Thomasbs

Hey guys. Listen to this song i wrote with my band, The Fist. The song is called Crossfire. Please listen to it, and write a comment, about what you think of it, both the lyrics and the song. http://m.youtube.com/#/watch?v=I4vRiXpxBHw

This is your best video so far your english have really improved, and i would say it's almost better then the original:) Keep up the good work

Thank you Have you read my two latest songs? Bulletproof and Anthem of the Angels? I would like you to reply on them if you would But this cover is actually now so bad. It's pretty good

This one is much better then the other one you posted. I didn't knew the one was a cover, my mistake and i'm sorry. Your singing has improved, and the guitar sounds nice. Keep up the good work, your making progress...

Hey there. Just to make this clear, you need to work on both your guitar works and your lyrics. "Goodbye to you my trusted friend We have known each other since we were nine or ten..." It kinda seem like you just want it to rhyme, and you arent really putting emotions and metaphors into it. Use more metaphors. I know say that many of the times i review a song, but many people dont do it, and that is a shame. Use more metaphors, because it kind of gives the song more depth. When it comes to playing the guitar. Forget the intro, it doesn't sound good, and it seems like you can't play it perfectly. Learn 3 more chords. C, D and G. Then you have some good chords to experiment with. And don't keep going on in to different chords in the whole song. But to be honnest, i wasn't that exited. i would give it 2/5 stars. But DON'T LOOSE ALL HOPE!!! I was there were you are. I couldn't play that much guitar, and my lyrics actually sucked. But everytime you play guitar, and everytime you listen to music, write down some lyrics or read other people's lyrics, you get better. So keep practising