The Vampire

[Mora Amaro La Loba]

HOla!! I hope you are well there!!!

This song is dark, a style in which I move at ease, it is strange to many ears but I know it has something, at least for me, that captures attention.
Are we vampires of ourselves?

Stay safe

Mora

 

 

Today I have to visit 
my vampire

She is calling me
she needs my soul
to stay alive
she is my vampire

 

She looks so pale 
when I enter into the fog 
of the parfume she emanates
to make me sleep 
and have a sip of me

 

She is just a flower 
of death in life
closed in the cave 
of my temples

 

Dresses in night and whispers
poor prisoner
with so much cold 
into the hole of her heart

my vampire

 

She is just a flower 
of death in life

 

She is calling me
she needs my soul
to stay alive

she is my vampire

Edited April 4, 2022 by Mora Amaro La Loba

[GregB]

Mesmerising video and trance-like music as always.

 

Bravo!

 

Greg 👍

[MikeRobinson]

Love it.  But – the only thing that I would do to this is to get rid of(!) the voice processing.  Let the singer do the part "absolutely straight," or with any dramatic inflections that he comes up with while doing the take.  I think that this will naturally produce a very strong – maybe sinister – contrast with the "processed sound" of the track against which he is singing.

 

I definitely encourage you to try it out.  Both Psycho and Silence of the Lambs have shown us how powerful such a juxtaposition might be.

 

Both this lyric and this setting are already strong enough that I really think it might make the final result stronger yet.  Ask the singer to sing the part "as a voice actor."  Then, use echo, reverb, other tricks to make it even more "sepulchral."  (No ... that's not quite what I mean. I don't mean to trivialize it.)

Edited April 4, 2022 by MikeRobinson

[Clay Anderson Johnson]

On 4/1/2022 at 1:45 PM, Mora Amaro La Loba said:

HOla!! I hope you are well there!!!

 

Once again the same to you Mora! 

 

I love the way you use blank verse.  There are far too many moon/june, same/came, colder/bolder perfect rhymes in use by people who try to be poetic without knowing what poetry is actually about.

 

This is similar to people not knowing the difference between a work exhibited on Showcase and one which is up for Critique.

Edited April 4, 2022 by Clay Anderson Johnson

[Mora Amaro La Loba]

On 4/3/2022 at 10:53 AM, GregB said:

Mesmerising video and trance-like music as always.

 

Bravo!

 

Greg 👍

Hola Greg!! Thank you so much for your nice comment! Stay well

Mora

[Mora Amaro La Loba]

On 4/4/2022 at 11:36 PM, MikeRobinson said:

Love it.  But – the only thing that I would do to this is to get rid of(!) the voice processing.  Let the singer do the part "absolutely straight," or with any dramatic inflections that he comes up with while doing the take.  I think that this will naturally produce a very strong – maybe sinister – contrast with the "processed sound" of the track against which he is singing.

 

I definitely encourage you to try it out.  Both Psycho and Silence of the Lambs have shown us how powerful such a juxtaposition might be.

 

Both this lyric and this setting are already strong enough that I really think it might make the final result stronger yet.  Ask the singer to sing the part "as a voice actor."  Then, use echo, reverb, other tricks to make it even more "sepulchral."  (No ... that's not quite what I mean. I don't mean to trivialize it.)

 

Hola @MikeRobinson

 

I see that you get excited visualizing improvements and possible changes in my music!!!
Thank you very much for your time and your advice although the video is already like this!!!
I'm looking forward to hearing something from you.

Saludos!

Mora

[Mora Amaro La Loba]

On 4/5/2022 at 12:06 AM, Clay Anderson Johnson said:

 

Once again the same to you Mora! 

 

I love the way you use blank verse.  There are far too many moon/june, same/came, colder/bolder perfect rhymes in use by people who try to be poetic without knowing what poetry is actually about.

 

This is similar to people not knowing the difference between a work exhibited on Showcase and one which is up for Critique.

Hola @Clay Anderson Johnson

I'm glad you're okay, restlessness disguised as indifference walks around here....

Thank you very much for the support you give to my work, I am aware that my broken English is an important barrier and that many times I say words wrong but I am that daring or childish, it doesn't matter .

 

Poetry shouldn't have rules, but everything falls into the regulated world... I think poetry is in the eyes of whoever looks, listens, says or creates, I think poetry is in the eyes of the one who looks, listens, says or creates, for me listening to someone spontaneously whistling a melody can also be poetry.. hahaha

 

Stay safe

 

Mora

[Clay Anderson Johnson]

5 hours ago, Mora Amaro La Loba said:

I am aware that my broken English is an important barrier

 

There is nothing wrong with your English.  😁