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Something In My Heart

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        SOMETHING IN MY HEART-

 

Stop crossing me over and over again.
I got a paranoia to face you by myself.
My heart pumps real fast.
I forget how to put my steps and now I walk so abruptly


I got something in my heart.
I got something in my heart.
Hey girl, don't you smile at me.
I don't even know what to do.
I don't even know what to say.


Even time gets real slow.
Its the only thing I know.
I can't hide my feelings well.
But I love to see you here.


People fighting over you.
I got nothing else to prove.
I just gotta thing for you.
Its something you should know.


I guess I'll go on with the flow.
Tell you there's somewhere we can go.
That's what I have in my heart.
You n Me should never be apart.


I got something in my heart.
I got something in my heart.
Hey girl, don't you smile at me.
I don't even know what to do.
I don't even know what to say.


Can you,
Read that something in my heart.
Feel there's something in my heart.
Clear that something in my heart.

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read this a few times now still can't get a flow on it . no story the rhyme is off and it trips me up which makes it harder to read .  it may sound / read better with a melody . assume you have one in your head as you write , but I can't find one 

 

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First of all Thank you for giving your time reading and reviewing it.

Yeah I do have a Melody in mind.Though I guess I'll have to make some/many changes XD

Well I just started.I don't know much stuff.

And I can't even write that good even in the newbies.

But I guess I"ll try some more. 

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a whole lot of us here me included thought we knew how to write . make it rhyme .tick make verses .tick a chorus tick again . then post . well all boxes ticked then all scrubbed out . someone told me read a lot of posts . take in what I read write ,  read write . then when i thought I had something . I posted it was better but still needed re-writes . this is what I continue to do hopefully getting better .   it will come if you want it , just don't stop trying 

 

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