Lyrics Writing Challenge #3 - Earth, Air, Fire and Water

[john]

Hi Gang

 

This week's challenge is to pick one of the 4 elements and make it the feature of the song.

 

• Earth
• Air
• Fire
• Water

 

For example if you use metaphors, similes, allegories, make them use your chosen element.

 

Not sure of what those are? Try my old blog entry:

 

http://forums.songstuff.com/blogs/entry/171-similes-metaphors-and-allegories/

 

Try and stay within your theme but keep it interesting. Unlike a previous elements challenge where the purpose was to use all 4 elements, the rule here is NOT to incorporate other elements once you have chosen.

 

One other requirement... an aspect of your element has to be within the title and hook. For example "The Burn Of Blame", "Walking On Waves", "Breath On Skin", "The Ground Beneath".

 

Have fun.

 

Cheers

 

John

[Timbre]

Whoa! I'm still trying to quit rhyming over here and now this? Yikes!

[Peggy]

15 minutes ago, Timbre said:

Whoa! I'm still trying to quit rhyming over here and now this? Yikes!

At least we can rhyme in this new one..maybe I won't though 

 

[Dawn Robertson]

1 hour ago, john said:

Hi Gang

 

This week's challenge is to pick one of the 4 elements and make it the feature of the song.

 

• Earth
• Air
• Fire
• Water

 

For example if you use metaphors, similes, allegories, make them use your chosen element.

 

Not sure of what those are? Try my old blog entry:

 

http://forums.songstuff.com/blogs/entry/171-similes-metaphors-and-allegories/

 

Try and stay within your theme but keep it interesting. Unlike a previous elements challenge where the purpose was to use all 4 elements, the rule here is NOT to incorporate other elements once you have chosen.

 

One other requirement... an aspect of your element has to be within the title and hook. For example "The Burn Of Blame", "Walking On Waves", "Breath On Skin", "The Ground Beneath".

 

Have fun.

 

Cheers

 

John

Man I hope I did this right...

 

The Wind

 

 

Chorus:

I see you standing there

With your golden hair

Blowing in the breeze

The wind blowing in the trees

A bright smile on your face

Remember this place

This moment in time

When the wind was yours and mine

 

May the wind blow for years to come

Long after we've had little ones

There will be just you and me

May the good wind blow free

 

And clear a path to the very best

May the good wind come from the west

To keep your hair blowing free

May the wind always blow you to me

 

Chorus:

 

I'll drive my truck with the windows down

And breathe in the wind that blows through town

With my baby by my side

The wind at my back and I'm doing fine

 

I have everything I need

I have you and you have me

And with the good wind blowing

Our love is always growing

 

Bridge:

At the end of the day, the kids are in bed

Thoughts of the day running through my head

The wind blows and clears them all away

I pray the Lord, may the good wind stay

 

Tags:

Oh I pray, make it stay

Lord I pray...

May the good wind stay.....

 

 

🙄

[Dawn Robertson]

1 hour ago, Dawn Robertson said:

Man I hope I did this right...

 

The Wind

 

 

Chorus:

I see you standing there

With your golden hair

Blowing in the breeze

The wind blowing in the trees

A bright smile on your face

Remember this place

This moment in time

When the wind was yours and mine

 

May the wind blow for years to come

Long after we've had little ones

There will be just you and me

May the good wind blow free

 

And clear a path to the very best

May the good wind come from the west

To keep your hair blowing free

May the wind always blow you to me

 

Chorus:

 

I'll drive my truck with the windows down

And breathe in the wind that blows through town

With my baby by my side

The wind at my back and I'm doing fine

 

I have everything I need

I have you and you have me

And with the good wind blowing

Our love is always growing

 

Bridge:

At the end of the day, the kids are in bed

Thoughts of the day running through my head

The wind blows and clears them all away

I pray the Lord, may the good wind stay

 

Tags:

Oh I pray, make it stay

Lord I pray...

May the good wind stay.....

 

 

🙄

I think I need to change the title to, The Blowing Wind...

[Dawn Robertson]

Into The Water

 

I went down 

Into the water

To cleanse my soul

For eternity

Oh I went down 

Into the water

Holy Spirit washed over me

 

I am free now, yes I'm free

Because the water 

Washed over me

I am free Lord, I am free

That holy water washed over me

 

I live better, now that I'm clean

That holy water, washed over me

Straight to heaven when it's time

My destiny, now that I'm free

 

I went down, into the water

Time to pray, time to pray

Dear Lord they came in masses

To wash, their sins away

 

I went down

into the water

To cleanse my soul

Dear Lord you know

I am saved now by holy water

The Lord does tell me so

 

 

[Dawn Robertson]

3 minutes ago, Dawn Robertson said:

Into The Water

 

I went down 

Into the water

To cleanse my soul

For eternity

Oh I went down 

Into the water

Holy Spirit washed over me

 

I am free now, yes I'm free

Because the water 

Washed over me

I am free Lord, I am free

That holy water washed over me

 

I live better, now that I'm clean

That holy water, washed over me

Straight to heaven when it's time

My destiny, now that I'm free

 

I went down, into the water

Time to pray, time to pray

Dear Lord they came in masses

To wash, their sins away

 

I went down

into the water

To cleanse my soul

Dear Lord you know

I am saved now by holy water

The Lord does tell me so

 

 

A little southern baptist for us....I can feel the church just lit up with this song....

[snabbu]

This is an A B song about you know who 

I chose fire cause of his hair😮

 

Fire head 

A section 

Fire head, what will you do
What your fans expect you too
Your fans expect so much of you
Oh fire head what will you do

 

Fire head you changed the rules 
Decree by tweet for all to see
Decree by tweet for all to see
Oh Fire head you changed the rules 

 

B section

Promises you made went up in a puff of smoke
you came along to change the status quo 
Oh fire head will you make me great again

 

A section

Fire head you seem so sure
They were waiting just for you
They were waiting just for you 
Oh fire head you seemed so sure

 

Fire head your running hot
The bright lights are burning just for you
The bright lights are burning just for you
Fire head your running hot

 

B section

Will the ashes of economy ignite again
Will just hot air stir the flames
Oh fire head will you make me rich once more

 

extro

Your fans expect so much of you 
Fire head
The bright lights are burning just for you
Fire head

 

[Dawn Robertson]

4 hours ago, Skin said:

Hi Dawn

Not religious myself but could def hear this sung in church, again like Gary you used the element well throughout the lyric.

 

Keep posting.

Les

Thank you for the review and feedback. This song does get me going, too fun!

[Dawn Robertson]

Burn Like Fire

 

Baby you burn like fire

Words cut like a knife

A burning caldron of fire

Stormed into my life

 

You blow my mind baby

Fire-walker of my life

Burn me baby all night

A lot of sizzle in a wife

 

You make me crazy

Too hot to handle

Fire flowing over me

Like hot wax from a candle

 

Burn me sexy lady

Fire on my skin

You don't need a spark baby

When you let me in

 

Fire flowing 

From your finger tips

Nothing hotter then my kiss

Laying on your lips

 

We light up the night sky

Fire low and fire high

Burn me up and melt me in

Place your fire on my skin

 

I'd never be a fire fighter

I like when you burn hotter

Steaming with ecstasy

Baby lay your fire on me

 

I'll burn you into my soul

Fire breathing woman don't let go

Melt into me

Your fire is all I need

 

You leave me wanting

Baby cause you burn so hot

Burn me up and melt me in

I wanna be fire walking

 

Over the coals of our life

Fire keeps our love alive

Burns hot enough to meld you to me

Baby keep your fire burning

 

I'll never look at another

They could never burn hotter

Fire let me in and don't let go

Incinerator of my soul

 

I am yours until the end of time

Fire love all of my life

Burns with the heat of lust

The flames envelope us

 

[Dawn Robertson]

In The Air

 

I feel you in the air

The breeze tells me that you're there

A little whisper in the wind

Goosebumps on my skin

 

And when we first met 

The air was as pure as it could get

Beauty within and flowing with life

I swore I'd make you my wife

 

To breathe the air that you breathe

Made this man believe

You could do anything

Then one day the air stopped moving

 

I tried to breathe in deep

To keep you here with me

The doctor pulled me away

Said you've flown to another place

 

No other can compare

Oh how I loved your air

Full of beauty, full of grace

Now I feel you on my face

 

I see you ruffle the trees

As you blow air upon me

I hear a whisper in the wind

I swear I can hear you talkin' 

 

I go to our special spot

To where the air blows a lot

I close my eyes and dream away

The air blows by and I hear you say

 

I feel you in the air

The breeze tells me that you're there

A little whisper in the wind

Goosebumps on my skin

[Dawn Robertson]

The Earth Is You And Me

 

Although the earth is a vast place

Every grain once had a face

Ashes to ashes and dust to dust

The earth is made up of us

 

We come and go but leave a trace

Forever changing this place

The earth revolves and it grows

As we roam it's winding roads 

 

Each and every grain of sand

Once held in every hand

The earth gives and takes away

Life begins and ends this way

 

The earth will open up and take us in

From the dust we will rise again

The earth gives and she receives 

Those who do believe

 

The earth is just one place

End to end she shows her face

Mountain high and valley low

Always somewhere on earth to go

 

And if we're smart enough to see

The earth is you and me

She calls us from every shore

Always wanting to show us more

 

Take that chance to make a change

The earth is calling out your name

In kindness she welcomes each of you

To experience her beauty too

 

No one better then the rest

Earth has only given us her best

Each will have a moment to shine

Will this moment be mine

 

Roam this earth to every end

Hand in hand again and again

Earth's beauty is for all to see

I believe in you, do you believe in me

 

Earth is a beautiful place

Filled with wonder and with grace

And you will see it too

The earth belongs to you

[Peggy]

On 4/17/2017 at 5:49 PM, Dawn Robertson said:

A little southern baptist for us....I can feel the church just lit up with this song....

It sure did

 

[Dawn Robertson]

8 hours ago, Skin said:

Hi Dawn

Not religious myself but could def hear this sung in church, again like Gary you used the element well throughout the lyric.

 

Keep posting.

Les

Thank you Les. I wrote one for each element .....hope you approve. Have a great day!🦋

[Pahchisme Plaid]

I have written a number of songs with themes incorporating fire and water, but I have not written songs incorporating air or earth in a main theme, so I tried earth--not happy with it, then I tried air.  It took me awhile, lots of scribbles and theme jumping until I finally hit a topic I was satisfied with.  I associate storms with air.  I hope others consider that valid.  I seem to be having trouble shifting my writing brain into drive.  It sort of wants to linger in neutral for a span. Attention issue maybe--I've got multiple distractions pulling my attention.  Anyway, I found it to be challenging to stay within the theme of one element.  Here goes:

 

THE DANCE OF THE TEMPEST
Lyrics by Kc Chad ©2017

 

Uproots the trunk or bends the bough
gathers winds up in her arms
pulls you in with magnetic charm
The seduction of the temptress

 

The dance of the tempest

 

A spinning careless wind, she is
beckons with her writhing hands
Lulls you to a foggy trance
The seduction of the temptress

 

The dance of the tempest

 

Lazer stare, bending will
painted moons behind the veil
forecast warnings seem to fail
The seduction of the temptress

 

The dance of the tempest

 

Violence rises,  no one knows
how it comes and where it goes.
The dance of the tempest
tempestuous temptress
resist the temptress
resist, ah
resist her
resist

[Pahchisme Plaid]

On 4/17/2017 at 6:43 PM, Dawn Robertson said:

Into The Water

 

I went down 

Into the water

To cleanse my soul

For eternity

Oh I went down 

Into the water

Holy Spirit washed over me

 

I am free now, yes I'm free

Because the water 

Washed over me

I am free Lord, I am free

That holy water washed over me

 

I live better, now that I'm clean

That holy water, washed over me

Straight to heaven when it's time

My destiny, now that I'm free

 

I went down, into the water

Time to pray, time to pray

Dear Lord they came in masses

To wash, their sins away

 

I went down

into the water

To cleanse my soul

Dear Lord you know

I am saved now by holy water

The Lord does tell me so

 

 

I like this one, Dawn.  To me it has the feel of a Spiritual or something black gospel, even blues.

[Pahchisme Plaid]

11 hours ago, snabbu said:

This is an A B song about you know who 

I chose fire cause of his hair😮

 

Fire head 

A section 

Fire head, what will you do
What your fans expect you too
Your fans expect so much of you
Oh fire head what will you do

 

Fire head you changed the rules 
Decree by tweet for all to see
Decree by tweet for all to see
Oh Fire head you changed the rules 

 

B section

Promises you made went up in a puff of smoke
you came along to change the status quo 
Oh fire head will you make me great again

 

A section

Fire head you seem so sure
They were waiting just for you
They were waiting just for you 
Oh fire head you seemed so sure

 

Fire head your running hot
The bright lights are burning just for you
The bright lights are burning just for you
Fire head your running hot

 

B section

Will the ashes of economy ignite again
Will just hot air stir the flames
Oh fire head will you make me rich once more

 

extro

Your fans expect so much of you 
Fire head
The bright lights are burning just for you
Fire head

 

Yeesh, Snabbu!  I try so hard to avoid the conflict of sharing my political position (which is not party or affiliation inclined).  I'm going to stay neutral in commenting on this.  I do think your song can only speak of one person, the Prez.  Fire was a good element for this one.

[Dawn Robertson]

15 minutes ago, Pahchisme Plaid said:

I like this one, Dawn.  To me it has the feel of a Spiritual or something black gospel, even blues.

Thank you...that's what I was going for. I sung it all day yesterday, couldn't get it out of my head lol....🦋 I went down...into the water.....just does something so fun.

[Dawn Robertson]

10 minutes ago, Pahchisme Plaid said:

Yeesh, Snabbu!  I try so hard to avoid the conflict of sharing my political position (which is not party or affiliation inclined).  I'm going to stay neutral in commenting on this.  I do think your song can only speak of one person, the Prez.  Fire was a good element for this one.

I agree....

 

[Dawn Robertson]

52 minutes ago, Skin said:

Funny you mention blues, it reminded me of a lyric I wrote for a 12bar blues challenge.

 

It's amazing how just words on a page can make different people experience the same melody...words do have power. I love that. Ride the waves, life is good.🦋