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You comments appreciated, many thanks.

 

Rushing                            David Ritchie 

 

Staring at this strange new ground

                             

taking in the things I’ve found,

 

I’d best sit back           not dance so fast

                                                       

‘cause time is short let’s make the music last

Chorus:

 

So let’s raise our hands

And lift our glass                                 

Enjoy our life before it’s past                             

Live life fully, make it last

 

 

I’m thankful for the life I’’ve had

                              

It’s always been with you

                                     

I chanced upon you long ago

                              

Changed my point of view

 

                                          

Now let’s try that road less traveled

                                    

There’s no need for us to rush

                                         

We’ll slow down and find our way

                                             

And dance in the middle of the day

 

Chorus:

 

So let’s raise our hands

And lift our glass                                   

Enjoy our life before it’s past                             

Live life fully, make it last

 

                  

Have you ever lost serenity

                         

With never ending rushes

                                                    

A time where things don’t seem to matter

                               

Do you dream of places faraway

 

                                       

Prepare ourselves to start again

                                    

That’’s a lesson hard to learn

 

Follow our passions we’ll be fine

                                

And of the future…….unconcerned.

                         

 

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MikeRobinson    146

Lots of good ideas here – "let's lift our glass," "have you ever lost serenity," and especially, "dance in the middle of the day."  I do feel that some of the verses could be tightened to give them similar strong images.  This is a refreshing "feel good" song about a person who is very much in love, very happy to be so, and very confident about his relationship.  And, it does feel good.

 

Not quite sure why in the last verse they "prepare themselves to start again," or why "that's a hard lesson to learn."  The second half of that verse doesn't seem to need the first, and the first introduces an unexpected hint of darkness coming at the very end of the song with nothing prior to suggest it.

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Thanks, Mike. Good thoughts. The theme of the song is slowing down after retiring, and preparing to start a new phase of life, starting again. Having done just that, I was amazed how challenging it was. Does that make more sense?

David

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