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  1. Turning

    **** updated version **** Turning Copyright 05/13/2017 Peggy L. Smart-Barnes ----------- C 1 ------------- Turning a little each day To make it through Turning a little each day It's all I know to do ----------- V 1 ------------- Turning I'm turning Prayers don't stop the tears But I still pray ----------- V 2 ------------- Turning I'm turning Time can't change the years I wish away ----------- C 3 ------------- Turning a little each day To make it through Turning a little each day It's all I know to do ----------- V 3 ------------- Turning I'm turning Truth brings light when near No words to say ----------- C 4 ------------- Turning a little each day To make it through Turning a little each day It's all I know to do ----------- V 3 R ------------ Turning I'm turning Truth brings light when near No words to say ----------- O 1 -------------- Turning I'm turning Turning I'm turning Turning a little each day It's all I know to do ================================================================== Hi there, Alittle different for me and my super structure attitude. This had a jazzy feel for me when I wrote it, abit avant-grade Critiques welcome and appreciated. Peggy Turning Copyright 05/13/2017 Peggy L. Smart-Barnes (1st draft) Turning a little each day To make it through Turning a little each day Is all I know to do Turning I'm turning Prayers don't stop the tears But I still pray Turning a little each day To make it through Turning a little each day Is all I know to do Turning I'm turning Time can't change the years I wish away Turning a little each day To make it through Turning a little each day Is all I know to do Turning I'm turning Prayers don't stop the tears But I still pray Time can't change the years I wish away Turning a little each day To make it through Turning a little each day Is all I know to do Turning I'm turning Turning I'm turning
  2. Devil In Disgusie

    My smile hides a pain I hope you will never know a private hell I never show Inside I’m dying, hurt by a woman twisted hell bent on revenge Selfish greed and twisted truths, a hidden past Not even the devil dare laugh She is destruction on a shadowed path Blinded and mental, vengeance till the end Using children as her key to unlock that sinful revenge You took my beautiful boy away with lies and deceit, Spiteful games cut so deep My mind lost in an empty world of numb disbelief Devil woman, devil woman I’m here to bring about your demise To bring down all those lies Devil woman there will be nowhere left to hide Life now filled by unforgivable silence but still every time I close my eyes all I hear are tainted lies My pain has no tears it’s lost confused from fear The want for my boy falls on deaf ears I’m being screwed by a system you abused Filled with feelings of madness held together by Deafening screams of muted sadness And those people you fooled, clouded judgement only used as tools Soon they will open their eyes to know everything about you is one big lie Just know the love for my boy you can never destroy That little boy he is part of me Selfishness and greed, drama with lies Now a fight you will get and That big devil will laugh Ha ha ha, For once the truth will be a blast Blinded almost insane I finally see it was me Me who brang our family to its knees All the agony, the pain there I was the devil The devil in disguise Time and time again I called you names I screamed you will listen to me How many times did I not see it was me who should have listened? How blind could I be? The devil was always looking for the devil I did not see that devil was me Living a distorted reality Twisting inside I’ve nowhere left to hide, I’m the devil the devil in disguise
  3. You Broke My Heart

    Hi Guys I wrote this as project for myself, it is based loosely on the melody for Rod Stewarts song "Your in my heart" it is not exact to the tune but similar. I tried to emulate the era of the song as well as the melody, have I done that? Any critique welcome and your thoughts on the flow or the ending verses! I have some doubts about them mmmmm! not sure what they are though! Thanks for the read. Les You Broke My Heart ©LGS 2014 V You came again in my dreams last night When I woke my sheets were soaking wet Even though you’re not here with me It seems our passion is hard to forget V Every night always turns out the same I don’t know why but it never lasts We get real close then you are gone I guess it's a reminder of our past C I don’t know how to free my mind I search for reasons I cannot find I never thought that we would part You broke my heart V I know that you have a new life now And I wish you both the very best If I had my time to do it all again I wouldn’t turn out such a mess V I've tried my best to get over you But it seems I'm trapped in time The world moves on except for me I only remember you were mine C I don’t know how to free my mind I search for reasons that I cannot find I never thought that we would part You broke my heart V I suppose I should just move along But that’s easier said than done All around the reminders of you I realize now you were the one V I know now I was a fool to myself Never gave you enough respect You packed your bags left my life Now mine is just a wreck C I don’t know how to free my mind I search for reasons that I cannot find I never thought that we would part You broke my heart
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