sexy

[Fern carle]

shadow dancing watching you move

snagged by the rhythm of the funk in your groove

dripping from the heat of the beat

desire rages as sparks fly from your feet

 

from the distance you're breaking down my resistance

firing me up pulling me under your spell

from the distance you're breaking down my resistance

making me melt like butter hotter than hell

 

sexy you look so sexy just like a greek god

getting down dirty with your heavenly bod

sexy you look so sexy muscle bound and lean

you look just like a sex machine getting off on the beat

 

fantasies flying watching you dance

my eyes are unzipping your painted on pants

bumping and grinding your ass looks so fine

baby sweet baby you're blowing my mind

 

 

[Pantonal]

Female sexuality is a powerful thing! Just reading these words had me thinking exciting thoughts. Kudos for that!

 

I assume the second system is your chorus, because the rhyme scheme changes. The only change I might consider is changing "from the distance" to "from a distance."

 

I'm curious where you would take this musically? Normally women seem to take their sexy songs slow and sultry, but the meaning of these words strikes me as fast and frantic, almost out of control. I'm also not sensing a consistent rhythm in these words, but I think that could be cleaned up without changing too much. It all really depends on the actual music you're thinking of. Still a great start and very evocative!!

[robash]

I sense some old school Britney kind of stuff going on with this one! funny at one time she was the latest rage. Anyway that's to be taken as a compliment! I can see a Young Britney Spears doing the little slut thing. I usually don't go for pop, but this one definitely struck me as that kind of pop! Good job on great use of sexed lyrics! Thanks Robert 

[Patty Lakamp]

On 12/23/2016 at 10:33 AM, Fern carle said:

from the distance you're breaking down my resistance

firing me up pulling me under your spell

from the distance you're breaking down my resistance

making me melt like butter hotter than hell

last line:

Making me sizzle like butter, hotter than hell.

 

Seems to fit the theme better?