Hi I'm New, I Want Some Feedback On My Lyrics?

[justtryingtosing]

Hi guys,

So i just joined up, for mainly one reason; to get feedback on my lyrics...and whatnot.

So i'm just going to post one song for now and hopefully get some feedback, yeah?

Okay, here goes...

Verse1:

I'm just waiting

waiting for the right time

and im just contemplating

thinking about my life

maybe one day

i will find my way

ill be on the right road

for this story untold

it will unfold

right infront of me

verse2:

where you going, baby?

you've been acting shady lately

been making things feel not so right

been making me wait up for you all night

long, and i understand

that you, are doing what you can

but sometimes its just not enough

and things start feeling pretty tough

hook:

but you gotta keep going, yeah

just keep it flowing

and in the end you'll just make your way back to start

Thats how it is, because life is hard

chorus:

just go with it, baby

dont hold back from it

just hold on till you cant no more

find something thats worth living for

yeah, dont be ashamed of it

dont refrain from this

this is exactly who you're gonna be

its your life, you dont need to follow me, yeah

verse:

here we are again

saying things we've already said

im telling you "you need to leave this life behind"

you're telling me you cant say goodbye

just take a deep breath and

realise theres better than this, yeah

(chorus x2)

bridge:

you dont need me anymore

dont need me anymore

you can spread your wings

and fly away

im not gonna make you

try and stay

baby

just fly away

okay, so i know it's really random and probably doesnt sound very good (probably because i wrote it in about 5 minutes), and it isnt my usual style...but i thought i might try something different to see how people like this before i go straight into my style.

Thoughts?

[justtryingtosing]

Thanks, Will do!

[john]

Hey, welcome to Songstuff