[Just a Freestyle. Please Give Feedback]

its a all round nice piece bro! few changes here and there and you may have a nice track.what sound of beat goes with this?was you going accapella?

[FREESTYLE]

My effort at freestyle

 

SEE HIM,SLAY HIM AND EVERYONE WHO’S WITH HIM

PUSSY HAD IT COMING AND HIS 0* RATING

WIGGA TRIED TO RUSH ON ME

BECAUSE HIS BITCH SHE FLASHED HER BUSH AT ME

I REALLY WISH I DIDNT SEE

THAT SKANKY HO IN FRONT OF ME

 

SLAP SLAP SLAP TO THE SIDE OF HER CHEEK

SHE’S DOWN

CRACK CRACK CRACK IS THE SOUND OF YOUR KNEES

YOU DOWN

 

I TOLD YOU NOT TO COME AT THIS

THE NIGHT THAT YOU WAS SAYING SHIT

SEE YOU THINK YOUR A  BLOOD OR CRIP

SUFFER TILL I EMPTY CLIP

 

I SAID WHEN I FIND IMA KEEP YOU GUESSING

WEATHER YOU DIE WITH A MAC OR MY SMITH N WESTERN

BUT YOUR TIME HAS COME

IM GONNA VIDEO RECORD IT AND SEND TO MUM

THAT HER SON IS A PUSSY AND HE HAD IT COMING 

AND WHEN YOUR ONLINE DONT GO RUNNING…

YOUR MOUTH

CAUSE ILL MAKE YOU GO SOUTH 

IN THE DIRT

INTERRUPT THE FUNERAL

WATCH YOUR FAMILY HURT

MAKE YOUR MOMMA CRY

KICK THE SOIL IN HER EYE

[you f*cked it (warning)]

my man

[IT'S THE TRUTH]

where are you in this mic game
all you bitches rap the same

IT'S THE TRUTH
 

and you know my rhymes are deep
you wanna put on your pad and keep
 

IT'S THE TRUTH
 

now i dont mean to offend im just sayin
when you hear my name on your knees start prayin
come up against me and i make your rhymes sound cute
bitch dont square up when you dont have the attributes
to do something about it
acting like a gangster when your so f*cking far from it
IT'S THE TRUTH
when you go too far out comes the mac
11 bullets sprayin in all your bitches backs
oh sorry you aint done
2 in the kneecaps so you cant get up and run
stand over your body blaze on the cheese
stand over your body watch a bitch bleed

IT'S THE TRUTH (X3).......

 
Yo where's Charlie?
This is my FIRE IN THE BOOTH

[MY SUPERHERO]

MY SUPERHERO

 

(CHORUS)

 

As you swoop down in your cape and long blonde hair

Make being a superhero look easy with your style and your flair

And always know the danger,never makes a sound

But has enough power to put you 6ft in the ground

MY SUPERHERO (x3)

 

(v1)

 

In your spare time baby you are a thing of beauty

ready to be the saviour

To all the men,women and babies

And you really dont see

All the good things you do

But my idol thats just you

No regard for your own safety

As long as we are rescued safely

MY SUPERHERO (x2)

 

 

(CHORUS)

 

As you swoop down in your cape and long blonde hair

Make being a superhero look easy with your style and your flair

And always know the danger,never makes a sound

But has enough power to put you 6ft in the ground

MY SUPERHERO (x3)

 

(v2)

 

Baby my heart almost skipped a beat

When you revealed your surprise

Fighting bad guys through you're disguise

But it made me love you more and more

And it’s what we are all fighting for

You risk your life every day

So to you i wanna say….you’re MY SUPERHERO (x3)

 

 

(CHORUS)

 

As you swoop down in your cape and long blonde hair

Make being a superhero look easy with your style and your flair

And always know the danger,never makes a sound

But has enough power to put you 6ft in the ground

MY SUPERHERO (x3)

 

(V3)

 

 

 

And as you swoop down…….MY SUPERHERO

I feel safe…..MY SUPERHERO

Saves the day ……MY SUPERHERO

Here to stay……MY SUPERHERO

 

 

 

My superhero (x2)

Saved my life

My superhero (x2)

saved my life

MY SUPER——HERO

written by David Smith 

copyright (r) 2017

[NA]

is this a sentence?

a poem?

certainly not a song....... work work work

[you f*cked it (warning)]

cheerrs!!!!!!!AHHH THANKS!! 

[you f*cked it (warning)]

AHHH THANKS!! 

[UglyGirl (WARNING SWEARING)]

decent 

[Love Song Challenge 3 - The Break Up]

I’M FALLING

 

 

(CHORUS)

 

Cause baby…..I'm falling…..I'm falling down so hard

Baby I’m calling

For help to fight this fight and hold me through the night

And never leave meeeeee

Cause baby I’m falling.

 

Against the cage as blows rain down upon me

Blood on my face black and blue from the beating

I can’t feel the pain anymore

Its just the way I’m feeling

 

(CHORUS)

 

I have a battle with life … oh baby its winning

Since the day you left my heads a mess and I’m quitting

I don’t want to see the light of day cause i really don’t deserve it

It will only be filled with pain

Cause baby you aint in it

 

I see this gun and think to myself…pull the triggerrrrr

Don't understand why people still point the fingerrrrr

Cause they don’t know me and they don’t know us

The things we went through

The way i love you

 

(CHORUS)

 

Tired of feeling alone, empty and broken

Eyes feeling heavy as i inhale the smoke in

Can’t rid this feeling of hurt and despair

Especially with the words I’m hearing

Cause i know its the haze putting my head in a daze

Makes me hurting…

 

(CHORUS)

 

I’m falling (x5)

Help me fight this fight

I’m calling (x5)

Hold me through the night

 

Hold me through the night…. cause baby I’m falling 

[you f*cked it (warning)]

my effort of a rap/hip-hop track......rate and feedback welcome guys

 

 

Snowflakes hitting my face

Icy winds fallen grace

Jingle bells,everyone happy

Rest my head near a dirty nappy

Used needles,empty bags of coke

No jingle bells this year 

My life’s a joke

 

See i messed up,one mistake

that one mistake brought all the hate

to my door,piling up to the third floor

no questions just hate 

no sympathy just people looking irate

see you don’t know

this is my life it aint a show

 

Now don’t get me wrong i aint saying its fine

i am no angel but lets draw the line

when I’m getting abuse in the street

its not fair and we need to meet

to sort shit

cause I’m not taking it 

time to stand up and make shit greater

get away from the little boy hater

 

Im better than you

i aint lying you know its true

your a joker,pathetic no hoper

and ill take you to school on this mic

ill say some shit you will not like 

but its coming….

words that will make you go running

cause your a fake

low life liar,a dirty snake

 

Im angry you think shit

and dont even say shit

go run and text shit

hide behind your self shit

and now im done with it

and this aint me you did it

being a sneak

lying to my face week after week

 

 

ill be the one laughing when im sorted and happy

and youll be lonely and feeling crappy

caused you f*cked it all up

and when i see you in the street there wont be a... what’s up

and i wont even care

for all i know its a stranger there

 

you f*cked this

now don’t go running your mouth to chris

cause he tells me

every little f*cking thing you got to say about me

so just go just go anywhere i dont know

but just be gone

or there will be a spot in the cemetary

room for one

 

WRITTEN BY DAVID SMITH