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You treat me like a child it's sickening
Rapping on my choices I make so threatening 
Tell me what you want from me I'm guessing 
Never right,always wrong,so depressing 

 

I try my best, it's never enough
I do what I can,you don't give a f*ck
Striving hard to do things right 
No matter what we always fight
Bicker back and forth like little kids
Our little one sits and takes it in
All the arguing embedding him

 

Mom would always win
Cause I had no fight within
Felt discouraged I gave up
Have two others I raised with luck
The fruits of my labor turned out to be
My greatest accomplishment I can't believe
But now distance isolates us from each other
Forever here but out of reach 
I wish this didn't hurt so bad

 

I try my best, it's never enough
I do what I can,you don't give a f*ck
Striving hard to do things right 
No matter what we always fight
Bicker back and forth like little kids
Our little one sits and takes it in
All the arguing embedding him

 

Beg and plead I try to help
Never good enough with you at all
Put me down I feel knocked out
Only to stress causing ailing health
I'm at my end with all your hell

 

I try my best, it's never enough
I do what I can,you don't give a f*ck
Striving hard to do things right 
No matter what we always fight
Bicker back and forth like little kids
Our little one sits and takes it in
All the arguing embedding him

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Great effort! I like the story you tell and how you make it clear for out standers.

Maybe there will be some work for example this verse:

On 18-2-2017 at 11:10 PM, JBoy said:

Beg and plead I try to help
Never good enough with you at all
Put me down I feel knocked out
Only to stress causing ailing health
I'm at my end with all your hell

But it's a nice work keep going!

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On 20-2-2017 at 8:42 PM, JBoy said:

That last line was exactly what I had before I changed it lol. Thank bro!

Sorry I missed a word in my comment and think you might not have understood it therefore.

I meant there's a little work on rhyming and that verse was an example of a part I thought needed some adjusting.

So I didn't change anything haha sorry for the misunderstanding! ;)

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