["Bullet To My Brain"]

On Sunday, November 29, 2015 at 2:40 PM, Jacoby said:

I can relate to this heavy man, I like how you detail what it's like to live in a rough environment to the point of where somebody who grew up privileged could put themselves in ya shoes. This is some good stuff dawg.

thank you bro. sorry I took so long to respond to your feedback. I haven't been on this site in months

[Twisted & Tangled]

This is really great bro. if u don't mind, could u checkout some of my shit and let me know what u think.

thanks

[pure love baby]

Try using more assonance in your rhymes than the more obvious sounds

["Dark Water"]

11 hours ago, Mahesh said:

Hi there,

 

As Hobo has mentioned the board guidelines, I had to remove your other topics. Please make sure you adhere to the guidelines. Let us know if you need help.

 

Thanks,

Mahesh

Sorry for not adhering to the guidelines. Next time I will respond to more of other peoples posts, but can u please put my songs back. I worked really hard on those.

thanks

["Bullet To My Brain"]

Chorus]

And I can’t help, but think it’s just another day
Nothing’s ever gonna change
It’ll always stay the same
And I wish I, could somehow find a way
To escape all of the pain
Sometimes I wanna put a bullet to my brain
Whoa, whoa, a bullet to my brain
Whoa, whoa, yeah

[Verse 1]

When I was younger I told my mother I’d have her covered
I’d pay the bills that give her chills just thinking about those f*ckers
Yeah we were poor as hell, everybody could tell
The family motto growing up was ‘Save Yourself’
When there’s nobody there to protect you from the hood
I was ten years old ain’t living like I should
Pistol cocked in my pocket just to get to school
Knife in my belt, no rules, shit was cruel
And life was like security, we couldn’t make it through
If you had to make money, you got it selling crack
And it made you think about how you got to where you’re at
Sometimes I’d put a gun to my head and cock it back
Every motherf*cking night I would stare into the black
And the only thing that ever made it better was rap
When I had nothing else, just a pen and a pad
Sitting by myself, writing songs about my dad
Wondering what happened to him, where the f*ck he was
Sitting in a cell by himself because of drugs
Wasting away, not giving a f*ck
I used to be the victim of the hood, getting pushed around
But after seeing everybody shot, you can’t hold me down
Everyday sirens and firing is the only sound
If you live where I’m from, you don’t f*ck around

[Chorus]

[Verse 2]

I would sit on the edge of my bed, hanging my head
Cause I couldn’t do shit when my mother was getting sick
I would work hard everyday, to bring home the bread
To end the suffering
If my mother was here now, I know she’d be loving it
I’d buy her a house, maybe two just for the f*ck of it
She’d never have to worry, never have to give up again
Never have to lose hope, when shit was getting tough again
Like when you’re on the streets, just trying to survive
And every f*cking day seems like a waste of time
You’re f*cked up and you feel like you’re losing your mind
And lately the only question you’re asking is why
So you go to the one thing you never thought you’d do
You f*cking swore to God you’d never put yourself through
But now you’re popping pills with a bottle of vodka
And realize that you look just like you’re motherf*cking father
But you don’t even care cause you’re so drunk and f*cked
We got a man down, someone call 9-1-1
Your mind’s racing back and forth
Wishing you were never born
Wishing that you didn’t have to suffer just cause you were poor
You’re looking for a way to escape all of the pain
Sometimes you wanna put a f*cking bullet to your brain

[Chorus]

[Verse 3]

Now I laugh in the face of death, knowing I’m blessed
And I never have to worry about money again
I graduated from the city where everybody’s depressed
And I thank God for rap, it took the weight off my chest
It helped me get through the worst, now I’m becoming the best
I’ll keep powering through, no one can put me to rest
Now everything from my past, is everything that I write
Everything that I rap, is everything from life
Like selling drugs in the hood, trying to stay tough
Do whatever it takes without giving a f*ck
I used to be bound by these chains on me
But now I’m praising The Lord, thank God that I’m free

[Chorus]

["Dark Water"]

Yeah the verse isn't quite finished yet

[Our World]

For advice on continuing, I might recommend comparing common aspects of life now (that aren't necessarily good) to how God intended it to be. For example, you could say something about going to prison at a young age because of drugs, and compare that to kids getting an education instead. If you think of if that way and stay generally on that same vein, you'll surprise yourself at how much you can come up with. Hope that helps.

["Dark Water"]

[Verse 1:]

Take the 'F' out, and get the true meaning of life
Mama said to survive, you gotta stay tough
Don't trip shit, just glide
So I keep a sweatshirt hood over my eyes
I see lyrics in my dreams, so I keep it dark inside
Haven't seen the light of day, since I learned how to write
To see beyond human thoughts, take a trip through my mind
Unwind, and rewind. Get your hands off, this time it's mine
Money talks and I swear it only tells lies
Cry wolf, Im'ma make you motherf*ckers whine
I ain't judging shit, I'm just bluffing man
Half a million people wouldn't be enough cover my ass
For the damage I've done, f*cking with your minds is only half of the fun
I just go with the flow, 'til I'm outta control
Would I end up part of the crowd? f*ck no
Cause the sound of footsteps, represents bullshit
Wipe your feet on the mat, and spell the words 'look back'
Everytime you run, it's in stride with pride
Of the people that are saying that the people never die
Cause vanity is taking precedence over time
But God's coming back with a fire in His eyes

[Messing around freestyle]

Great poetic flow. Its easy to read and I don't have to struggle to try to figure out how it should be. Well Done!!

[Atelophobia]

Damn bro, you gotta publish these songs so I can hear that on the radio. Shit's badass!!