Jump to content

Search the Community

Showing results for tags 'critique welcome'.



More search options

  • Search By Tags

    Type tags separated by commas.
  • Search By Author

Content Type


Forums

  • Main Forums
    • Introduce Yourself
    • Showcase
    • Critique
    • Collaboration
    • Discussion
    • Contests and Challenges
  • Site Information
    • Site Stuff
    • Suggestion Box
    • Complaints and Bugs
    • Help and Support
    • Library
  • Music Marketing and Promotion's Topics
  • Singer-Songwriter's Topics

Calendars

  • Community Calendar
  • AIM Events
  • Music Marketing and Promotion's Events

Blogs

There are no results to display.

There are no results to display.

Categories

  • Songwriter Interviews
  • Band / Artist Interviews
  • Music Industry Interviews
  • Performer Interviews
  • Producer and Recording Engineer Interviews

Categories

There are no results to display.

There are no results to display.


Found 4 results

  1. You look good today.

    Hello, Again I haven't posted for a long while, life gets busy. These lyrics are about how someone can have a hold over you that they can control how you feel. I understand it needs some tweaks but your input would be greatly appreciated, thanks ''You Look Good Today'' Today I pray that you will be nice, I pray that you will be kind. You hold all the cards, If your hand is fine, then i'm fine. I'll dip my toe in the water, If its cold then I'll go. When the grey skies come, You'll be sure I know. Then I feel so low, So low I could give up. You say to me: You look good today I bloody love this beautiful calm You look good today. Please be nice all the time. You look good today. Suddenly the beams they shine. You look good today. Now you got me, With your sideways look, I feel so damn not good. I need you to cradle me Like a child, I crave you. But you flipped the penny, It landed on its head. I'm living on a fifty-fifty. And you, you make my bed. Then I feel so low, So low I could give up. You say to me: You look good today I bloody love this beautiful calm You look good today. Please be nice all the time. You look good today. Suddenly the beams they shine. You look good today. When the wind changes, one day i'll go. When the bruises fade, then i'll go. When I feel strong enough, but not right now. Your grip is too tight.
  2. single girls

    Hi, I wrote this about a female friend of mine who finding herself at 30something and young, free and single again, was having the time of her life. SIngle gIrls I don’t feel the need for permanent attraction I just roll the dice when I want a little action (verse one) I’m my own girl I like it this way It’s my own decision if I want a guy to stay See I’m a single girl And And And And Single girls don’t get hurt (chorus) Single girls stay sharp Single girls have loads of fun Single girls stay young-young-young I don’t need a man hanging helpless from my sleeve Always on the phone saying baby who you seen (verse two) I’m my own girl Won’t let him drag me down Kicking up a tantrum Coz I left him on his own See I’m a single girl And And And And Single girls don’t get hurt (chorus) Single girls stay sharp Single girls have loads of fun Single girls stay young-young-young I’m a single girl I pay my own way I’ve no lover’s obligations No-one holding up my day (bridge) Life’s a gas I never cry No need to explain Never need a reason why I like the week-end When I can rise late Put my butt in the tub and luxuriate (verse three) I don’t need a pouty face Pointing out my time is flying Jiving me to hurry on Saying that his day is dying See I’m a single girl And And And And Single girls don’t get hurt (chorus) Single girls stay sharp Single girls have loads of fun Single girls stay young-young-young
  3. 2:37

    jkjbhvsxdfhyuiyi9cv bgfhyjubgvjukmbn nm
  4. Empty Mind - Song from Novel

    Hi! I am a new writer working on editing my second novel. My book is about a musician experiencing some crazy mental problems on a rock tour and so I've written a song into the storyline. I have no experience as a song writer, just as a music fanatic, so I'm hoping to get some feedback here to validate that the song in my book actually sounds like it could really be sang and played, not just read like a poem. I envision this as a rock song. Let me know what you think! Every day and every night another city scape defined. Those in front and those beside, giving meaning to my life. Existence too fast and realizations too slow. On we go through my memory full of holes." Weaving, leaving, barely seeing being. The map ahead, the road behind, A dark and gapping empty mind. Empty mind, blinded eye, oh not mine. Betrayal slithers and winds with only one purpose. Too many suspects to hide, the true intention of this lie. Existence too fast and realizations too slow. Forward we move with the faint shadow of proof. Weaving, leaving, barely seeing being.The map ahead, the road behind,A dark and gapping empty mind. Empty mind, blinded eye, oh not mine. Empty and gone, forgotten and wrong. The words are an echo that can't be defined. Shallow and thin, secret and song. Wanted too much so he took the whole fall. Weaving, leaving, barely seeing being.The map ahead, the road behind,A dark and gapping empty mind. Empty mind, blinded eye, oh not mine.
×