Foxfire

Hi, just want to start by saying that I really like the sentiment of your lyrics. The chorus on the whole is good but the first line doesn't quite make sense - try changing "swoop down in" to swoop down with maybe, because otherwise it sounds like they're wearing long blonde hair rather than having long blonde hair. As for the verse, the rhyme scheme gets a little confused for me. For the first verse you're using half rhyme, but the second uses perfect rhyme which is just a bit inconsistent. Overall though I really like the extended metaphor and I think you've got a good idea here.