Jenn

I'll Be There

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I've missed writing so much... Not sure what to call this one. But I'm trying to get back into writing daily..

Interested to see how you interpret this.. And any suggestions as well.

Thank you so much

 

[Verse 1]

I miss the oceans and the skies 

From times that aren't mine 

Still, I hold them close to my heart 

As they tear me apart 

Cause I know hope's never so far away

 

[Chorus]

But if I had the chance to not look back

Give up everything for time to last

Then tell them I'll be there

Let them stop and stare

 

But if I had the chance to not look back

Give up everything for time to last

Then tell them I'll be there

And that I still care

 

[Verse 2]

And if you find me in the waves

I don't want to be saved

Leave my shadow to the night

Make me believe that I'm doing right

I don't need the safety of the light

 

[Chorus]

But if I had the chance to not look back

Give up everything for time to last

Then tell them I'll be there

Let them stop and stare

 

But if I had the chance to not look back

Give up everything for time to last

Then tell them I'll be there

And that I still care

 

 [Bridge]

Pulled away and pushed in

Time's thick and time's thin

Held down and held up

I was away my old skin

 

Pulled away and pushed in

Time's thick and time's thin

Held down and held up

I wash away my old skin

 

[Chorus]

But if I had the chance to not look back

Give up everything for time to last

Then tell them I'll be there

Let them stop and stare

 

But if I had the chance to not look back

Give up everything for time to last

Then tell them I'll be there

And that I still care

 

 

Edited by Jenn

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Hello Jenn, I'm David. I wanted to say I really like what you have written. I can hear it when I read it. It's reflective and a little dark but still offers hope. I really like verse 2 and the bridge. The whole peace is deep and metaphoric. Why not call it, "If I had the chance".

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1 hour ago, zyzzyva said:

Hello Jenn, I'm David. I wanted to say I really like what you have written. I can hear it when I read it. It's reflective and a little dark but still offers hope. I really like verse 2 and the bridge. The whole peace is deep and metaphoric. Why not call it, "If I had the chance".

 

i heard some melodies in my head writing it too.. and !!! thats amazing! i always strive for something hopeful.. but that is actually horrible haha.

I kind of like "i'll be there" as it encapsulates what the song means to me.. I'm thinking about switching that to the end of my choruses

Thanks for the read.. and I'll put it to music

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Did you keep writing?

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53 minutes ago, McnaughtonPark said:

Did you keep writing?

Yes! I have a very rough draft here...

https://soundcloud.com/jennifer8169456/ill-be-there-with-chorus

most words stayed the same. but I haven't had too much time to play with instrumentation

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3 hours ago, Jenn said:

Yes! I have a very rough draft here...

https://soundcloud.com/jennifer8169456/ill-be-there-with-chorus

most words stayed the same. but I haven't had too much time to play with instrumentation

It's a good time of year to write away the funk, glad you stuck with it.

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