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Here's a song I wrote to express an attempt at a country southern rock song. All I play it for seem to like it. Very memorable chorus. Critique please.
I'm the Hick
By The Rev Jaystone
I live in the country on a gravel road
My wife my dog leave us alone
We take a pride in our simplicity
To Hunt and fish live naturally
My heart is free and I believe
In my God guns and my family
So Why can't you show me some respect
Cause don't you know that I'm the hickChorus
So don't you tempt me
Cause I will recompense
Yes I am the hick
That'll kick your ass you wimpLike a gnat you're bothering me
Speaking with harsh words foolishly
I warned you before that I'm the hick
Now It's fight night in the sticksChorus. Repeat
Bridge
I live by what is an unwritten code
To drink Jim Beam so very ice cold
Fire up some good ol homegrown
If you dislike us then leave us aloneChorus repeat
Yes I am the crazy hick
No I'm not a red neck
Yes I'm the crazy hick
That kicked your ass you wimp -
This is a song I wrote about a relationship coming to its conclusion. I wish I had a singer who'd wanna work on this and my many other songs. So check these lyrics out let me know. Ty The Rev. Jaystone
Falling
By The Rev Jaystone
and she says to me
why are you still here
have you not noticed
the sign are everywhere
Pre Chorus
and she has struck a nerve
took more than she deserved
stealing my heartbeat
gone but I'm breathing
Chorus
SO CAN YOU TAKE ME AWAY
MEMORIES I CAN'T ERASE
AND NO ONE CAN FEEL MY PAIN
I FEEL LIKE IM FALLING
So tired of chasingflowers that Wilt away
and she says to me
there is no other way
Pre Chorus
And she has struck a nervetook more than she deserve
Stealing my heartbeat
Your arrows still piercing
Chorus
SO CAN YOU TAKE ME AWAY
MEMORIES I CAN'T ERASE
AND NO ONE CAN FEEL MY PAIN
I FEEL LIKE I AM FALLING
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Love Song Challenge 3 - The Break Up
in Writing Challenges
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Ty for critique it's how I wrote the music to it. The chorus comes in with the hook. Anthemic sounding if that makes sence. But I could give lyrics more depth. I tried to write it simple but ty