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  1. Here are my lyrics for a slow and dark stoner rock song. Please let me know what you think of it. World Going Wrong GER(c)2017 It's us or them, he spit the words out of his mouth, it will spread like a disease And with the good Lord by our side we'll bring 'em down, down, to their knees So here we are, all over again, man fighting man, man fighting man Ten thousand soldiers out marching the streets, shut your windows, shut your door The taste of blood is like heroin, give me more, give me more, give me more So here we are, all over again, man fighting man, man fighting man World going wrong, world going wrong, raise your flag cause world going wrong World going wrong, world going wrong, raise your flag cause world going wrong
  2. Hello everyone This is a track that I recently produced for a friend to rap on. I would love to hear your thoughts on it
  3. Hello! This is the 10th iteration of my previous attempts to write a song. I am not a native English speaker so please help me to check if what I am on right now is OK to use in my song. I wanted also to thank everyone who helped me to get to this point of this song version! Those people that offered their comments and critique on previous versions. I hope you could hand me a hand one more time. ====================================== *** Inside Your Game *** Verse 1 Call me, please call me, haul me out the jail I'm in to I'm so tired, tired of watching time, while darkness grows through Play me, like I have no name, frame me inside your game Lie to me, lie but stay with me, you know, I'll never complain Refrain 1 I try again... to get to you but you're starting to play, you're starting to play And though there was no one who won in this game I'm still gonna play the same I try again... thoughts are flying away with no sign of regret with no reason to stay Want them to break free and get out, I don't care while you're still around Verse 2 Days stretching, days get longer, I'm longing to catch sight of you The feeling like storm grows stronger, its wrong and it's past due Bridge Out of my mind! Truth or lie? I have no clue. Are you on my side or am I left behind? It's so uncertain. I can't get close to you Refrain 2 I try again... to get to you but you're starting to play, yeah you're starting to play I know there was no one who won in this game I'm still gonna play the same I try again... thoughts are flying away with no sign of regret with no reason to stay Hoping to get to the firm ground. Lost or found? Ending Call me, I want you to call, my spirit burns, it needs to know I'm tired of being tired, I'm tired of sitting here and just watching time Forever no season lasts but never say never I don't want to know the score, I wanna be inside your game forevermore
  4. Hey everyone! This is a song I made with a friend recently and I would love some critique on it. She wrote majority of the lyrics but I did assist with some of the lyrics so I'm just looking for critique on the lyrics and the song as a whole. Thank you DAILY LYRICS Oh Oh Daily Every morning you walk these streets Read the paper, frown, curse, repeat Daily Get some coffee while you answer the phone Boss is calling says you’re taking so long Daily You’re just halfway through the A.M. And already you've been hating everything But it’s in you, it’s in you How you'll roll through the day How you gonna roll through your day You're looking for the light at the end of the tunnel Just break down the walls and ceiling Yeah leave Leave whenever you want Try to reach for the brakes, life is moving too fast Go on take over the wheel But don't you know You’ve been driving all along Every morning you walk these streets Try to whistle, nod, smile, repeat Daily Phone is ringing, it’s your favorite song Grab some coffee while you hum along Daily Not just walking, now you're skipping Never mind the people looking Pointing at you Yeah it’s in you, it’s in you How you'll roll through the day How you gonna roll through your day You're looking for the light at the end of the tunnel Just break down the walls and ceiling Yeah leave Leave whenever you want Try to reach for the brakes, life is moving too fast Go on take over the wheel But don't you know You’ve been driving all along Yeah it’s in you, it’s in you How you'll roll through the day How you gonna roll through your day It’s in you, it's in you How you'll roll through your day
  5. Without You GER©2017 V1 You've heard me say this before You think it's nothing new But this time I mean for sure My heart belongs to you V2 Last night I walked for an hour Out in the pouring rain All I could think of was you You're sugar in my veins Chorus I have been laughing I have been crying No more denying The truth is I can't live without you V3 What if we met at La Belle Our little secret place I'll pick you up around 8 Just like in the days Break Remember baby where we used to sit It's in my mind 'till end of time
  6. Talk Talk Talk GER©2017 V1 I have no feelings for you We hardly know each other You're not my type anyway So why d'you even bother V2 There is no chance in Hell You better cool it, baby It's anything but love It's just you feeling shady Chorus I may have kissed you Sure didn't mean to You only happened to Stand so f*cking close to me V3 I'm 'bout to walk outta here If you don't leave me first You talk talk talk too much You only make it worse Break Oh come on baby dry your eyes I'm pretty sure it's not the end of time
  7. Hello Everyone! This is a recent collaboration I did with a soudcloud artist that I met a few weeks ago. I think it turned out pretty good, but I would love to get feedback from the more experienced producers here on this site.
  8. I just dropped this sick rap on #Rapchat. I call it 'Glimpse Of My Life- AP' listen here: http://rapch.at/stbg/Dt2QdtDvvD
  9. How To Breathe Verse Feels like I've been drowning, alone in this great sea Pushed out for being different, by ideal society. It's like calls of raging thunder, somehow never ends People talk,they keep on talking But I ain't hearing them. (ohh) Chorus They try to tell me how to breathe With my head beneath the sea why do they never let me be can't they see I wanna be free Verse The smell of the salty waters, the feeling of flaccid skin. People I've never met have, tried hard to cave me in. My eyes grab hold of the shoreline, and for once I feel assured. Then comes a foggy forecast. to bring to me bruises and sores (ohhh) Chorus They try to tell me how to breathe With my head beneath the sea why do they never let me be can't they see i wanna be free This is all I've come up with so far, no bridge to it.
  10. Hi. This is my first post, and I'd love to hear some feedback on my first song-writing attempt. It was inspired by how my husband says goodbye to me in the morning. I'm hearing it in the style of Miranda Lambert's "Gravity is a Bitch," with that old-timey saloon player piano. I Ain't Your Mama As the sun was coming up, he said goodbye To our son and to someone I didn't recognize It sounded like mama, but his mama is dead That left one women and she was still in bed. Now this girl here is the household prima donna That doesn't share her crown And is prone to psychodrama So I set off on a quest to fix this now Hearing something that just ain't allowed I flew out of bed as he walked out the door Cause this is something that can't be ignored And I grabbed his jacket as he got in his Honda Listen up bubba, I ain't your momma I ain't your mama You gotta get this straight Well, I might look like a feather weight But I'm gonna hafta beat you over the brow If you don't knock off this mama stuff Right now Having mama on your mind might help explain Why I've been feeling so mundane From planning all the dinners To trying to look slimmer It's no wonder why I've failed to deliver It's become such a drain It's driving me insane I’m your wife not your mother Your one and only lover While I don't mean to complain It's been a real pain Picking up all your messes And still having time for caresses At 4 am when I've barely slept An your pistol wants to stand erect If I had some help like a partner should I'd have more time to chop that wood So come and lend a hand Like you really are my man Let's tackle this together It's our shared endeavor I ain't your mama You gotta get this straight Well, I might look like a feather weight But I'm gonna hafta beat you over the brow If you don't knock off this mama stuff Right now Note: This works good in the key of A with A, E, D, G and there is one more that needs to go lower than E, but I'm not sure what it would be. All I can find that fits is the low E note.
  11. Thanks so much to all of you that helped on the last song I posted :)! I'm starting to attempt recording that one currently. I'm wondering if you guys have any advice/ critique on this one which is not nearly as finished, and I'm going to work recording without video once I get some advice. Particular with lyrics, and the Chord progression (if you can call it that), and the "chorus" if the guitar works, and generally if it sounds any good. The breaks between the lyrics are rough, and I'm not sure how I want to go about it. Any help, comments, and critique are appreciated (I don't have anything other than YouTube at the moment, and I'm not sure how to get an audio file on YouTube(with a picture in the background). That's why it's still a video.) Lyrics: You see me as a wounded dog Bleeding, flees in my paws Leading, seeping in your claws I'm so scared to leave my room Terrified that I might see you soon Dear I know It's not your fault You don't feel the way I do Or at least you don't want To Why'd ya Stay just long enough To make me feel the sting of loss I saw the sun bleeding blue this afternoon I couldn't help but to Wish you, to lay me in your lap Feel the touch of rain on your back to see your kind eyes facing back To Hear the way you breath in Dear I know It's not your fault You don't feel the way I do Or at least you don't want To Why'd ya Stay just long enough To make me feel the lack of your touch To make me feel like I was enough
  12. Hey guys, new song that came pretty fast tonight. The recording is very rough, may rerecord it. I would appreciate any feed back. Thanks
  13. I sing in the gold, I sing in the wind Mercury sapphire, mercury bin You float up the river you float, and you breathe mercury sunset, mercury leave the targets of laughter the women we creave ancient pull wonder furtive new beads I risk all the sunset I whisk you like leaves
  14. I’d rather live in a world without You, than know you’re never here, I cant pretend that it’s okay when I don’t know when you’ll be back, Again, I can't hold it all together when every thing is up in the air, I’m not going to be holding your hand while I'm holding you back, But You must need to know how it is I feel, I’ll love you until until the end of time, Even if you don’t think my feelings Real, But I know it won’t feel like you're mine. You expected the world but now I cant give you my best, I know I’ve disappointed but now we're in different places, I know that you need to go and that your mind needs a rest, You’ll see the world you want to see and meet many new faces, But You must need to know how it is I feel, I’ll love you until until the end of time, Even if you don’t think my feelings Real, But I know it won’t feel like you're mine. I promise I’m not going to hold you back, I'll always have your back, While it maybe doesn’t seen that way, I will always be here waiting, For you to.come and see me, it will always make my heart ache, I don’t want to move on even if you’ll always be see travelling. But You must need to know how it is I feel, I’ll love you until until the end of time, Even if you don’t think my feelings Real, But I know it won’t feel like you're mine. You never asked my opinion, that didn’t help my decision, My minds been away, I’ll still love you until the end of time, My feelings are still real, but I can’t go for the wrong reasons, Can we be together when it doesn’t feel like you’re mine?
  15. Hi all - I started this yesterday morning as I was going to do a hip hop track to post up for Aloproductions. It kind of took a different route and then I thought about the track @Steve Mueske posted recently with the short different parts woven together and decided to try something like that. It's not as technical as Steve's track, as I am so far away from that level, but felt there was something interesting in this. So, looking for some feedback on all aspects of it - I feel like it needs something else in there, something big near the end, but any suggestions and critique would be welcome. Cheers https://soundcloud.com/moodman-1/glass-08032017-1621 Okay - I purchased Ozone 7 Elements today and wanted to do a quick comparison of the same song, but with one of the master presets. I tweaked it slightly and this is it - it was the Electronic preset. Let me know what you think of the difference and does it feel like a mastered track? I should add I lowered the stereo out volume by 5.5db prior to mastering and reduce the threshold in Ozone so that the Loudness wasn't ear splitting, which is why they both sound about the same level. There are other plugins on this track, which help to boost the volume of the overall track - this is more for the clarity and whether you can tell there is a difference. https://soundcloud.com/moodman-1/glass-master-09032017-1413
  16. Hey peeps so I'm completely new to this forum (and really to music composing in general), so I thought I'd post something to get some feedback. This is my first "real" song I've written, and I've based it off what I know about music theory and choral music. I have no idea if its any good at all, I just kinda went for it. Any and all critique is welcome, because I don't know what I'm doing and I need to know if what I'm writing makes any sense. The recording is entirely synthesized in SATB and I've got no lyrics, but I'll work on that later.
  17. Hey guys this is a song I call Figure it Out. I'd really appreciate some constructive criticism!! You say that you're so incredible I figured out that you're really not that cool Over and over I fall for the same mistakes I say that I'm too afraid to love You ignored my words to release the doves Over and over I fall for the same mistakes And I Want to believe in you I want to believe your words are really true I don't understand what love is Why do sparks fly when we kiss? I'll figure it out I'll figure it out You say that your armor's laid down So we can be safe and sound I'll figure it out I'll figure it out somehow Time flies when you're having too much fun In the end, we all see the same sun Over and over I see things in different lights Yesterday, the present, future Is it love just waiting to burn? Over and over I see things in different lights And I Want to believe in us I want to believe in you, I can fully trust But I don't understand what love is Why do sparks fly when we kiss? I'll figure it out I'll figure it out You say that your armor's laid down So we can be safe and sound I'll figure it out I'll figure it out somehow Tell me how to love like you Tell me that your heart is true This love isn't fading to grey Because the colors are here to stay I now understand what love is Sparks fly whenever we kiss I've figured it out I've figured it out My armor is laid down Now we are safe and sound I figured it out I figured it out somehow
  18. Two more lies for my own crowd Another shade just to make it right I just wanna show them what I'm like (What I'm really like) Hurry up this is my good side Face muscles getting tired now, working against myself I could use a good cry All this faking is making me so sad Look at them she's head over heels for him I wish you were like that I wish I was like that Blame it on this day and age That's ironic cause I'm fake I live my life being jealous of the things you think I am Feeling great, just made some salat for my vicious life Still working on next verse Any critique is highly appreciated
  19. I push aside my worries And think of sadness And the fact that my own madness Gives construction work a persona. I see the sky, Shaded in just right To me its the perfect place to sleep But to them its the perfect place to die. I stare out to the city and smile Meanwhile The red lights glow from the cranes Like eyes Straining to see past the clouds The music gets louder and louder The Perfect Kiss You should hear the extended mix We cross the bridge And the time with my dad counts down, But it's looking down While we speed by Thats making me feel nauseous. It's mundane To say the least But there isn't much more That I can say I haven't done much So when something Isn't daily It becomes exciting. So when I get to sleep in And I can sing out To a house with no one But the cat To judge the howling Suddenly That freedom becomes frightening. Hear me For once Let me Be enough Hear me For once Let my life Be enough Hear me For once Let me Be enough Hear me For once Let my life Be enough
  20. So I made this in like three days. The original was just the bass-line. I really liked the drum and bass-line combo just by themselves, but I knew it wouldn't be any kind of a "song" if I didn't add a melody. So I came up with something this morning. My way of writing is to start with a drumbeat, and then improvise a couple of possibilities for a bass-line. After picking the one I like, I improvise a melody over it, and then tidy stuff up. Since, unlike most "pop" music, improvisation features heavily in my music, it was a surprise when someone commented that I "definitely needed" more variety in my melody. He said that about two different things I wrote! This was one of them. The piece was just the bass-line. Kindly tell me if you think my bass-line is something that "definitely" needs more variety. I thought it was varied enough! Additionally, I don't really know what I'm doing - I just improvise on the MIDI keyboard, and then "improvise" a structure on top of that. So if you have any advice for me, kindly share. At this stage, I guess I'm trying to write as much as I can, as quickly as possible, so I haven't really taken the time aside to learn how to properly put together a song. Something that I think, in retrospect, sounds somewhat similar in... I dunno, "cheerfulness" is Four Tet's remix of "Carmella", originally by Beth Orton. If you have any songs or artists you think I should listen to for inspiration and/or guidance, please share. Cheers! - Hassan funk1.1.mp3
  21. Updated Mix 7-7-16: Here is my first song post up for critique (a internet collaboration song I wrote / produced / mixed). I'm new here so I will go back a bit on this thread to listen and comment. A Moment of Silence: Verse 1 I'm the curve in the road You don't slow down for the wrong turns Heart shaped like pen You write goodbye with Without caution And now I rust like an old nail Once driven, sharp and driven Pre-Chorus Wait for me Wait for me Verse 2 If I go to heaven It won't be long Before I fall for an angel star Life it spins and rewinds We press the volume for the sound to ring true Now all I trust is an old nail Now broken, bent and weathered Chorus Wait for me Wait for me I'm losing faith Bridge I'm crumbling under the weight of the stone And now I'm getting loaded I can't carry no more No more Outro Wait for me I stumbling sober Wait for me I'm losing faith
  22. Please critique my song that I wrote when my father passed away recently...it's a rough draft and is changing constantly. I recorded it with my laptop's built in mic, so the quality is not good, but I am in the process of trying to aquire some decent recording equipment. I never have really sang or played much in front of people, so a little nervous I guess. Just want to get some unbiased feedback on my voice really, lol...be honest though!! Thanks! Here are the lyrics: Sometimes I think of life And how it can be so tough Sometimes I ask God why Then I realize Jesus, I need you I can't stand on my own Jesus, I need you I can't make all alone My Father died in my arms I can't explain that pain How can I move on I just fall down and pray Jesus, I need you I can't stand on my own Jesus, I need you I can't make all alone The river will never be the same He always tied his Grandkid's hooks Played his guitar by the fire While he gave us silly looks Jesus, I need you I can't stand on my own Jesus, I need you I can't make all alone Fishing Pole Cane Man That's what some kids named him He always had it in his hand I really miss that man Jesus, I need you I can't stand on my own Jesus, I need you I can't make all alone Jesus, I thank you I'm glad my Dad is there with you Jesus, I thank you I'm glad my Dad, he's there with you
  23. Any critique would be great, just got this song on a whim. He Is a cashier on Mondays On Tuesdays he works at the mall Trying to Sell his perfect excuses Wrapped up in a bow all day long Wednesdays He's a tutor for kids Who can't appreciate his help Thursdays He volunteers at the park To pick up trash that people won't pick up themselves But Fridays He's a whiz on the guitar At home He can lay out his heart Strings Strings He can let go Strings Strings He can control Strings Strings And he coasts He Is all straight A's Because he needs to be They say That freedom comes with A small fee So He's varsity In every way Takes His trophies In a state of dismay But Friday's He's a whiz on the guitar At home He can lay out his heart Strings Strings He can let go Strings Strings He can control Strings Strings And he coasts Chorus again
  24. Hey guys, any critique is helpful. Title: You and I Verse 1 You were my best friend Ever since the day we met And I would love you for the rest of my life Though I didn't know it yet Verse 2 As time went past My whole life grew Into knowing and keeping You Bridge 1 I was the girl next door And even when you had a boyfriend And I tried to move on Bridge 2 We were only focused on each other And when other people didn't work out At least those were obstacles gone Chorus So you let me hold you tight In the middle of the night Because these sheets won't warm themselves Chorus And you let me barricade Against bad thoughts when they'd invade Our space is closely held Because you know love can't save itself. Verse 3 You and I Are so intertwined Sometimes I wonder if maybe I'm just too wrapped up in these vines. Verse 4 As time went past My whole life grew Into obsessing over You. Bridge 3 I was the girl you loved And even when I couldn't breathe And I tried to move on Bridge 4 You would give me a look And I'd break down At least that was an obstacle gone Chorus 3 So you let me hold you tight In the middle of the night Because these sheets won't warm themselves. Chorus 4 And you let me barricade Against bad thoughts when they'd invade Our space is closely held Repeat Choruses again Outro You know love can't save itself.
  25. Title: You and I Verse 1 You are my best friend Ever since the day we met And I would love you for the rest of my life Though I didn't know it yet Verse 2 As time went past My whole life grew Into knowing and keeping You Bridge 1 I was the girl next door And even when you had a boyfriend And I tried to move on Bridge 2 We were only focused on each other And when other people didn't work out At least those were obstacles gone Chorus So you let me hold you tight In the middle of the night Because these sheets won't warm themselves Chorus And you let me barricade Against bad thoughts when they'd invade Our space is closely held Because you know love can't save itself. Verse 3 You and I Are so intertwined Sometimes I wonder if maybe I'm just too wrapped up in these vines. Verse 4 As time went past My whole life grew Into obsessing over You. Bridge 3 I was the girl you loved And even when I couldn't breathe And I tried to move on Bridge 4 You would give me a look And I'd break down At least that was an obstacle gone Chorus 3 So you let me hold you tight In the middle of the night Because these sheets won't warm themselves. Chorus 4 And you let me barricade Against bad thoughts when they'd invade Our space is closely held Outro You know love can't save itself.