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christmas when I was young
exciting and full of fun
with gifts for everyone
underneath the christmas tree

 

Christmas when I was a teen
didn't mean that much to me
I'm moody as a teen can be
that's a silly christmas tree

 

Christmas in my twentys
alone and drinking plenty
thought my life was empty
I wish I had a christmas tree

 

Christmas in my forties
it's a different story
the wife and kids adore me
we sit round the christmas tree

 

Christmas it's for the young
now my darling wife is gone
the kids don't ever come
so there 's no Christmas tree

there's a lot out there like me

 

Christmas when I was young
exciting and full of fun
with gifts for everyone
underneath the christmas tree
 

 

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I like it, this sounds like it needs to be sung. I might adjust the final two verses but otherwise it's spot on and reads really well. If it were sung the last two verses would probably work better anyway but it's strong as is. I think in the verse where you talk about your wife passing and the kids not coming it would have more emotional punch if instead of writing it as something that hasn't happened yet you just wrote it from the perspective of someone who is that age and is dealing with those things in the present. 

 

Either way it works as is but that would be my suggestion. Good work man! You've inspired me to think about doing a Christmas song for my kids and that's worthy of thank you. 

 

 

 

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Thanks JJ and welcome to songstuff . 

was trying to find a way to say old and alone but could not quite find the right words to rhyme , think I have about got it 

 

john

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