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questions questions round and round....

just look at me now

these wheels in my head

spinnin round and round

not up nor down

but I wouldnt call em level

somewhere in between

sweet and big bad rebel

im glad my conscience is still workin

though its growing colder

I compromised once,

got the devil on my shoulder

the fiend is coming out

and Im obsessing again

one more time I find the dopeman

is my best friend

All of my convictions

Flushed down the drain

Till a hardened psyco ogre

is all that remains

All of the bad habits

I strived to reform

Are creepin up and takin over

till the beast is reborn

I struggle and I squirm

Puttin uo my best fight

Powerless I fail

Im wrapped to tight.

With tears of anger

in the shadows of shame

I hide sinkin deeper

Got myself to blame

Still I refuse to admit

that the altered within

who is dirty rotten evil

and claimin a win

Is now in charge

runnin the show

hitten hard

servin the blows

Increasing speed of destruction

I need to be stopped

Out of control I get carless

Im caught by the cops

Now all that Ive done

Compounds with a crash

My feet are knocked from under

fall flat on my ass

Bend squat and cough

the whole routine

Demoralized already

Got no self esteem

Filled with guilt

I lie on my bunk

and my reality again

my dreams Ive sunk

So now what do I do?

Where do I go from her

How do I pick myself up?

Im full of guilt and fear

I failed again

and I just cant see

any light in the tunnel

Its black as can be.

So in the darkness I grope

Confussed and blind

God I know u see me

Please untangle my mind

Help me escape

from this bondage inside

Its consuming my life

keeping me confined.

round and round with questions

why?

why ve I given all I got

Just to be high

Edited by jacqhp
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Wow I guess im not expressing anything understandable to anyone else . No one has any feed back? Ok Well I guess thats feedback in itself. I think I will still leave it.I would like anyones comment thanks

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I think you have a gift for rhyme and conveying emotion but I think it has been done so many times that's probably why you're not getting a good response.  

People don't want to be reminded of their weaknesses so you probably have reached a lot of people.  They just don't want to face their own demons.

 

My first published lyric was about addiction but it was one of those stories of hope even though it was very much like this one.  It dealt more with the spiritual aspect.  Not religion, but the question of not asking the right questions.  So, like you, I expressed my own guilt and self deprecation but kind of went deeper into why addiction is so hard to combat and how it breaks down the psyche until eventually the person doesn't care anymore.

 

Anyway, just my 2 cents.  

 

Very nice structure and rhyme!!

 

Bryan 

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  • 3 weeks later...

Thank you for your reply I appreciate the insight. I wrote this about 16years ago but I remember feeling a desperate need to express my struggle to those who I cared about. At a time I felt rejected. I wouldn't get an opportunity to have an open conversation but really needed to express it. So this is what I did. I always thought it wasnt finished but i guess it was cause it remains as is

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