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Posts posted by Giomarco
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These rhymes are crazy man haha
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Looking for some feedback, I want to know if it's worth to continue this because I'm using a similar rhyme scheme for another song and I'd have to choose one of the two for a release,
this is the first and only verse I have so far for this song;Head over heels for you
Blood I would spill for you
Always been here for you
T'was what I was instilled to do
Lent an ear for you,
Spent a year with you
Then he appeared to you, you smeared me away
was it even clear to you?What this thing meant to me?
Now you're dead to me,
No respect for you?
What you expect to see
Forget what I said to you
and don't lecture me
I think I'm bout to puke
remembering your face pressed to me
You were my ecstasy
I even begged to be
Next to you, but what lead to be
A tragedy of a fantasy
But I pulled up my pants to see
If we had a chance to be(then it would proceed to the chorus if I had one, preferably ending with "fell" as I start the verse with "head over heels with you")
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Nice and clean, this is pretty tight
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I'm a pretty big eminem fan but that last cd line had me snickering. This is dope man.
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Hey whoever's reading this, I'm an aspiring music artist/lyricist I joined this site to get some criticism on what I'm writing. I was originally gonna skip this step seeing that not many people drop by in this section but I felt that I needed to show that I actually respect common courtesy so I just wanted to drop by and say hi.
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I appreciate that man, I'll keep working on it