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Yeah right not your fault lol!

Looks like a one horse race here John! 1-0 to the lyricists

Lol bro. Glad you got a sense of humour dont ever lose your sense of humour or you will be doomed! enjoy your coffe i just had some tea.

Sorry James but I had to I had to I tell you! My name is James, I was born with a willy Yeah my name is James, I was born with a willy I only used it thrice, now it looks well kinda silly I await your retribution, lol

Love this kinda banter great micky taking lyrics on your part Tom. I must say I've been married for 36 yrs this year same woman of course so I cant share your pain otherwise I would lol! Shes been my rock to be a little cliche. all the best guys great stuff

Well heres a different lyric but based on the same structure as Toms idea. Very many doubts but I have given it a shot. Cheers Les I Got It Bad I got it bad, an I'm gonna take a fall Ooh yeah I got it bad, an I'm gonna take a fall I know she'll strip me to the bone, nail my skin to her wall But I got a craving, I gotta craving for her flesh Ooh yeah I got a craving, got a craving for her flesh I know she'll chew me up, toss me right out in the trash I'm gonna leave town, take the midnight train Ooh yeah I'm gonna leave town, take the midnight train I gotta get away from her, before she drives me insane

sorry no full lyric as of yet but getting ideas as i go. I will post asap with my offering.

Big thanks to you both, now I have base to build on I will try and write to that. Thanks boys you are the best. Les

Thanks Tom, heres a link to my idea of how it should sound or similar anyway. Les

Ok Been listening to some blues while driving and I think Ive got the an idea of this but and most likely I am wrong. Here's an A section, am I on the right track? Needs work lyrically but more on the way its written and you hear it thats what Im after. Its D day, we've signed our love away Yeah its D day baby, we've signed our love away You've taken everything I own Now I ain't got no, place too stay Cheers most knowlegable ones you are my mentors. Les

Thanks Tom I have not tried this style before so I didnt understand the structure. I will plod on reading and listening to songs and tey and get something done. Thanks Gary and Tom for your input, most helpful as always. Cheers Les

Out of curiosity guys does this qualify? Still experimenting and reading stuff but your thoughts appreciated. Needs work and the 3rd line 2nd verse does not rhyme as in the 1st verse with the internal rhyme, does it matter? Its D day we signed the papers today Yeah its D day we signed the papers today We signed our love away now theres nothing to say Yeah its D day we signed the papers today I gave that woman my every breath Yeah I gave that woman my every breath She gladly took it all now theres nothing left Yeah I gave that woman my every breath Cheers Les

Cheers Gary you are always helpful much appreciated. Tom I got a melody and this sounds just like I wanted too in my head of course. I guess this is a good structure like Gary was saying to emulate for this challenge or similar. Nice write and I bet it will sound real good. Les

Just my opinion but I thought the " put me on ice" seemed rushed? Like you tried to cram it in? You know I'm no musician but thats what I thought. I think I might be out of my depth with this challenge as I dont really know blues or much else for that matter when it comes down to music styles and how they should be structured I just put pen to paper and hope it comes out right. Cheers for your comment and always appreciated as you know. Good luck Les

Cheers I will look at this some more tonight. Thanks Les