12 Times

[Kanonkalkon]

12 times

Vers:

You say to yourself you´ll never do it again

This was the last time you even told your friend

It so easy to se it clear from up here

Next time you´ll face it without fear

Refr:

Over and over and over again

12 times until the end

Whatever you say

Whatever you do

You can’t run away from you

Vers:

This is exactly what you said you wouldn’t do

If you only listened you´d have got through

But maybe it´s hard to see from down there

In darkness all you remember is fear

[BlackhawkFan]

You say to yourself you never do it again

[Kanonkalkon]

I think this is a typo -- replace "you" with "you'll"

Suggestion -- replace "you will" with the contraction, "you'll"

Suggestion -- replace entire line with "Over and over and over again"

Another typo? -- replace "you" with "you'd"

Suggestion -- replace "you would" with "you'd"

Typo -- replace "its" with "it's" ("it's" is the contraction for "it is")

Suggestion -- remove "can"

This is a good poem and will make a good part for a song. If I didn't think so, I wouldn't have gone all Grammar Nazi on you. I hope you understand.

Cho

[BlackhawkFan]

Thanks a lot!! English is not my native language so i really need it...

A friend of mine said to me that is scientificly proof that humans are likley to do the same mistakes and not learn from experience. On avarage 12 times i a lifetime....Just look at the stock market:=)

[Kanonkalkon]

Hello again,

Maybe I will put music to it myself and maybe a friend of mine also. But I don´t mind you also using the text to put music to it. It would be interesting to hear how it sound like.

Best Regards

Jonathan Linde

I have another text aswell that i wrote the same day its called don´t fall...

[BlackhawkFan]

Hello again,

Maybe I will put music to it myself and maybe a friend of mine also. But I don´t mind you also using the text to put music to it. It would be interesting to hear how it sound like.

Best Regards

Jonathan Linde

I have another text aswell that i wrote the same day its called don´t fall...