My First Rap

[AD Unser]

Red Ink

 

By A.D. Unser

 

Can't come up with the words I wanted,

My creativity is stunted.

Full of stress and anger, got my mental behavior in danger,

Yell a curse at the savior.

Now I'm writing in red, hurting in my head.

Just don't know what I want said.

I don't feel it, think I lost my touch.

'Bout ready to bust.

Guess I lost trust in my own mind,

Wish there was a rewind.

Back to the days when imagination was a gold mine.

What is the problem?

When I put my pen to paper,

just get a blank stare.

No vision in my eyes or mind,

only hate there.

Through and through, creativity fallen to fury.

I'm starting to worry,

Thoughts are a flurry.

Need to find a way to keep myself sturdy.

For so long I've been lost in my disbelief.

Everyone I meet, creatin' imaginary beef.

Of course I always knew I was my own fall,

Even when I was a kid playing b-ball.

Couldn't make a friend from a teammate,

Cause I decided I would hate.

And I often ask myself if it's too late,

look around and I'm alone.

Hangin' at home with no ringin' on my phone.

So I decided to drop the act,

With myself I'm gonna make a pact.

Start living in love instead of anger,

And say goodbye to the bitterness inside my head,

So maybe I can stop writing in red.

 

 

 

[Beant Singh]

This is sick, often it can be hard to find the flow when you're just reading the lyrics. But I definitely can see where you're going with this. I rate this a lot. I like how the end relates to the start with the "writing in red" part. Dope work man, keep it up

[Loose Logic]

i like the idea... most artists would relate to this topic I would imagine.. i would work on your structure for text (if this is going to translate into a recorded verse the text structure doesn't matter as much) but i would work on multi syllable rhymes ... play with different poetic devices to enhance your writing/imagery/impact  ... for a first attempt at a "Rap" it isn't bad but it is about what i would expect.

 

keep at it if this is something you want to continue!