hey guys can you help?

[toasterintheoven]

hi guys i wrote a song a while ago and i need feed back on it if anyone can help me with this or give me tips like what beat i should put it to or really what instrument should play it to that would help out. i have to warn you its alittle dark also its not done yet but this is what i have so far 

 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DyehIbNU9IFbqHsVhQ1sjiaD-Tnxku_roRihIfpi_bE/edit?usp=sharing

[McnaughtonPark]

Nope.  Link=bad, SoundCloud = good

[toasterintheoven]

On 3/2/2017 at 9:37 PM, HoboSage said:

 

I suggest that you copy your lyric text and then post it in the Song Critique - Mixed Genres forum (or the Rap forum) if you want feedback.  Make sure you use a "lyric" tag, and post the lyric by pasting the text in your post so no one has to go to the Google site to see it and work with it.  That doesn't help get you a community-wide response.

thank you so much for helping me out