both too, but I have heard "Personal Jesus" get more airplay (at least in the past) You guys are right, it does have their kind of vibe.
  12. What Am I To You

    Thanks a mil for the listen and critique Richard. Good stuff to pass on. I had a little lack of confidence in the lyric because I never wrote one as a riddle before, but I'm glad peeps like it. I honestly can't name a song Depeche Mode sang so now I'm off to Youtube to see if I have heard them.
  13. This ought to make you bob your head

    Cool tune! It's got a Bee Gees meets Prince feel. Groovy and funky and very enjoyable. Nice work man
  14. I Know (UPDATED)

    Good tune! I get a slight U2 vibe from it. It's got a great vibe and mood. I can't think of anything to suggest, it was a great song to sit back with the headphones on and chill. Nice work
  15. What Am I To You

    Man, that's a good idea David, I like it a lot, and I'm mad (not really) that I didn't come up with that bridge idea, it's great! I gotta see if my collaborator has some free time soon, to pitch that. Thanks, great mind jog!....I just made that up.
  16. Princess - Synthpop

    Great sound and vocal, I dig it! I find myself wondering what you mean by the chorus, but that's not a bad thing, vagueness can be interesting, and with the great vocal, it is. Cool tune!
  17. I posted my second song :D

    This is different and unique, not the same ole same ole, and I like that. The switch up at about the 1:15 mark caught me by surprise, but it was a cool surprise. Cool tune Hamzi, I like it!
  18. What Am I To You

    Thanks for the listen and comment Matthew. I liked Ramiro's take on it myself. I've never worked with him before, but I hope to again.
  19. What Am I To You

    Thanks a mil for your response and critique Will. I will relay your observations to Ramiro, and see what he thinks. This is a first pass so I'll see if anything else is coming especially bridge wise. Like I said in my post, this was an experiment, with the idea the singer would introduce the song as a riddle. Now some have said they don't get it with some of the verses after knowing the answer, and some are ok with it. The answer is; a gun
  20. Stable Minus Sport

    A touch of Pink Floyd meets David Bowie. That's what I hear, and I like it. Being primarily a lyricist I can't really comment on it musically in depth, but I do like the melody and feel. Good stuff
  21. Writing: The Art Of Therapy

    Hi Neil, I know what you are talking about. My sister, who just passed away recently, had the issues you mentioned, and it can be hard. Actually IS hard. I'm with you my friend. To many write to impress others instead of expressing themselves truly. We all want to impress, but first we have to learn to express properly, and I know without a doubt that you get that. I always have liked your work. Songstuff is my home of homes, even though I am not here as much as I used to be, this forum, or more correctly "community" has helped me A LOT through the 5 plus years I've been a member.
  22. Writing: The Art Of Therapy

    Although this post mainly deals with lyricists, I think musicians can glean some truth. *NOTE*... Most of what I say here is subjective....This is the way I see it. I remember as a young boy, finding a well worn note binder on my mother's dresser, and being curious, I opened it and looked inside. It was filled from front to back with poems she had written; with the time written, day, and year at the bottom of each one. I sat down on her bed and started reading them. I had read about four or so, when my mom came in and caught me; mad as a hen that I invaded her privacy. After getting a lecture about how those were her private thoughts, I asked her why she never read me any poems (she read me books all the time). She said she didn't write them for other people, she wrote them to make her feel better. At the time, I didn't grasp what that really meant. Now I do. Why do we write? What is your core reason to write? There could be many answers to that, from many different people. But the core reason should always be, because you enjoy it. Other reasons might be; "because I want to get famous" or "I want to make money at it" but the core reason is enjoyment. If you don't enjoy it, you're not going to get famous and it's doubtful you will make any money. Yet there's another reason linked to the enjoyment factor (at least for me) and that is; it's therapy. It makes me feel better. I can vent anything through writing. I can let it all out, and in the process, deal with what I'm feeling in a constructive way. So I encourage new writers, don't write in hopes of impressing someone, or for getting a lot of positive reviews. Because the more you write for that reason, the less positive reviews you will probably get. If you really love writing, you WILL get better. Yet, part of getting better, is getting in touch with yourself. Write what pleases YOU and advance in your craft from there. Listen and learn from the seasoned writers, and use their input to express who you are better, in a better way than you did before. When you're feeling depressed and can hardly move; write. When you are feeling frisky; write. When you're content; write. You get the picture. Throw off your apprehension and lack of confidence, and write to feel better, not worrying about other people. And then when you decide to post, and you find you get negative reviews; don't sweat it. The core of you is in the lyric, now just reword it into a polished form that fits a lyric criteria. The more you write and take advice, the easier it gets, not only in writing a good lyric, but also in being able to reach down inside yourself to pull one out. To sum it all up; write what feels good to you, so you can feel better, and be better. Let it be your cheap form of therapy.
  23. COME WITH ME!

    Good stuff! I get a Pink Floyd kinda influence emanating from it for sure. I like the vocal and music key changes, and the background vocals add a good vibe. The length of the song may be the only drawback in terms of keeping listeners to the end, even though it's a good tune. Attention spans are short these days. Still, Good work!
  24. Made my 2nd track! Feedback appreciated!

    I like it, it sounds good, but I think it may need a more dynamic change up to make it "pop" more. Having said that, I think it has a good vibe and sound. Nice work
  25. If She Heard This Song

    This is something I wrote and it's set awhile. Thoughts and ideas appreciated. (Vs) I had to have it my way I just wouldn't compromise Everything was what I wanted I wouldn't have it otherwise (Vs) She tried her best to reach me Tried to warn me gracefully I dismissed her like a servant Now I'm a slave to misery (Ch) If she heard this song, would she come back again? If I bore my soul, would she want me then? I need her to hear, I see that I was wrong, but would she even care if she heard this song? (Vs) Wrapped up in paying the bills but not in her arms at night Drinking to much when I was stressed; purposely picking a fight (Vs) Hindsight is 20/20 and I see that I was blind This song that I've just written is all that she left behind (Bridge) I want to say; "Sorry I was a fool" Tell her; "Nothings worth losing you" (Ch) If she heard this song, would she come back again? If I bore my soul, would she want me then? I need her to hear, I see that I was wrong, but would she even care if she heard this song @ L. James Tanner
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