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Summer Days

Raindrops Are Tears Falling From An Angels Eyes

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(V)

I met an angel.....as she was walking by/

but I was a player.....a devil in disguise/

N' I started thinking......of loving her that night/

but devil horns N' angel wings, doesn't make it right

(Chorus)

N' boy she was a beauty/

as pure as apple pie----

not a trace of a raindrop/

had ever fallen from her eyes---/

and I didn't want the blame,

for rain fallin' from the skies--

cause raindrops are tears,

fallin' from an angels eyes/

(V)

Then we started talkin'

but she fell to realize

that an angel can be tainted,

all from a devil's lies-/

I didn't want to hurt her,

didn't want to see her cry-/

cause a devil can't be chained,

even if an angel tries--/

(Chorus)

but boy she was a beauty/

as pure as apple pie--/

not a trace of a raindrop/

Had ever fallen from her eyes--/

and I didn't want the blame,

for rain fallin' from the skies--/

Cause raindrops are tears,

fallin' from an angels eyes--/

(V)

As we began to grow,

I refused to recognize----

how this angel stole this devils soul,

and changed his foolish pride--/

She spoke of purity,

and things I'd never known/

N' it was hard to believe,

I had to let my angel go---

(Chorus)

(V)

As she turned to say goodbye,

thunder screamed and called---,

then lightening lit up the skies,

and fire--- began fall--

rolling down the mountains,

blazing to the skies----

cause fireballs are tears fallin' from a devils eyes/

and I didn't want the blame,

for fire fallen from the skies--/

but you can't blame an angel,

for the tears that a devil cries/

(Chorus)

 

 

Edited by Summer Days
Just remembered ending verse

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14 minutes ago, Summer Days said:

(V)

I met an angel.....as she was walking by/

but I was a player.....a devil in disguise/

N' I started thinking......of loving her that night/

but devil horns N' angel wings, doesn't make it right

(Chorus)

N' boy she was a beauty/

as pure as apple pie----

not a trace of a raindrop/

had ever fallen from her eyes---/

and I didn't want the blame,

for rain fallin' from the skies--

cause raindrops are tears,

fallin' from an angels eyes/

(V)

Then we started talkin'

but she fell to realize

that an angel can be tainted,

all from a devil's lies-/

I didn't want to hurt her,

didn't want to see her cry-/

cause a devil can't be chained,

even if an angel tries--/

(Chorus)

but boy she was a beauty/

as pure as apple pie--/

not a trace of a raindrop/

Had ever fallen from her eyes--/

and I didn't want the blame,

for rain fallin' from the skies--/

Cause raindrops are tears,

fallin' from an angels eyes--/

(V)

As we began to grow,

I refused to recognize----

how this angel stole this devils soul,

and changed his foolish pride--/

She spoke of purity,

and things I'd never known/

N' it was hard to believe,

I had to let my angel go---

(Chorus)

(V)

As she turned to say goodbye,

thunder screamed and called---,

then lightening lit up the skies,

and fire--- began fall--

rolling down the mountains,

blazing to the skies----

cause fireballs are tears fallin' from a devils eyes/

and I didn't want the blame,

for fire fallen from the skies--/

but you can't blame an angel,

for the tears that a devil cries/

(Chorus)

 

 

All feedback is deeply appreciated in advance. 

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Posted (edited)

Hi Summer Day,

Quick read. I'll be back :) 

I like what you have going.

 

Peggy

 

Edited by Peggy
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Posted (edited)

5 hours ago, Summer Days said:

(V)

I met an angel.....as she was walking by/

but I was a player.....a devil in disguise/

N' I started thinking......of loving her that night/

but devil horns N' angel wings, doesn't make it right

(Chorus)

N' boy she was a beauty/

as pure as apple pie----

not a trace of a raindrop/

had ever fallen from her eyes---/

and I didn't want the blame,

for rain falling from the skies--

cause raindrops are tears,

fallin' from an angels eyes/

(V)

Then we started talkin'

but she fail to realize

that an angel can be tainted,

all from a devil's lies-/

I didn't want to hurt her,

didn't want to see her cry-/

cause a devil can't be chained,

even if an angel tries--/

(Chorus)

but boy she was a beauty/

as pure as apple pie--/

not a trace of a raindrop/

Had ever fallen from her eyes--/

and I didn't want the blame,

for rain fallin' from the skies--/

Cause raindrops are tears,

fallin' from an angels eyes--/

(V)

As we began to grow,

I refused to recognize----

how this angel stole this devils soul,

and changed his foolish pride--/

She spoke of purity,

and things I'd never known/

N' it was hard to believe,

I had to let my angel go---

 

Cause boy she was a beauty,

N' I needed her to stay ,

a loving heart and graceful soul,

only come to change a devils ways

(V)

As she turned to say goodbye,

thunder screamed and called---,

then lightening lit up the skies,

and fire--- began fall--

rolling down the mountains,

blazing to the skies----

cause fireballs are tears fallin' from a devils eyes/

and I didn't want the blame,

for fire fallen from the skies--/

but you can't blame an angel,

for the tears that a devil cries/

(Bridge)

After she accomplished,

all her goals in sight,

to train a boy to be a better man,

and treat all the women right/

but you can't blame an angel

for the tears that a devil cries(2X)

 

All feedback is deeply appreciated in advance. 

Edited by Summer Days
Needed more explanation, so added bridge to lyrics.

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Thank you so much Peggy, I can't wait to hear your feedback, it means a lot to me to get any and all opinions.

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Hi, Summer Days,

 

I understand the angel/devil imagery, but I'm confused about  some parts of the story.  For example, in V2:

"Then we started talkin'

but she fell to realize"---do you mean she "failed" to realize? or she fell to the devil's level and realized something?

 

In V3:  

As we began to grow,

I refused to recognize----

how this angel stole this devils soul,

and changed his foolish pride--/

.....

N' it was hard to believe,

I had to let my angel go---

 

Here we have the angel stealing the devil's soul, and CHANGING his foolish pride.  So why did he have to let her go (since he was changing/coming around)? And if he wasn't changing, why was it hard to believe he had to let her go, since he said in V1 that angels & devils didn't go together.  More clarity in the verses would help keep the listener on track and engaged.

 

Your verses are different lengths and I'm not sure if that's on purpose.  V1-4 lines; V2-8 lines; V3-8 lines; V4-11 lines?  Why the difference?

 

Also, the 4th line of V4--did you leave something out? "and fire--- began fall--"

Plus, the way it's written now that fire is pretty busy: rolling DOWN the mountains, blazing TO the skies, fallen FROM the skies (did you mean "fallen" or "falling?")

 

Songs are so short that every word matters.  I think you have a good idea going here and just need to focus on saying exactly what you mean, and keeping your metaphors consistent.

 

Good luck to you.  This song has possibilities.

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47 minutes ago, Patty Lakamp said:

Hi, Summer Days,

 

I understand the angel/devil imagery, but I'm confused about  some parts of the story.  For example, in V2:

"Then we started talkin'

but she fell to realize"---do you mean she "failed" to realize? or she fell to the devil's level and realized something?

 

In V3:  

As we began to grow,

I refused to recognize----

how this angel stole this devils soul,

and changed his foolish pride--/

.....

N' it was hard to believe,

I had to let my angel go---

 

Here we have the angel stealing the devil's soul, and CHANGING his foolish pride.  So why did he have to let her go (since he was changing/coming around)? And if he wasn't changing, why was it hard to believe he had to let her go, since he said in V1 that angels & devils didn't go together.  More clarity in the verses would help keep the listener on track and engaged.

 

Your verses are different lengths and I'm not sure if that's on purpose.  V1-4 lines; V2-8 lines; V3-8 lines; V4-11 lines?  Why the difference?

 

Also, the 4th line of V4--did you leave something out? "and fire--- began fall--"

Plus, the way it's written now that fire is pretty busy: rolling DOWN the mountains, blazing TO the skies, fallen FROM the skies (did you mean "fallen" or "falling?")

 

Songs are so short that every word matters.  I think you have a good idea going here and just need to focus on saying exactly what you mean, and keeping your metaphors consistent.

 

Good luck to you.  This song has possibilities.

Oh my goodness lol, yeah I'm on a small cell phone , and some words changed through spell check, should have been fallin' as falling with g left out. And I thought about maybe a bridge in between verses to explain more, but was afraid of being too lengthy. Maybe take out one chorus n add some verses to fill in the gaps? What do you think?  

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I'll look forward to your next revision.

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Just now, Summer Days said:

Oh my goodness lol, yeah I'm on a small cell phone , and some words changed through spell check, should have been fallin' as falling with g left out. And I thought about maybe a bridge in between verses to explain more, but was afraid of being too lengthy. Maybe take out one chorus n add some verses to fill in the gaps? What do you think? I just added bridge at ending, I'm still not to happy about it though, I may change it up again.

Yeah, I meant some verses longer some shorter, as a (4/4 I think)   still learning music though, so unsure, but the shorter verses hold longer notes, and the lengthy verses are to be sung with faster melody.

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SD 

pretty  good 

 being long is good as it gives the whole story 

 

john

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