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Thanks, John! Daddies and Daughters https://open.spotify.com/track/1Nur6CM6zB3ufu3U6xxj5T?si=5932bdf361a449a6 https://youtu.be/ADG0CNHxkE0 SING ALLELUIA TO THE LORD https://open.spotify.com/track/5DNU1fSIaYFjU2IWRpVQJu?si=73306d7c4863445a https://youtu.be/wvGw2sdiXRY You Comfort Me https://soundcloud.com/jamestoffee/2020-6-you-comfort-me-1?utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing https://open.spotify.com/track/76yX96pJWKcarzS4qp0lLz?si=08da0f5d118b4c42 https://youtu.be/tDl22tB-1sI

Fun topic!

Hi Les, I like the ambiguity of the comic strip. It seems open to many interpretations. >I can't make this link to "Ivor has a message he wants the song to deliver: "There is no such thing as perfect, and that is okay". For me, the link is everyone is assuming they are lacking something or the "hole" in their life has to be filled (they are less than perfect).....but consider that maybe nothing is lacking.....accept they are fine the way they are....like the the singer running against the wind....acceptance of who he/she is and what he/she has, or doesn't have. Thanks for the listen and post. James

Hi Tom, Thanks for sharing your concerns. It seems a bit catch 22 to want to create something "original" meaning not done by anyone before, but you want it to be pleasing and liked by yourself and others....the commonalities of what people like have to have something in common, but having something in common musically means someone will have done something like it before. >James -- An interesting take on the subject indeed, but I don't think it's exactly the same issue. I saw the parallel as photography being related to the visual world and songs/music to the auditory world. Thanks again. James

Here is my submission: http://forums.songstuff.com/topic/39853-challenge-46-there%E2%80%99s-a-large-gaping-hole-in-everyone/?p=256220

Comic by Dresden Codak http://dresdencodak.com/wp-content/gall ... e_wind.jpg There’s a large gaping hole in everyone There’s a large gaping hole in everyone While it’s not uncomfortable it’s just a large gaping hole There’s a large gaping hole in everyone It’s widely considered unsightly It’s widely considered unsightly While it’s not uncomfortable it’s just a large gaping hole There’s a large gaping hole in everyone Some people fill it with religion Others just buy a bunch of stuff And some even fill it with other folks There’s a large gaping hole in everyone Solo But I left my alone I left my alone ‘Cause I found if you run against the wind If you run against the wind at just the right angle It makes a whistling noise There’s a large gaping hole in everyone There’s a large gaping hole in everyone While it’s not uncomfortable it’s just a large gaping hole There’s a large gaping hole in everyone LANDR-Y13W2 Theres A Large Gaping Hole in Everyone.mp3

Here is an interesting take on the subject: http://sethgodin.typepad.com/seths_blog/2014/11/of-course-its-been-done-before.html

Hi John, A lot of great advice there Here's what I posted last week regarding my songwriting process in the topic In Topic: Writing Lyrics - Do You Know What To Write About? : http://forums.songstuff.com/topic/39092-writing-lyrics-do-you-know-what-to-write-about/#entry254829 I often start with the lyrics..... Once I have an idea, I can get to finishing the song.... Until I have I idea, I have a routine that I follow until I find the idea to write about. I often start with a title then ask a lot of questions about that title. For example: What does the title mean literally? What does the title mean figuratively? Asking the W questions: Who is saying this title and to whom? Why are they saying it? Where are they saying it? When in the day, calendar year, when in the relationship (beginning middle end)?.....etc If no ideas came, I find rhymes for each word in the title (Pat Pattison's idea)....this not only gives me rhymes, but also sparks ideas of what the song can be about. If no ideas came, I'll Google some quotes or jokes about what topic might fit the title. If no ideas came, I sleep on it and see what my first thoughts are in the morning.....I'm no longer surprised when I get the idea during a morning shower. Usually by this point and idea has come.....but..... If no ideas came, I'll take a musical approach......I'll sing the title 3 times as the chorus to see how the words fit. If I like the chords, I'll think of the tension chord I want going into the chorus Then I'll think of the verse chords that contrast the chorus If an idea still doesn't come, I will start writing a first line and then keep asking, "And then what.....and then what,,,, and then what" I write a song a week. (and have been doing so for the past 6 years) By committing a week to an idea, an idea almost always gets made into a song. Once I finish the song of the week, I spend the rest of the time reading or doing something regarding songwriting to keep learning. Having developed a routine helps me make the most of my waiting time until I get that idea.

Hi Donna, Thanks for the listen and post Agreed Thanks for the confirmation. Nice example, too. It does keep the gist and smooths the message. >But it's just one person's observation, so keep or sweep. Yes, that's all we can offer, and I appreciate your time in doing so. I'll keep thinking on you points. Thanks for sharing. James

Hi Les, Thanks for the listen and critique; especially in sharing your vision of an alternative arrangement on the lyrics. I tried playing through with the new line order, but for me, the contrasting lines were spread too far apart and had a whiplash feel....probably similar to what you felt in the original lines regarding the 100s of years separation between Jesus birth and Santa Claus I was setting up a contrast by stating an event from God's POV and comparing it to mankind's (or the world without God) POV ie Christmas - God says birth of Jesus....World without God says Santa Claus ...same in vs 2 >to be honest i am not to keen on the last line of V1, might be the polka dots lol! That's ok. I thought it helped heighten the distance between what Easter was meant to be ( a remembrance of the crucifixion and resurrection of Jesus) and how it is celebrated today by a world without God....a bunny giving candies and eggs. ...vs 3 the future will be a coming together of POVs from God and world without God as recorded in the Bible. Then the bridge is the world without God questioning, "What did God say about events in the past and future?" >I hope you don't mind? I don't mind the suggestions at all. I appreciate your sharing. Thanks again for the feedback. -James

LOL Thanks for the listen and post

Here is my submission: http://forums.songstuff.com/topic/39730-45-we-didnt-know-you-are-god/

#45 We Didn't Know You Are God http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12958295 When you came to us as baby we were at a loss So we gave a man a bright red suit and called him Santa Claus When you said you were a king, we hung you on a cross We made chocolate bunnies and Easter eggs with bright pink polka dots Chorus We didn't know You We didn't know You We didn't know You are God When you came to us like a plague who was there to blame? The priests took all our money to pray for our mistakes When the church went to work killing in your name We gathered all the black sheep and burned them at the stake chorus solo When you come to us again riding on the clouds Every tongue will confess and every knee will bow The wonderment and fear is spreading through the crowds chorus Hey, what’d you say, Oh Son of Man? Hey, what’d you say, Oh Son of Man? Hey, what’d you say, Oh Son of Man? Hey, what’d you say, Oh Son of Man? LANDR-LANDR-Y13W1 We Didnt Know You Are God2.mp3

I often start with the lyrics..... Once I have an idea, I can get to finishing the song.... Until I have I idea, I have a routine that I follow until I find the idea to write about. I often start with a title then ask a lot of questions about that title. For example: What does the title mean literally? What does the title mean figuratively? Asking the W questions: Who is saying this title and to whom? Why are they saying it? Where are they saying it? When in the day, calendar year, when in the relationship (beginning middle end)?.....etc If no ideas came, I find rhymes for each word in the title (Pat Pattison's idea)....this not only gives me rhymes, but also sparks ideas of what the song can be about. If no ideas came, I'll Google some quotes or jokes about what topic might fit the title. If no ideas came, I sleep on it and see what my first thoughts are in the morning.....I'm no longer surprised when I get the idea during a morning shower. Usually by this point and idea has come.....but..... If no ideas came, I'll take a musical approach......I'll sing the title 3 times as the chorus to see how the words fit. If I like the chords, I'll think of the tension chord I want going into the chorus Then I'll think of the verse chords that contrast the chorus If an idea still doesn't come, I will start writing a first line and then keep asking, "And then what.....and then what,,,, and then what" I write a song a week. (and have been doing so for the past 6 years) By committing a week to an idea, an idea almost always gets made into a song. Once I finish the song of the week, I spend the rest of the time reading or doing something regarding songwriting to keep learning. Having developed a routine helps me make the most of my waiting time until I get that idea. Here is a link where I post my song-of-the- week: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=896900&content=music

Hi Les and Sandy, Thanks for the listen and post James